PJ Creative Writing 101

EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
edited February 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It might be fun to do writing excercises for the board:

So your first prompt is: Write a poem with the first line

Flame inhaled my neighbor's house



GO!

-- Professor ToasterElf
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  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    Flame inhaled my neighbours house
    No one came screaming out the door
    The fire trucks arrived a tad to late
    The whole family was melted to the floor
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    Flame inhaled my neighbor's house,
    and breathing in the wet ash
    as it fell heavy in Santa Ana winds,
    I mused on the emptiness
    of enchanted things, the way
    material possessions
    can vanish in an instant--

    things we put so much confidence in,
    gone, in a quick breath.
    I remember the Chinese
    "now that my house has burned down,
    I possess a better view of the moon."

    Homeless, and still unable to grasp
    his new freedom, I invite the family in.
    Good karma. He rants that he just
    got that new big screen TV and playoffs
    on tomorrow. He doesn't see the bigger
    picture, his daughter's joy
    at rescuing her favorite Ragedy Ann doll,
    the soft relief of his tranquil wife,
    counting her blessings that they'd bought
    renter's insurance last summer.

    All in all, there's no guarantee,
    and blackout, earthquake, crises small,
    befall each and everyone. It's looking
    up, into that silver slice of moon, keeps
    a person sound.
  • Flame inhaled my neighbour's house
    And toked his Lamborghini
    His garden in its scarlet rouse
    of light was not so greeny
  • Flame inhaled my neighbour's house
    His wife stood on the patio
    With petrol can and match: "Light douse,
    then, 'Take that, fakkin' ratty-oh!' "


    :D
  • Originally posted by EvilToasterElf
    It might be fun to do writing excercises for the board:

    So your first prompt is: Write a poem with the first line

    Flame inhaled my neighbor's house



    GO!

    -- Professor ToasterElf

    DAMN YOU!!!!!!!!!!!
    I was gonna do something like this, but I'm a slacker, so........
    DAMN MEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    ps,

    Flame inhaled my neighbor's house

    ah,



    ummmmmmmm.........





    Flame..........

    um.....





    FUCKING FLAMES
    Hmmmm:

    my neighbor spontaneously combusted while busting a . . .

    it might have been the friction
    it might have been the oil
    it might have been the leather
    that made him start to boil

    but his cheeks turned bright red
    and his mouth began to smoke
    and still he kept on pulling
    man, were his feet soaked

    then a glow came from his gut
    and it yellowed out the room
    the next thing that I heard
    was a thundering "KA-BOOM"

    flames inhaled my neighbor's house
    and all that remained was ash
    luckily, my house was spared
    so I could still watch M*A*S*H
  • Flame inhaled my neighbor's house
    Scorched foundation, earth, and bone
    Singed the grass, the trees, the sky
    with orange
    beautiful orange
    bottom-lit ash

    The flames consumed my neighbor's wife
    Sizzled skin and hair and teeth
    Boiled the blood, the snot, the tears
    The stench
    beautiful stench
    cremated souls

    The flames, they fucked my neighbor's life
    Tore its hymen, hopes, and dreams
    Impregnated death, loss, and awe
    with seed
    woeful, wicked seed
    snarling maw of God
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    • 18 Boston 1+2
  • cassiacassia Posts: 277
    that so rocked !!!!!!!!!!
  • jeffjeff Posts: 12
    flame inhaled my neighbors house....
    take away my breath....
    and leave only my mouth....
    i wanted to save her from the burning room.....
    thank god it wasn't me....
    i'm sorry it was you...
    now i run my hands through this dirty ash...
    and wonder what you would have said....
    if i had the courage to ask.....
    I've been listening since the beginning and they only get better with age.
  • flame inhaled my neighbours house
    sucked it in and spat it out
    watched it devour my memory
    of when he was supposed to
    do the good neighbourly deed
    the threads of the curtains
    with thier cigarette stench
    flew up in a could
    of regurgitated dust
    fingers burning with satisfaction
    sulphur clings to my skin
    and I taste the smile on my lips
  • Flame inhaled my neighbors house;
    backdraft sucked it in like a pile of chicken wings, then
    spit on the back yard and foundation the bones,
    oxidized remains of
    a barbecued blitzkrieg of being.
    Even the rituals of Maria’s santeria
    cannot bring back the collapsed
    popsicle jenga.
    Call all your saints, Maria,
    hold your rosary.
    It still knows the heart beats
    in your hand.
  • flame inhaled my neighbours house
    a charcoaled house-warming ,welcome party.
    Bring your toasting forks,
    my lucky friends
    for Tonys frying tonight.!

    He failed to spot my crafty ways.
    when the flames licked around the door.
    Is that petrol on your hands
    or are you just pleased to heat me?
    Some people have to have the sultry evenings Cocktails in the blue, red and grey But I like every minute of the day.
    INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
    Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
    E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
    Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
    Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
  • Flame inhaled my neighbour's house
    The heat poured out into the street
    All the locals stood and watched
    And some cried and some died
    And all the while I hid watching
    Transfixed on the blaze
    My eyes in a haze
    One hand clasping the gas canister
    The other a pack of matches
    And all I could think of, with meanacing glee in my heart was:
    That, that fuckhead will never let his dog crap on my lawn again!

    :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Flame inhaled my neighbour's house like a chimmony orange Bill Clinton at the Oxford of all combustion academies; sucking and dragging through its cheekbones all the ready combustables of a lifetime: The photograph albums, love letters, invoices, telephone directories, vinyl collections, keepsakes in splintering fired mahogany cupboards and once-recondite drawers. Flame inhaled my neighbourse house of memories and breathed back out the monoxide, the poisoned waste of hopes and dreams.
  • Flames inhaled my neighbors house
    as I silently watched and prayed
    God, if only this house was his
    I would be so enlightened at the thought
    to finally put that bastards brains to roast.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • ExodusExodus Posts: 212
    Originally posted by EvilToasterElf


    So your first prompt is: Write a poem with the first line

    Flame inhaled my neighbor's house

    ummm....no.
    Between the conception and the creation

    Between the emotion and the response

    Falls the shadow.
  • That's cool, if you'd rather just copy William Carlos Williams that's fine
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