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YellowYellow Posts: 699
edited September 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Think you're going to puke if you read one more bad poem?




...I do...
























.
It's all yellow.


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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Yellow puked a pebble on the poem down below
    The poem puked a boulder back to let that Yellow know
  • justjoshingujustjoshingu Posts: 538
    i prefer the term "projectile vomiting"
    mean people suck!
    but nice people sw****w

  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    There's an art to that
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    While it's true that there are varying degrees of quality on this board, was this post necessary?

    Just wondering if you feel better.
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  • Radar(Baba)O'RileyRadar(Baba)O'Riley Posts: 947
    Originally posted by Yellow
    Think you're going to puke if you read one more bad poem?
    puke
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    Originally posted by CranMalReign
    While it's true that there are varying degrees of quality on this board, was this post necessary?

    Just wondering if you feel better.


    oh forgive me for verging off the necessary...
    i must be the first
    It's all yellow.


  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    i know who you are
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by Yellow
    oh forgive me for verging off the necessary...
    i must be the first

    OK... instead of "necessary", how about inappropriate, unwelcomed, and devoid of value?
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  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    there are a great many posts devoid of value on all the pages of this message board...

    listen, i'm not saying anything bad about anyone

    i didn't even say i was talking about any poetry here

    i am attempting to converse with poets about poetry
    It's all yellow.


  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    the reason there are so many bad poems,
    and there are,
    is because no one offers any constructive criticism
    the first time i had a poetry class in school
    my writing was so much different
    and by the time i graduated it was somewhat good
    i puke when i look back on the majority of my old poems
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    thank you, yes... thank you...

    constructive criticism can be a good thing, no... IS a good thing
    It's all yellow.


  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by Yellow
    thank you, yes... thank you...

    constructive criticism can be a good thing, no... IS a good thing

    OK, fine, we're all good. I guess I just don't think of "constructive criticism" and "i think I'm gonna puke" as the same thing. So I got off track a little.
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  • GouletGoulet Posts: 918
    when someone reads somethign of mine and says,
    "I think I'm going to puke!"
    i take it as constructive criticism because i know i need to rewrite
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    again, this post didn't target any one poem
    and i'd never be so brash to anyone directly
    becuase there isn't any one poem that all by itself
    makes me nauseous...

    but collectively, the whole effect is greater than the sum of the parts...
    It's all yellow.


  • Radar(Baba)O'RileyRadar(Baba)O'Riley Posts: 947
    Originally posted by Goulet
    when someone reads somethign of mine and says,
    "I think I'm going to puke!"
    i take it as constructive criticism because i know i need to rewrite
    Actually, I'd be pretty flattered if someone puked after reading something I wrote.
  • CranMalReignCranMalReign Posts: 1,928
    Originally posted by Radar(Baba)O'Riley
    Actually, I'd be pretty flattered if someone puked after reading something I wrote.

    Takes all kinds, I guess!
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  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    Originally posted by Radar(Baba)O'Riley
    Actually, I'd be pretty flattered if someone puked after reading something I wrote.


    see? it's all a matter of perspective :)
    It's all yellow.


  • john girljohn girl Posts: 308
    this is how my stomach feels, it's twistin'.
  • FelicityFelicity Posts: 339
    i usually only make myself puke, not in a bulimic sort of way, but more like a self-loathing combined with vertigo and too much caffeine way.

    staying in equilibrium too long is so fucking boring. unfortunately the female psyche is geared towards it, and unnatural deviance can carry with it uncertain results and effects. i'm cataloging responses to various stimuli and their combinations. there is a degree of nausea to anything that is exciting and unusual.

    in fact, that feeling when you first fall in love? it's pretty sickening. same when you fall out of love, a plethora of afflictions. however, if the same chemicals can be stimulated to be manufactured by the brain, voila, sick all the time, bad poetry or not.

    just before it's noon
    take me to the moon
    in your ear i'll croon
    a dirty little tune

    gag me with a spoon
    count the months till June
    let's head for the lagoon
    you lovely silly goon
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    Originally posted by Felicity
    i usually only make myself puke, not in a bulimic sort of way, but more like a self-loathing combined with vertigo and too much caffeine way.

    staying in equilibrium too long is so fucking boring. unfortunately the female psyche is geared towards it, and unnatural deviance can carry with it uncertain results and effects. i'm cataloging responses to various stimuli and their combinations. there is a degree of nausea to anything that is exciting and unusual.

    in fact, that feeling when you first fall in love? it's pretty sickening. same when you fall out of love, a plethora of afflictions. however, if the same chemicals can be stimulated to be manufactured by the brain, voila, sick all the time, bad poetry or not.

    just before it's noon
    take me to the moon
    in your ear i'll croon
    a dirty little tune

    gag me with a spoon
    count the months till June
    let's head for the lagoon
    you lovely silly goon


    i have no idea what you're talking about
    exciting and unusual does not make me puke
    disgusting and infectious make me puke


    like... gag me with a spoon...
    It's all yellow.


  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    Originally posted by Radar(Baba)O'Riley
    Actually, I'd be pretty flattered if someone puked after reading something I wrote.

    Wait!
    NOW i remember what those dried chunks are stuck to page 69 of Rot.
  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    i've got this BODY OF POEMS
    or
    should i say a corpse of prose....
    one after Another

    rotten poem no rhyme
    even the bones are dry dry dry
    crusted elephant crap
    maggots twisting through
    carrion drizzled vulture
    droppings--

    road kill in a sea of hurl
    but
    still
    Beautiful--

    BEAUTIFUL VOMITING DREGS OF LOVE

    (cuz it was all yellow)

    :)

    /////////////so alive: in lemon, canarysong, dandelion butter =
    YELLOW

    "and they call me mellow yellow" oh yeh & Saffron.....

    incubaby to coldplayer....yeller stellar *****
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    at home drawing pictures of mountain tops
    with him on top lemon yellow sun
    arms raised in a "V"
    and the dead lay
    in pools of maroon below






    :) ah whoa... oh aloha smiles back at you :)
    It's all yellow.


  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i miss yellow...
    she came up in a conversation last night, so i thought i'd bump her first post

    yellow says she got her name from a dream in which kurt cobain touched her face, called her yellow, and kissed her... and i was talking to this dude last night who said kurt came in on a yellow cloud in one of his dreams...

    i miss kurt more than i miss yellow... but the sentiment's there, nonetheless...

    puke on, girlfriend :)
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