a song by me
albino_rocker
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Brilliant Fantasy
(Verse 1)
I dream about being with u,
Every second that we're apart,
But I’ve never left you,
Cos I hold u here in my heart,
I hold on to the memories,
Of broken friendships and deals,
All of the hidden emotions,
The heart decides to conceal
(chorus)
it's like a brilliant fantasy,
Where forever you’re here with me,
But it's only the prefect daydream,
I don’t ever want u to leave,
(verse 2)
I can't wait until I am near you,
And talk to your heart thru your mind,
The love I find deep inside me,
Hidden till I met u that night,
erupted like a volcano,
and connected us then for life,
I fell into the kindness,
that was shown to me in your eyes
(repeat chorus)
instrumental
(Verse 3)
They say things only get better,
But I don’t see how that could be,
I will be weeping forever,
since the day that you have to leave
(repeat chorus)
Brilliant Fantasy
(Verse 1)
I dream about being with u,
Every second that we're apart,
But I’ve never left you,
Cos I hold u here in my heart,
I hold on to the memories,
Of broken friendships and deals,
All of the hidden emotions,
The heart decides to conceal
(chorus)
it's like a brilliant fantasy,
Where forever you’re here with me,
But it's only the prefect daydream,
I don’t ever want u to leave,
(verse 2)
I can't wait until I am near you,
And talk to your heart thru your mind,
The love I find deep inside me,
Hidden till I met u that night,
erupted like a volcano,
and connected us then for life,
I fell into the kindness,
that was shown to me in your eyes
(repeat chorus)
instrumental
(Verse 3)
They say things only get better,
But I don’t see how that could be,
I will be weeping forever,
since the day that you have to leave
(repeat chorus)
some things once spoken, can't be taken back
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Had a rough night but that summed a lot of stuff up. Thanks for sharing.
"The live shows? Well, that's church on Sundays"
What's the song with the line "I'm fighting destiny at its best", in it? I like that one; especially corduroy's singing (!). (Corduroy will read that and say, "You bastard, Uncle Finsbury...")
I've got to support the band, being family and all that....
So, advertise your gig. It's in March, I know.... at the Man on the Man pub in Cambridge, I know.... tell the people when exactly..... and if there's a website link, etc....
http://www.myspace.com/alotalotbetweenus
wondering round in my own world,
reliving the sites i've seen and heard,
confusing my life with yours i know,
it's wishfull thinking keeping me going,
i phone you but your not there at all,
i'm losing my mind and soon i'll fall
(guitar bridge)
(chorus)
i'm killing myself try'ng to get to you,
i'm losing my grip on where and who,
i'm losing myself in my thoughts of you,
won't some one remind me of where and who?
(verse 2)
another round presents it's self,
without even thinking i take it down,
i'm thinking as the whole world gone mad,
is it only me who's lost all they had?
why doesn't fate give it a rest?
i've beaten destiny at it's best.
(chorus)
yeh we should be playing a gig but we have decided to change the venue for said gig. We have decided upon the "portlans arms" instead of the previous decision, as we were informed it is "a hole, full of drunk 19 year old punks" by my brother. With that in mind we decided our so un-punk music would not be fully apreciate by the audience that may or may not be there. The portland arms would, aparently, be "easier to fill with our mates" not to mention various relatives and tag-alongs who are, of course, just as welcome. . . well the relatives are. We don't know when yet but we're looking for march sometime, as you said. Thank you inside the wall for taking the time to read my song, i'm you liked it. TTFN, to quote a certain stripy individual.
Have we lost our way tonight?
Have we lost our hope to sorrow?
Feels like were all alone
Running further from what’s right
And there are no more heroes to follow
So what are we becoming?
Where did we go wrong?
no offense, but you asked, and I'm going to be honest.
Its trite and unoriginal, and looks like something Clint Black would sing. Go back to the drawing board. People will tell you its good here, just so you'll say you like their stuff, and it becomes a big stroke off.
This is bad, reinvent the way you write, don't sacrifice your vision for the sake of rhyme.
it would have probably been easier for Michelangelo to paint the sistine chapel's ceiling red, but we wouldn't remember him today if that were the case. Many easy songs are very bad songs.
this broken wheel is coming undone
and the road's exploding
but you're keeping me strong
rolling along with you
love is a tower, and you're the key
leading me higher, when you let me in
keeping us close (so close)
oh, on down the line
sometimes i burn like a dot on the sun
with no one knowing
but you're keeping me strong
moving along with you
you are a tower, of strength to me
the darkening hour, sees light again
again...
ooh wah, ooh wah, ooh wah, ooh wah
you are, you are, you are, you are
you are...
love is a tower, of strength to me
i am the shoreline, but you're the sea
the sea
you are, you are...
...