some of my crappy writing :D

sayang_annabel
sayang_annabel Posts: 20
edited December 2003 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
yeah so errrm...

all the hungry souls cried in chorus
to the prince as he entered the domain.
every imperfect step screamed beauty
and his mind pondered the colours so bright
they were yet to be discovered by most
but he had seen them since he could remember.
that laugh, so filled with humility and so stunning
that none could remove the yearning
to hear it some more from their hearts.
this was the difference. this was beauty.
men lost all sense as women lost all restraint
as the beat of the drums bore consciences
from those free of guilt. all wondered
if they were worthy of the sight. This
sight that would make such changes.
immense. the saviours of mundane lives.
and so castles made of sand fall in the sea eventually...
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  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    So, um, this doesn't seem crappy to me.
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  • tenaciousA
    tenaciousA Posts: 604
    superfine sayang_annabelle

    not crap at all

    no, not at all :)
    ~all is full of love~
  • 20_layne_xien
    20_layne_xien Posts: 57
    that ain't crap. that's real good. better than most things i've ever done.
    ...time is never wasted when you're wasted all the time...

    "breathe, breathe in the air...don't be afraid to care...leave but don't leave me...look around and choose your own ground...for long you live and high you fly...and smiles you'll give and tears you'll cry...and all you touch and all you see...is all your life will ever be..."
  • sayang_annabel
    sayang_annabel Posts: 20
    ah well thank u kind sirs :)
    and so castles made of sand fall in the sea eventually...
  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    I'm sayang this: it's not crap! Now, have a little confidence! You have beautiful things to say, please keep sayang them! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • sayang_annabel
    sayang_annabel Posts: 20
    lol i shall have to try. :)
    and so castles made of sand fall in the sea eventually...

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