a new song....

DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
edited January 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Well, I am up here in desert
Dancing in a disco
and I work it pretty happy
so the DJ wants to date me
But I am packing up this Hotel
and moving to Miami

It’s springtime in the badlands
and the sandman wants to scrape me raw
I’m a dreamer in a dead time
with a stupid, smashed life line
My pink umbrella and me
are moving to Miami

Where the Sunshine wants to rain on me
Aw, the Sunshine wants to rain on me

You can call it a vacation
or an extended leave of absess
I am out of patience, so I’m
finished picking prickers
Now I am going to Miami
where no one has to like me

I’ve seen a million spines go straight
Daunted Daunted
Why’s it gotta feel like every one them is lying!?!



(my partner says, "you're a poet... with music" and says it'd do me good to stop writing words for a while and focus on my guitar playing. it's so hard to step out of this modality! fug!!! so... for what it's worth... more lyrics... please help me with lines 1-3 ~ they make me wanna puke :D )
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  • I'm a Disco dancing desert
    All the pretty girls (they hate me)
    But I'm a camper, smiling
    so the DJ wants to date me
    Well I am packing up this Hotel
    and moving to Miami

    ????

    :)

    And this:

    "You can call it a vacation
    or an extended leave of absess
    I am out of patience, so I’m
    finished picking prickers
    Now I am going to Miami
    where no one has to like me

    I’ve seen a million spines go straight
    Daunted Daunted
    Why’s it gotta feel like every one them is lying!?!" --- LOVE IT!!!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • I would have to hear the music .. but a actually like them.
    I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

    www.myspace.com/lastgeneration56
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    The frisk is the fanatic
    and the cactuses are plastic

    But I'm a hiker, smiling
    so the DJ wants to date me

    Butl I am packing up this Hotel
    and moving to Miami





    muuuuuuch betta :)
    thanks for pointing me here
  • Well, I am up here in desert
    Dancing in a disco
    and I work it pretty happy
    so the DJ wants to date me
    But I am packing up this Hotel
    and moving to Miami

    The frisk is the fanatic
    and the cactuses are plastic

    But I'm a hiker, smiling
    so the DJ wants to date me

    so I'm packing up His/her hotel and moving to Miami


    *The song probably sings otself differently to me, what is it's mood?
    I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

    www.myspace.com/lastgeneration56
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    doo be doot doo doot doot


    ... a dancy rocker sort of thing ...
  • This may sound funny but i'm thinking in tems of " if you like my body and you think i'm sexy"... type vibe btu with a punk or indie type sound
    I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

    www.myspace.com/lastgeneration56
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    oh, it kinda does have that "loll" to it, perhaps :)

    eeghad, it might even be in the same key!
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