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I need your light

A HitchHiker PoetA HitchHiker Poet Posts: 129
edited September 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I need your light
It would be something for me to follow
Something to look forward to
Give me something to find and feel
It would make me shine
Don't need a raincoat, I'm already wet..
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  • Mr PyjamaMr Pyjama Posts: 253
    Short but sweet. :) The last line works very well in the piece. It's cleverly written well done.
    Situations get fucked up and turned around sooner or later...
  • A HitchHiker PoetA HitchHiker Poet Posts: 129
    Thank you for your input
    Don't need a raincoat, I'm already wet..
  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    you have a luminescence all your own.

    perhaps you're just too close to yourself to see it...but nonetheless it is there. always and always and always.

    shine on, shine on and continue to be the light that brings love home to you.
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    I like this. :)
    &&&&&&&&&&&&&&
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    ...a beacon in the night...

    Thank you for sharing YOUR light! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    Originally posted by A HitchHiker Poet
    I need your light
    It would be something for me to follow
    Something to look forward to
    Give me something to find and feel
    It would make me shine

    exactly
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    but its facing the wrong way.
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
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