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Wreckage ...rest in peace my love

edeneden Posts: 407
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Sifting through what you left of our life
each piece I retrieve turning to dust
hopes I could salvage something of use
the pieces so weakened by years of rust ..........

So young and hopeful, youths ignorance
longing for nights spent talking of dreams
too soon you showed me realities harshness
lonely though not alone, my silent screams

Pouring my heart into saving your soul
time going by, my pain unhealed
perfection unattainable , your heart unreachable
my efforts in vain ..your fate had been sealed

So suddenly our life came crashing down
under weighty years of anger on the shelf
grasping for something to steady our world
one final attempt to save you from yourself

Then begging faceless men " Just tell me hes alive!"..
arms holding me from running to where you were at
the strangers blue eyes filling with tears
as his mouth formed the words "I cant tell you that"

Tranquility washes over, youre finally safe, at peace with your tortured mind..
a year has come but hasnt gone as I visit you in the ground
constant regret that you wouldnt be saved
yet comfort my darling at the peace weve both found.

(I love you forever H.B. but more so, I forgive you..)
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Oh eden! This is so sad, so pretty and so

    "longing for nights spent talking of dreams
    too soon you showed me realities harshness
    lonely though not alone, silent screams"

    "but Im comforted at last at the peace weve both found"
    HONEST! Good work! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • edeneden Posts: 407
    Thank you..
    I was shy to post it but...
    its very healing and therapeutic (n all that stuff they tell me ....)
    to just put it out there :)
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    This flows really nicely, and then almost startles with the two deaths at once; one being the relationship. I'm almost stoped by the intensity of the last stanza.
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  • edeneden Posts: 407
    Bibliobella wrote:
    This flows really nicely, and then almost startles with the two deaths at once; one being the relationship. I'm almost stoped by the intensity of the last stanza.

    Ill take that as a high compliment coming from you.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    eden wrote:
    Thank you..
    I was shy to post it but...
    its very healing and therapeutic (n all that stuff they tell me ....)
    to just put it out there :)

    You're welcome! :) It can be healing to just lay it out there--free yourself.
    Don't be shy, sweetie! What have you got to lose? We're all just people and we each have different strengths and different styles, likes and dislikes...If the feeling takes hold, you just let it out and don't worry about what anyone else thinks! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Posts: 570
    This is the most moving piece on this board I've ever read. The sadness it brings is, ironically, what the beauty of it is. I almost had tears pouring out just reading it. Such pain....such anguish.....a living hell offered heaven.

    Just...wow. Thank you for sharing that.
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  • edeneden Posts: 407
    Wow..
    Thank you both so much :)
    Sunday was the one year anniversary of his death
    so Ive been a little emotional these past few days.

    He was what is referred to as a "functioning addict"
    he was sober for 4 years , started using again and was gone within 3 months.

    Im actually happier and more peaceful than Ive ever been, but its been a process.
    When he first died, I didnt know if I would survive it.
    Now Im able to put it all in perspective a bit more but mostly I want to use my life and writing to help other people touched by the horrible disease of addiction.
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