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First poetry post....scared to death here...

RayneRayne Posts: 99
edited February 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Fear

Feelings so deep
On the surface they hide
Can’t eat, can’t sleep
Fearing the end of the ride

Caring too much
In dreaming I’m alive
Days become endless
Fearing I won’t survive

Losing myself
Finding my heart
Knowing I’ve found you
Fearing it was doomed from the start

My heart aches with love
My thoughts full of pain
Seeing the risks
Fearing the blame

Burdened with guilt
Blessed by love
These feelings are clear
Fearing judgment from above

By fate or design
With patience I’ll wait
Hoping we make it
Fearing I’m too late

These feelings I have
So strong that I weep
Hidden on the surface
Fearing yours aren’t as deep
Underneath this smile lies everything...How I choose to feel, is how I AM!
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No matter how cold the winter, there's a spring time ahead.
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  • sevensinssevensins Posts: 887
    well let me be the first to tell you u have nothing to fear, i like this piece. thanks for shareing
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  • little_wishlittle_wish Posts: 532
    Yeah, no need to be worried! That was really beautiful. Reflects a lot of nervousness in a relationship. Understood.
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  • ||Release_Me||||Release_Me|| Posts: 1,871
    Originally posted by Inside|The|Well
    Yeah, no need to be worried! That was really beautiful. Reflects a lot of nervousness in a relationship. Understood.

    Understood? hmmm, anything you wanna talk to me about sweetie? You're not experiencing this with me are ya?

    Great first poetry post though, you write very well!
    "This town deserves a better class of criminal... and I'm gonna give it to them."

  • little_wishlittle_wish Posts: 532
    Is this your first poetry post or ur first piece of poetry Rayne? It was really good, just wondering if u write often?
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  • FelicityFelicity Posts: 339
    it has many feelings that i think relate to anyone who is unsure about their relationship.

    i'm glad to have read it.
  • ExodusExodus Posts: 212
    i liked everything but the rhyming,.,..
    i couldn't finish it all at once because i was getting Dr.Seus flashbacks...
    other than that, i liked it
    Between the conception and the creation

    Between the emotion and the response

    Falls the shadow.
  • RayneRayne Posts: 99
    Not my first poem ever written, just the first I posted here. Sorry to offend you non-rhyming types. I tend to use rhyme in a lot of my poetry, so I'm issuing a blanket appology to all those I may offend in the future.

    Thanks so much for the positive feedback. This is a poem I wrote quite a while ago, and thanks to y'all, I'll be sure to post some others.
    Underneath this smile lies everything...How I choose to feel, is how I AM!
    ****************************************
    No matter how cold the winter, there's a spring time ahead.
    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~**~*~*~**~*~*~
  • binauralonthecapebinauralonthecape Posts: 257
    Originally posted by ||Release_Me||
    Understood? hmmm, anything you wanna talk to me about sweetie? You're not experiencing this with me are ya?

    Great first poetry post though, you write very well!
    yeah she does sound pretty insecure about her relationship, and she sounds very cute, hope she pm's sometine
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