Again

DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
edited September 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Why the skin of a soft tan glows orange under slow light
where the heavens soft and blow on everything unsaid
The molassesies, the tiny aching, its bell pipe, the shine
It never wonders how not to, burning something in the way
but keeps appearing in the low light of one small flame
All orange. All delight.
The walnuts and the apricots, warming on the stove
Domesticity abandoned in a fine home
The smell of fall and the cool air dropping in the room
Window open after all the glue and paint it could use
Words are but the coldest gifts to the tongue tied hopeless
So, please don't mention it
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  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    that's just awesome rachel..

    i can't wait to open my windows :)
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • Flippin' awesome, {{Rachel}}! :)

    "Words are but the coldest gifts to the tongue tied hopeless
    So, please don't mention it" - Loved the end!!!!

    Luff you! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,412
    This did seem like an orange glow with cool misty air at the window!! Good job dear! :)
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    we were diving, me and my best friend, pretend
    we were diving, shallowish,
    the pool was not too deep
    we were swimming to the other end
    when...
    our lungs caught up
    to piss about the air...
    the lack thereof
    I remembered that.
    that, lack of air
    how
    A lack of air
    seemed so starry on mountain top

    stupid mop
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    we were diving, me and my best friend, pretend
    we were diving, shallowish,
    the pool was
    we were swimming to the other end
    when...
    our lungs caught up
    to piss about the air...
    the lack thereof
    I remembered that.
    that, lack of air
    how A lack of air
    seemed so starry on the mountain top

    stupid mop





    (stupid typos)
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    hey finsy?


    is my stuff all predictable and shit?
    knowwhatimean?
  • PastaNazi wrote:
    Why the skin of a soft tan glows orange under slow light
    where the heavens soft and blow on everything unsaid
    The molassesies, the tiny aching, its bell pipe, the shine
    It never wonders how not to, burning something in the way
    but keeps appearing in the low light of one small flame
    All orange. All delight.
    The walnuts and the apricots, warming on the stove
    Domesticity abandoned in a fine home
    The smell of fall and the cool air dropping in the room
    Window open after all the glue and paint it could use
    Words are but the coldest gifts to the tongue tied hopeless
    So, please don't mention it


    so beautiful..ty for sharing
    ...It's only after disaster that we can be resurrected...
    it's only after you've lost everything ...that you are free to do anything....(Fight Club)

    ... I'll ride the wave...where it takes me....
  • PastaNazi wrote:
    The walnuts and the apricots, warming on the stove
    Domesticity abandoned in a fine home
    The smell of fall and the cool air dropping in the room
    Window open after all the glue and paint it could use
    Words are but the coldest gifts to the tongue tied hopeless
    So, please don't mention it



    Keep this, and run with it - like the wind

    the first paragraph seems like your mind was meandering trying to catch hold of a thought, and you caught a beautiful one - now start with that
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    PastaNazi wrote:
    hey finsy?


    is my stuff all predictable and shit?
    knowwhatimean?


    I just read this, No, no, keep going, like ETE says!
  • PastaNazi wrote:
    we were diving, me and my best friend, pretend
    we were diving, shallowish,
    the pool was
    we were swimming to the other end
    when...
    our lungs caught up
    to piss about the air...
    the lack thereof
    I remembered that.
    that, lack of air
    how A lack of air
    seemed so starry on the mountain top

    stupid mop





    (stupid typos)

    :D That blasted mop! :p And I agree with the others--keep 'em comin', momma! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • my darling Miss Enlightened.... from where do your quote be coming? it's astounding!


    and hey... evil (and fins, too, and p_j_n) ~ thanks for your encouragement... it is very very much appreciated


    love, loves ;):D;)
  • PastaNazi wrote:
    my darling Miss Enlightened.... from where do your quote be coming? it's astounding!


    and hey... evil (and fins, too, and p_j_n) ~ thanks for your encouragement... it is very very much appreciated


    love, loves ;):D;)

    Me quotey is from a song called Curio by Barkmarket. I do believe it was written by David Sardy and I was actually recently pleasantly surprised to see that he produced the new Wolfmother! Nice! You should check it out, it's a pretty good album. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Why his skin in the soft
    glows orange under slow light
    heavens sigh and blow on everything
    left yet unsaid. The molassesies, the tiny
    aching, the bell pipe the bird jumped from, the white shine..

    It never wondered how
    not to, burning something in my way, but
    kept appearing in the low light of my small flame
    All orange. All delight. The walnuts and the apricots were

    Warming on the stove
    when the Domesticity abandoned
    out back for a bit. The fine home for a moment.
    The smell of fall and the cool air dropping in the room,
    onto you. Windows open after all the glue and paint they could use

    They used to call you Blue, but I say some still could.
    Nicknames are the coolest gifts to the tongue tied iceless, so
    please, don't mention it. I'd call you Orange if you knew
  • Why his skin in the soft
    glows orange under slow light
    heavens kiss and blow on everything
    left yet unsaid. The molassesies, the tiny
    aching, the bell pipe the bird jumped from, the white shine..

    It never wondered how
    not to, burning something in the way, but
    kept appearing in the low light of one small flame
    All orange. All delight. The walnuts and the apricots were...

    Warming on the stove
    Domesticity abandoned out back
    for a bit. The fine home for a moment.
    The smell of fall and the cool air dropping in the room,
    onto it. Windows open after all the glue

    They used to call him Blue, and I say some still could.
    Nicknames are the coolest gifts to the tongue tied icelesses, so
    please. Don't mention it? I'd call him Orange if he knew
  • PastaNazi wrote:
    Why his skin in the soft
    glows orange under slow light
    heavens kiss and blow on everything
    left yet unsaid. The molassesies, the tiny
    aching, the bell pipe the bird jumped from, the white shine..

    It never wondered how
    not to, burning something in the way, but
    kept appearing in the low light of one small flame
    All orange. All delight. The walnuts and the apricots were...

    Warming on the stove
    Domesticity abandoned out back
    for a bit. The fine home for a moment.
    The smell of fall and the cool air dropping in the room,
    onto it. Windows open after all the glue

    They used to call him Blue, and I say some still could.
    Nicknames are the coolest gifts to the tongue tied icelesses, so
    please. Don't mention it? I'd call him Orange if he knew


    :) I'm got a cool vibe off this one, Rache....sheesh, do you ever have a way with words! So pretty! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • thank you so much my lovely lady friend...

    hey... you and smitt come down and drink Sloppy Wets with us tonight, k?

    if you can't make IT
    then make yer own...

    4 parts cherry-infused vodka
    1 part sour apple schnapps

    shoot and kiss...


    :D:p:D
  • Oh, and he is trying, isn't he?

    Among the most infuriating instances of humanity lay something untouchable.
    Something only he knows he doesn't know yet.
    And is grasping?!? God, please say that he is grasping.
    Say that he is vertical, or horizontal to whichever horizon
    he is justified... say that he is moving and reaching.
    Hands and feet, one and then the other, going...
    There is this field, this fourth dimension.
    This patchwork of memory. This future known, and unknown all the same.

    Next to his field there is another, overlapping on its corners and its edges
    becoming weight and in the way, as all things overlapping are but never mean to be.

    Scrape us off, these edgies. The weights, the waits, the in-the-ways.
    Be we open grateful to these holier of nothings. These unions.
  • far too young to brittle and crack at dawn
    cover your nuts, minding feet and elbows
    turn, smile, talk football... it's all good
    you silly schitz, it's just a little kid
    little kids will be grown ups, soon enough
    a blip in the chance god gives us to be special
  • oh, (sigh), and this is over, too.
    my again and again reset,
    idling in march's retreater tonight (goodbye)
    yes but, slowly this time
    may's bygones in the wings (goodbye)
    you, my sweet tongue tied,
    bubble up come this November
    watch for now, (goodbye)
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