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this was better in my head.

blueinthefaceblueintheface Posts: 153
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I, the fool, the clown
the one that has a chance to smile
but forces himself to wear a frown.

LOVE, the power, the new
what was once a myth
i can now see is true

YOU, the beauty, the savior
as i stare and get lost in your eyes
i realize fate has done me the greatest favor.
"be a philosopher but, amid all your philosophy, be first a man" - david hume

Mitch Hedberg- RIP 1968-2005. your jokes have laughed me through a lot. I thank you.
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  • trappedinmyradiotrappedinmyradio Posts: 1,189
    blueintheface wrote:
    I, the fool, the clown
    the one that has a chance to smile
    but forces himself to wear a frown.

    LOVE, the power, the new
    what was once a myth
    i can now see is true

    YOU, the beauty, the savior
    as i stare and get lost in your eyes
    i realize fate has done me the greatest favor.

    sure, it's mushy - but it still sounds good outside of your head as well.
    I'll dig a tunnel
    from my window to yours
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    clowns are always mushy.....except in Sweden when they're slushy.....I really object to you calling this peom 'mushy'......I don't like that
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • burtschipsburtschips Posts: 734
    I think that's great..... nothing mushy about it to me, i thought it was quite muscular with the staccato.
    Salut baloo
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    I thought it was sweet! Very sweet, indeed! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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