last minute scribblings........

rarghrargh-brownstar
rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
edited May 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
didnt work
will just have to wait :p
Rarghstarfarian.
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  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Archaic Heirlooms

    Awakening Remissions
    Transmissions of seconds
    No start,
    No finish,
    -noooo stop…..

    Feeling the sparkles and dust of sand
    Reminding me of sacred, corporeal treasures,
    Dunes washing away my arrogance
    Exchanging earth for meaning
    Pride is on my soles.

    Bliss is what I create of it……………….
    Recurring sandfolds, monthly renewals
    Of life and space, riving breath,
    “Persistence of memory” a Dali image
    Aide memoires of taste and touch,
    Will never take it away….time
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Jouissance.

    :)
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    interesting....

    i don't get the meaning, though... and while that is entirely my shortcoming, and i apologize... i still would like to know what you're saying here???

    i like the words as they are strung, but it feels like just as i am about to grasp comprehension, it elludes me
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Originally posted by PastaNazi
    interesting....

    i don't get the meaning, though... and while that is entirely my shortcoming, and i apologize... i still would like to know what you're saying here???

    i like the words as they are strung, but it feels like just as i am about to grasp comprehension, it elludes me
    lol!
    i love ur honesty
    thank u for posting
    i see what ur saying....
    just posted without any editing really....

    my bf wanted me to wait until it was tight
    and something tangible...but did i listen to him? no
    i think im gonna edit it some more
    and maybe not put up as first draft ( or the first thing i think)

    i really appreciate ur honesty
    :D thank u
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • pompey
    pompey Posts: 10
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    W.A.S.T.E.
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    lol pomps
    maybe i should post some poems
    after i get a little experience
    me is just a virgin still lol
    trying too hard as a beginner?
    miss u :(
    ( cant wait to see perchy)
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    raugh...

    like i said, i really do like some of the words you've strung together... i wouldn't put too much into editing, or preparing "final drafts" or whatever... there's no need to be perfect here, goodness knows i've writen a bazillion poems, totally on the fly, that suck. but i don't care. doing so often gets me through some bad emotion, or some other emotion that distracts me from my schtuff... if it works, it works, if it doesn't? ha ha, well then, sorry if i've wasted anyone's time... i'm not really here to impress anyone (though i LOVE when I do) i'm more here to emote myself, get sympathy sometimes, and maybe share some of my vision

    and that's what i was going for in asking what this poem means...

    i appreciate the elusivity of this piece, and i'm usually pretty good at picking up a given emotion... i fail on this one and i really do just kinda want to know "how you are" :)

    it's beyond my place to say "you're getting there." ha ha... I have no idea where you're going, but... where ever it is you are, i can totally see the poet doing good things... grabbing good threads of thought and working them out in words....

    it's great :) i'm glad you've come :)
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Originally posted by rarghrargh-brownstar
    -Never an ultimate waterloo



    HEY!!!!! WHAT ABOUT THE PRIDE ON THE SOULS?

    WHAT ABOUT THE SPARKLY SAND STUFF...



    PUT THAT POEM BACK IN HERE!!!


    :D;):D
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Originally posted by PastaNazi
    raugh...

    like i said, i really do like some of the words you've strung together... i wouldn't put too much into editing, or preparing "final drafts" or whatever... there's no need to be perfect here, goodness knows i've writen a bazillion poems, totally on the fly, that suck. but i don't care. doing so often gets me through some bad emotion, or some other emotion that distracts me from my schtuff... if it works, it works, if it doesn't? ha ha, well then, sorry if i've wasted anyone's time... i'm not really here to impress anyone (though i LOVE when I do) i'm more here to emote myself, get sympathy sometimes, and maybe share some of my vision

    and that's what i was going for in asking what this poem means...

    i appreciate the elusivity of this piece, and i'm usually pretty good at picking up a given emotion... i fail on this one and i really do just kinda want to know "how you are" :)

    it's beyond my place to say "you're getting there." ha ha... I have no idea where you're going, but... where ever it is you are, i can totally see the poet doing good things... grabbing good threads of thought and working them out in words....

    it's great :) i'm glad you've come :)

    awww sorry i missed this one lol
    no! i liked what u wrote........i just realized i wasnt happy with some of the other stuff at the end cause i didnt develop it enough...thanks for the welcoming lol....darling, i have no idea where im going......who does??
    and as we know, ur stuff rocks ;)
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    thanks so much :D



    looking forward to seeing what you develop :)
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Originally posted by pompey
    .
    :rolleyes:
    ur a special one dear :p
    ;)
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • pompey
    pompey Posts: 10
    Originally posted by rarghrargh-brownstar
    :rolleyes:
    ur a special one dear :p
    ;)

    well, i try

    ..
    W.A.S.T.E.
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Originally posted by pompey
    well, i try

    ..
    try on other things
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Originally posted by rarghrargh-brownstar
    try on other things
    like staying the same :)
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • pompey
    pompey Posts: 10
    Originally posted by rarghrargh-brownstar
    like staying the same :)

    you too

    it's not change...it's evolution
    (i hope)
    W.A.S.T.E.
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Originally posted by pompey
    you too

    it's not change...it's evolution
    (i hope)
    evolution to become sweeter and more awesomer
    thank you
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • pompey
    pompey Posts: 10
    Originally posted by rarghrargh-brownstar
    evolution to become sweeter and more awesomer
    thank you

    sweeter like the chai tea sonum makes....which is to say, full of depth, and body, and character
    W.A.S.T.E.
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    Originally posted by pompey
    sweeter like the chai tea sonum makes....which is to say, full of depth, and body, and character
    thats sonum for ya

    and chai tea? are we forgetting something white boy? ;)
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • pompey
    pompey Posts: 10
    Originally posted by rarghrargh-brownstar
    thats sonum for ya

    and chai tea? are we forgetting something white boy? ;)

    don't blame me, man!
    blame starbucks!

    it's not my fault they've completely permeated the north american culture and unleashed a flood of redundant phraseologies onto its peoples.

    "chai tea", indeed

    hmph!
    W.A.S.T.E.
  • rarghrargh-brownstar
    rarghrargh-brownstar Posts: 1,272
    u need to converse with pastanazi
    and finsbury carrots
    they are of ur kind :D
    Rarghstarfarian.

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