carving hearts

DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
where all the fish are buried, where trees
come up through the bones that won't rot
you'll find me staring at the ground wondering,
remembering, precisely. selecting which memories to keep
the navajo bury their placenta. my own
mother bubbled at a campfire enough to
make me sick. yet, here I am a hundred years
later lamenting the opalescent, deflated beginning
the cute photograph, the pile of bills, bank
statements, and reciepts. the record of our
companionship in the trash can outside
our old house for sale.

your grandmother dies and I cannot say goodbye
my stepmother dies and you continue to not care

where all the fish are buried, where trees
come up through the bones that won't rot
you'll find me laughing at your ridiculousness
just enough to hide the lie I believed I believed
on the surface, always knowing somewhere deep
inside you weren't even capable, child, new soul by
child, new soul. pathetic opalescent prophets of nothing,
frightened by our own true word

happy birthday to the friends we stole away
happy birthday to us, forgotten, again

where all the fish are buried, where trees
come up through the bones that won't rot
you'll find me carving hearts
initials...

as it were
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    there... that's better. always best to hold one's self accountable, as well.



    07/17/07

    carving hearts

    where all the fish are buried, where the tree
    comes up through the bones that won't rot
    you'll find me staring at the ground wondering,
    remembering, precisely. selecting which memories to keep
    the navajo bury their placenta. my own
    mother bubbled at a campfire enough to
    make me sick. yet, here I am a hundred years
    later lamenting the opalescent, deflated beginning
    the cute photograph, the pile of bills, bank
    statements, and receipts. the record of our
    companionship in the trash can outside
    our old house for sale.

    your grandmother dies and I cannot say goodbye
    my stepmother dies and you continue to not care

    where all the fish are buried, where the tree
    comes up through the bones that won't rot
    you'll find me laughing at our ridiculousness
    just enough to hide the lie I believed I believed
    on the surface, always knowing somewhere deep
    inside we weren't even capable, child, new soul by
    child, new soul. pathetic opalescent prophets of nothing,
    frightened by our own true word

    happy birthday to the friends we stole away
    happy birthday to us, forgotten, again

    where all the fish are buried, where the tree
    comes up through the bones that won't rot
    you'll find me carving hearts
    initials...

    as it were
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    I like this one PastaNazi. :)
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    gratsi, bella
  • bossman3188bossman3188 Posts: 263
    i really like this one :)
    there'll be time for laughin'
    there's no time to cry
    soon i will be leavin'
    look me in the eye
    no matter what's in front of me
    it's your face that i'll see
  • Astral StarAstral Star Posts: 129
    This is hauntingly beautiful. Graceful and full of melancholy. I can smell taste and touch the imagery here -thanks!
    "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to eachother." Mother Theresa
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Best one you've put up, but it's still a work in progress. It reads is if some wanker from poetryx who can't write or read has advised you about capitals.

    Stick them back in, woman.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    But fook, woman, you've done the business, here. ;)
  • Astral StarAstral Star Posts: 129
    Fins you're Hilarious!
    "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to eachother." Mother Theresa
  • Ian MIan M Posts: 123
    Yow! This one hits the spot, pushes all the buttons, ticks all the boxes, touches on the nerve, cuts down to the bone and then some other things I can't put my finger on - nice work!

    I didn't know how/why your 'mother bubbled at a campfire enough to make me sick' or where the fish were buried (are they ex-pets in the back garden, because otherwise I'd've thought fish died in water where trees don't generally grow? Or are they prehistoric fish fossilised as chalk? Or are they the discarded remains of some Navajo feast 100 years on?) but I didn't mind cos mystery is fine with me in this context.

    Liked the two 'opalescents' as well. Good job :)
  • reeferchiefreeferchief Posts: 3,569
    Awesome, I love this.:)
    Can not be arsed with life no more.
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    lol.... fins.... i've been writing poetry on this board so long, and it's such the ingrained mode of writing, that i often will come to the computer when i have that urge to write. these are always first drafts, and i almost always come back with first edits the next morning. then they sit... waiting for their final edit, into which capitalization, punctuation, logic and readability are placed...

    and... i've not been to po-x for a very long time. ;)


    (when i talk to publishing poets, they shake their heads when i tell em i write on a pearl jam website. they say they'd never ever consider writing without pen and paper... they think i'm nuts or something! but i say, "fuck a bunch of messy ink and scribbled out shit" i can't be creative with that crap in my way.)



    however, i do so appreciate your's and everyone else's like for this piece. thank you all very much for saying so :)

    :D
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Ian M wrote:
    Yow! This one hits the spot, pushes all the buttons, ticks all the boxes, touches on the nerve, cuts down to the bone and then some other things I can't put my finger on - nice work!

    I didn't know how/why your 'mother bubbled at a campfire enough to make me sick' or where the fish were buried (are they ex-pets in the back garden, because otherwise I'd've thought fish died in water where trees don't generally grow? Or are they prehistoric fish fossilised as chalk? Or are they the discarded remains of some Navajo feast 100 years on?) but I didn't mind cos mystery is fine with me in this context.

    Liked the two 'opalescents' as well. Good job :)


    when you plant a tree, you're supposed to fertilize it... i've heard one good way of doing that is to throw a fish in the hole. i've also heard that some indian tradition is to bury placentae to honor the birth of things in such a way that does not disgrace any part.
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    awesome
    i do like this quite a bit
    very very nice
    i like the tree and bones thingy alot
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
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