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If I didn't

nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
edited July 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
If I didn't have you
I would be lost
I am lost
but at least I'm not alone
for in the darkness, left uncovered
lay my hands in outreaching symmetry
And I'm not sure how it happened
I'm not sure how you found me
scattered there as I was... forgotten
but you found me just the same
Your smile could save the hearts of millions
Your laughter could drown the world
and in your presence I could lose myself
and believe that I have found
the one true person I could count on
the one to never bring me down
I don't deserve to be held so high
even lost with you I'm found
Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    "Your smile could save the hearts of millions" - that has to be one of the most sweetest things one could say to their lady love! :) A lovely poem, nailz! Don't let her slip through your fingers, my friend! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    hail hail :D
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    Thank you so much ladies. I feel even though I am stuck in a hard place there are some things that I know and I felt the need to express them.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • lovin kindlovin kind Posts: 268
    on the way home im going left
    on the way home its heaven
    i got no worries cause i did no crime
    im going left all the way home

    stuck in a document
    thanks to all trees
    recycle all of them
    and always believe

    awesome poem
    thanks to everyone who can read what i write without having to say something mean
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Posts: 570
    Very touching and romantic. I like it....a glimmer of hope in the darkness of life.
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  • franziskafranziska Posts: 11
    ooh i wouldnt bring my poems etc. to the internet.. if someone steals.. or copy??
    Crumbling images no longer comfort me.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    franziska wrote:
    ooh i wouldnt bring my poems etc. to the internet.. if someone steals.. or copy??

    There's no money in poetry, however good it is. Why steal something that isn't lucrative? :)
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    I guess all of us on this forum are in danger then
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • franziskafranziska Posts: 11
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    There's no money in poetry, however good it is. Why steal something that isn't lucrative? :)
    ok.. im persuaded.. now
    Crumbling images no longer comfort me.
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    If I didn't have you
    I would be lost
    I am lost
    but at least I'm not alone
    for in the darkness, left uncovered
    lay my hands in outreaching symmetry
    And I'm not sure how it happened
    I'm not sure how you found me
    scattered there as I was... forgotten
    but you found me just the same
    Your smile could save the hearts of millions
    Your laughter could drown the world
    and in your presence I could lose myself
    and believe that I have found
    the one true person I could count on
    the one to never bring me down
    I don't deserve to be held so high
    even lost with you I'm found

    well, this has left me speechless.....it's very powerful, and it sounds like she's given you hope of and images of hope and feelings of hope and it sounds like you're closer to hope.....which is a long way to travel from despair......I'm very pleased.....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Cool poem.It kind of leaves all of us single people to worry about what were missing:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

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  • reachdown12reachdown12 Posts: 693
    nailz100 wrote:
    If I didn't have you
    I would be lost
    I am lost
    but at least I'm not alone
    for in the darkness, left uncovered
    lay my hands in outreaching symmetry
    And I'm not sure how it happened
    I'm not sure how you found me
    scattered there as I was... forgotten
    but you found me just the same
    Your smile could save the hearts of millions
    Your laughter could drown the world
    and in your presence I could lose myself
    and believe that I have found
    the one true person I could count on
    the one to never bring me down
    I don't deserve to be held so high
    even lost with you I'm found

    Wow...this has left me speechless as well..beautiful poetry..very impacting....
    "Everyone wants to be the sun that lights up your life, but I'd rather be your moon so I can shine on you during your darkest hour when your sun's not around."
  • JaidraJaidra Posts: 57
    franziska wrote:
    ooh i wouldnt bring my poems etc. to the internet.. if someone steals.. or copy??

    In all honesty I usually post my poems on the internet because I want people I know to read them, but I am too scared to show them directly.

    Those people will probably never see my poems here, but I still find it interesting to see what kind of response I get. What do my words mean to other people?

    Look how many times Pearl Jam lyrics are copied on the internet - words like mine. I'm glad the boys decided to share them with us.

    If someone else pretended they had written my poems, I'm not sure if I'd be upset or flattered more. There are times when I wish I had written some Pearl Jam lyrics or other poems because the words ring so true to me.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Jaidra wrote:
    In all honesty I usually post my poems on the internet because I want people I know to read them, but I am too scared to show them directly.

    Those people will probably never see my poems here, but I still find it interesting to see what kind of response I get. What do my words mean to other people?

    Look how many times Pearl Jam lyrics are copied on the internet - words like mine. I'm glad the boys decided to share them with us.

    If someone else pretended they had written my poems, I'm not sure if I'd be upset or flattered more. There are times when I wish I had written some Pearl Jam lyrics or other poems because the words ring so true to me.

    :) Very well said, Jaidra!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    I am very pleased and delighted that you all liked my poem...that means alot to me. This is probably the most true to myself and my thoughts I have ever been in a writing, and yes I did send the poem to the lady that its about....my best friend and more....even though I was terrified to do so.

    I am just honored that I can share in the presence of such amazing poets such as yourselfs.
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    nailz100 wrote:
    and yes I did send the poem to the lady that its about....my best friend and more....even though I was terrified to do so.

    :):):):):):)

    That's great news, my pal! Friggin' great news!!!!!!!!! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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