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20_layne_xien
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i finally decided to put some of my writing on here. as a
matter of fact alot of it. i think i got nine or something
around there. anyways tell me what you think. i was
thinking of putting a few of them to music...idduno if i
should of not. well anyways i'd appreciate it if you guys
took the time to read them and tell me what you think.
okay here goes...
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#1 (i havent named them all...if you can come up with a
name please tell me)
wake me up
tell me what went wrong
why you're leaving
and where you've gone
it's not hard to see
what's going through your head
you're predictable and plain
there's not much to be said
wake me up
let me see your eyes
they're like sparkling diamonds
in a crimson sky
let me see the secrets they hold
all that you've said
and all that you've not told
wake me up
and let me be you
a change in lifestyles
is what i need to make it through
i need to know somebody
for who they really are
nobody is what they seem
their minds have drifted too far
let me sleep
no need to wake
everyone in this world
is a fake
to be surrounded
by people like that
is a lie
and a stab in the back
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#2
quiet please i am thinking
if i can't hear my thoughts i won't awake
let me sleep and think in silence
for silent my thoughts must remain
hear me now i breathe in silence
breathing slowly, not really breathing at all
don't wake me know or my lungs will explode
shallow breaths or i will fall
quiet now, too quiet to move
can't hear a sound, no sound to hear
move now and break the silence
break the silence and fall
no breathing, no movement, no lift to the air
silence at last, silence is here
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#3
i stare out the window
into my own misery
the more i suffer
the more i gain
the clouds cover everything
right down to the ground
i reach out for love
but there's no one around
(pathetic i know)
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#4 (i named this one)
as crazy as it seems
clean yourself up
just to get dirty again
risk your own life
to save a friend who dies
climb a sheer cliff
just to fall to your death
waste all your truth
just to find it's a myth
driving and dirving, making good time
just to find a dead end and have to turn around
pick up all you pretty pennies
just to have them fall to the ground
find your lost love
and then learn the love is gone
look and look for the right key
run to the lock and realize it ain't the right one
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#5
hands reach up to the sky...
don't know why
slowly drop back to the ground...
softly on to the earth around them
trees are swaying with the wind...
wondering how they have the strength within'
squinting eyes they see designs...
wondering where i found the time
wasting life, watching time tick by...
just kick back and watch the sky
living a lie, living a dream...
there's nothing here i haven't seen
won't you help me
take me from this place that has taken me
save me from the clutch of fate
and the despair of all i see
dust is rising...
filling lungs over the horizon
clouds are coming down...
soon they'll crawl along the ground
this place whispers death...
my fate is a young death
thoughts are raining down...
i stick 'em in the river so they drown
no new thoughts growin' in my head...
unsure of what was said
no more need to live...
i've given all that i could give
i've done my share so i stopped trying
i'm getting the feeling that i'm slowly dying
death is creeping up and down my spine
give it time, just give it time...
i stopped trying to find myself
and myself was never found
seems i'm burried under ground
alone and forgotten...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#6
no need to knock
i have no privacy anymore
no need to stop
no one's breaking down that door...
would you leave me
i need to be alone
would you leave me here
will you leave me on my own...
what if i crawled away
you're crawlin' in my skin
am i supposed to stay
a game i'll never win...
so you want to mess around
mess with my head
you want to be a fake
some things shouldn't be said...
no where to run
no way i'll trust anyone
you're the light in the tunnel
you're leadin' me to death...
if you're the real one
why can't i trust you
your eyes are so clear
but not clear enough to see through...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#7
look off a bridge with a tear in my eye
but why, why, why, why is this sad
it's not sad is what i'm told everyday
no one cares if i live or die at this point
it is all the same to them anyway
i must not seem so alive
i turn to heaven to help me survive this
after a while that all fades
i'm on my own, alone
trying to straighten this out
trying to straighten out a problem...
as crooked as a bent nail
rusted to the board it clings to
this problem will never be solved
it could always be removed......
just pull out the nail and watch everything fall away
wake up under ground but you aren't awake
so far from all light you aren't even asleep
so there lies the problem
a problem i can't fix
and two things that should never mix
questions and depression
they will always bring you down
so off the bridge i jump...
no one would care anyway...
no one cares...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#8
a part of me is missing
that part of me is faith
no more hope inside
death has taken it's place
i'm deeply depressed
no hope it may seem
i'll sit back and enjoy this ride
i'll sit back and dream
toss and turn in this awakened sleep
cannnot think for my thoughts too deep
a crooked smile comes across my face
waitin' for death's cold embrace
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#9
a day of despair settles in
seeping through the window
the shadows lay to rest
for they will not be seen
other than candles there is no light
they flicker in the darkness
blinding to my sight but that's alright
as the day moves on it leaves me behind
laying here, a place no one will find
i bit down on the bullet
i could hardley stand the taste
but it doesn't really matter
because my life is such a waste
the trigger has been pulled
my world's turning black
i'm on my way out
there's no turning back
life has been cut short
bullets have been placed
bullets of hatred
they leave a horrible taste
i lay in regret
as my mind lays to waste
bang! bang! the bullets scream
ripping through my head
because i wanted to die
they'll make sure i know i'm dead...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
so that's it... thanx for reading.
i'd appreciate it if you guys tell
me what you think. just let me
know if you want me to write
more... okay... thanx
~ 20_layne_xien
matter of fact alot of it. i think i got nine or something
around there. anyways tell me what you think. i was
thinking of putting a few of them to music...idduno if i
should of not. well anyways i'd appreciate it if you guys
took the time to read them and tell me what you think.
okay here goes...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#1 (i havent named them all...if you can come up with a
name please tell me)
wake me up
tell me what went wrong
why you're leaving
and where you've gone
it's not hard to see
what's going through your head
you're predictable and plain
there's not much to be said
wake me up
let me see your eyes
they're like sparkling diamonds
in a crimson sky
let me see the secrets they hold
all that you've said
and all that you've not told
wake me up
and let me be you
a change in lifestyles
is what i need to make it through
i need to know somebody
for who they really are
nobody is what they seem
their minds have drifted too far
let me sleep
no need to wake
everyone in this world
is a fake
to be surrounded
by people like that
is a lie
and a stab in the back
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#2
quiet please i am thinking
if i can't hear my thoughts i won't awake
let me sleep and think in silence
for silent my thoughts must remain
hear me now i breathe in silence
breathing slowly, not really breathing at all
don't wake me know or my lungs will explode
shallow breaths or i will fall
quiet now, too quiet to move
can't hear a sound, no sound to hear
move now and break the silence
break the silence and fall
no breathing, no movement, no lift to the air
silence at last, silence is here
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#3
i stare out the window
into my own misery
the more i suffer
the more i gain
the clouds cover everything
right down to the ground
i reach out for love
but there's no one around
(pathetic i know)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#4 (i named this one)
as crazy as it seems
clean yourself up
just to get dirty again
risk your own life
to save a friend who dies
climb a sheer cliff
just to fall to your death
waste all your truth
just to find it's a myth
driving and dirving, making good time
just to find a dead end and have to turn around
pick up all you pretty pennies
just to have them fall to the ground
find your lost love
and then learn the love is gone
look and look for the right key
run to the lock and realize it ain't the right one
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#5
hands reach up to the sky...
don't know why
slowly drop back to the ground...
softly on to the earth around them
trees are swaying with the wind...
wondering how they have the strength within'
squinting eyes they see designs...
wondering where i found the time
wasting life, watching time tick by...
just kick back and watch the sky
living a lie, living a dream...
there's nothing here i haven't seen
won't you help me
take me from this place that has taken me
save me from the clutch of fate
and the despair of all i see
dust is rising...
filling lungs over the horizon
clouds are coming down...
soon they'll crawl along the ground
this place whispers death...
my fate is a young death
thoughts are raining down...
i stick 'em in the river so they drown
no new thoughts growin' in my head...
unsure of what was said
no more need to live...
i've given all that i could give
i've done my share so i stopped trying
i'm getting the feeling that i'm slowly dying
death is creeping up and down my spine
give it time, just give it time...
i stopped trying to find myself
and myself was never found
seems i'm burried under ground
alone and forgotten...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#6
no need to knock
i have no privacy anymore
no need to stop
no one's breaking down that door...
would you leave me
i need to be alone
would you leave me here
will you leave me on my own...
what if i crawled away
you're crawlin' in my skin
am i supposed to stay
a game i'll never win...
so you want to mess around
mess with my head
you want to be a fake
some things shouldn't be said...
no where to run
no way i'll trust anyone
you're the light in the tunnel
you're leadin' me to death...
if you're the real one
why can't i trust you
your eyes are so clear
but not clear enough to see through...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#7
look off a bridge with a tear in my eye
but why, why, why, why is this sad
it's not sad is what i'm told everyday
no one cares if i live or die at this point
it is all the same to them anyway
i must not seem so alive
i turn to heaven to help me survive this
after a while that all fades
i'm on my own, alone
trying to straighten this out
trying to straighten out a problem...
as crooked as a bent nail
rusted to the board it clings to
this problem will never be solved
it could always be removed......
just pull out the nail and watch everything fall away
wake up under ground but you aren't awake
so far from all light you aren't even asleep
so there lies the problem
a problem i can't fix
and two things that should never mix
questions and depression
they will always bring you down
so off the bridge i jump...
no one would care anyway...
no one cares...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#8
a part of me is missing
that part of me is faith
no more hope inside
death has taken it's place
i'm deeply depressed
no hope it may seem
i'll sit back and enjoy this ride
i'll sit back and dream
toss and turn in this awakened sleep
cannnot think for my thoughts too deep
a crooked smile comes across my face
waitin' for death's cold embrace
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
#9
a day of despair settles in
seeping through the window
the shadows lay to rest
for they will not be seen
other than candles there is no light
they flicker in the darkness
blinding to my sight but that's alright
as the day moves on it leaves me behind
laying here, a place no one will find
i bit down on the bullet
i could hardley stand the taste
but it doesn't really matter
because my life is such a waste
the trigger has been pulled
my world's turning black
i'm on my way out
there's no turning back
life has been cut short
bullets have been placed
bullets of hatred
they leave a horrible taste
i lay in regret
as my mind lays to waste
bang! bang! the bullets scream
ripping through my head
because i wanted to die
they'll make sure i know i'm dead...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
so that's it... thanx for reading.
i'd appreciate it if you guys tell
me what you think. just let me
know if you want me to write
more... okay... thanx
~ 20_layne_xien
...time is never wasted when you're wasted all the time...
"breathe, breathe in the air...don't be afraid to care...leave but don't leave me...look around and choose your own ground...for long you live and high you fly...and smiles you'll give and tears you'll cry...and all you touch and all you see...is all your life will ever be..."
"breathe, breathe in the air...don't be afraid to care...leave but don't leave me...look around and choose your own ground...for long you live and high you fly...and smiles you'll give and tears you'll cry...and all you touch and all you see...is all your life will ever be..."
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But I have to honestly say, yesterday, I could have died but I didn't and so, I feel happy to be alive and you know, as much as you may feel unnecessary sometimes, you DO matter and people do care for and love you.
Oh, and BTW #3 is NOT pathetic, I think it's quite cool, I have a very similar poem in my collection, so, don't dis # 3 man!
And yes, keep writing!
"breathe, breathe in the air...don't be afraid to care...leave but don't leave me...look around and choose your own ground...for long you live and high you fly...and smiles you'll give and tears you'll cry...and all you touch and all you see...is all your life will ever be..."
Anytime! But don't call me man, man!
yeah, she's a WOAH-man, man.
"breathe, breathe in the air...don't be afraid to care...leave but don't leave me...look around and choose your own ground...for long you live and high you fly...and smiles you'll give and tears you'll cry...and all you touch and all you see...is all your life will ever be..."
"breathe, breathe in the air...don't be afraid to care...leave but don't leave me...look around and choose your own ground...for long you live and high you fly...and smiles you'll give and tears you'll cry...and all you touch and all you see...is all your life will ever be..."
keep writing.........thank you for sharing...................I posted one no time for goodbye cuz your number eight struck a memory....