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  • Ms. Haiku wrote:
    Out of all of these, which 2 do you want me to focus on now?

    umm... A question of fate, and bushwhacking - both on page 3, thanks
  • well the poem I promised was coming is turning into a multi-page monster like stairmaster to heaven, so I wrote one to wet your appetite in the interim. I really don't like it, but...better than nothing


    Wait Staff

    I’ve always wanted to pull the tablecloth
    from under a load of stemware and plates.
    An urban matador deftly avoiding the irate
    bus boy, or simply the aproned philosopher
    speakingin the vaguest possible terms,
    that the cloth was never there in the first place.

    For the sweaty spectrums of service,
    there is no magic left in the world,
    just spite and paychecks. The real trick
    would be to make the obnoxious patrons
    disappear, while the heat rises in white vapor
    from their dinner plates.

    One day it did happen though,
    It happened to all the stockbrokers,
    all the politicians, the titans of industry,
    the lawyers, surgeons, golf-pro’s, models,
    and actors, musicians, bankers, they all
    had the carpet of sanity pulled from underneath them.

    The obscurity of their efforts came like a solar flare,
    a great wave swept across them, some ran
    into walls, or traffic, some burst into flames,
    others just fell down, and crouched in a ball,
    but the vast majority climbed

    all day and all night, the rose through the office
    buildings, bridges, monuments, statues, houses,
    anything they could find really. We left the steaming
    plates on the tables, the wine in the glasses. When we finished
    cleaning the kitchen, and vacuuming the restaurant
    we saw

    them falling, silently screaming
    From the rooftops, and the bridges
    Doing flips and corkscrews, or straight
    As airborne rigor mortis, the world had
    become a wedding flipped upside down,
    So many suits and dresses flapping toward
    the ground.

    So we, all of us, did exactly what we could
    With the magic granted us, we grabbed every
    tablecloth, and without so much as the spilling
    of a drop of wine, removed them from the full
    tables. We tied these stained capes around our necks,
    and flew out the door to save the day.
  • I was smiling away as I read this one, ETE. :D It's fun and yet I'm not so sure if it was meant to be fun. I still think I need to read it a few more times, when I'm in a different mood perhaps, and maybe I'll see it differently. I think the first stanza was the best by far! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • I was smiling away as I read this one, ETE. :D It's fun and yet I'm not so sure if it was meant to be fun. I still think I need to read it a few more times, when I'm in a different mood perhaps, and maybe I'll see it differently. I think the first stanza was the best by far! :)

    Thank BE, I'm not sure how I feel about this one, it's very scattershot, it helped me work through a block though
  • Thank BE, I'm not sure how I feel about this one, it's very scattershot, it helped me work through a block though

    You're most welcome! :) Ack, you're too hard on yourself but I suppose it's a good thing as I recall you saying you'd like to publish. I'd have to say, anything that helps get you through a block is worth pecking at. :) And I reiterate--the first stanza is great!-I hope it won't change if you decide to keep at this one.
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i think it's cool, evil. not so "scattershot", as you say because it keeps it's theme and avoids mixed metaphor quite well. it's a little "loose", perhaps ~ the imagery could be tightened down a bit, and it's not "heavy", per se ~ but they can't all weigh three tons, so...

    yeah

    it's kinda cute, promisekeeper :D
  • The Island of Man

    A substitute teacher takes a break from showing videos,
    he wanders the halls, to escape the tedium of busy work,
    of little lives, bullied into learning what they can't understand
    will help them

    He finds an empty auditorium and sits in the last row,
    eating his lunch he suddenly hears a violin,
    and watches a small Japanese music teacher,
    oblivious to his meager audience,
    he plays his way through the memories that haunt him,

    a not yet failed poet, watches a failed musician
    watches the fluidity of a bow cutting through the scraps
    of a past life, past desires of performances he watched,
    but could never play

    the man in the audience takes out a small notebook,
    and begins to write, suddenly oblivious
    that what he's hearing inside of himself
    has travelled through a set of strings from the mind
    of another man

    the two men sit a hundred feet apart inside of each other's heads,
    when the violin becomes furious, so too, does the pen
    the poem traces it's way through a life spent following
    characters of books he knows he could never write,
    settings he could never have imagined,
    and the crushing failure of his own inadequate brain

    the violin pauses and the teacher heaves a vast sigh
    into the air that never reaches his ears, because the
    vacuum of the missing music has been replaced
    with the sighs of the poet

    for the first time since sitting down, the maker of music
    meets the eyes of the maker of poetry
    they nod their heads, and then continue without saying
    a word. When the period ends they both get up and leave,
    going back to their classrooms, and during the brief
    walk down the hall, when the sound of music and scribbling
    is replaced with aimless volleys of coarse chatter
    they realize that

    every man's ambition is an island, solitary and wasted
    but they had each been visited by a small bottle
    with a note that only reminded them to stay alive
  • every man's ambition is an island, solitary and wasted
    but they had each been visited by a small bottle
    with a note that only reminded them to stay alive




    ....wow....

    Love that last bit..... so true you know that enitre poem, why do we all settle for what we are?
    Pillowed Footsteps Dig my Grave
  • Droevig wrote:
    ....wow....

    Love that last bit..... so true you know that enitre poem, why do we all settle for what we are?

    happiness is the final harbor of the selfish

    I think this piece is going to hold a special place for me, as I sat in this auditorium staring at this old man playing this violin, realizing how alone we both were in a building full of thousands of people, it came to me that I was doing exactly what I needed to do for my art to escape to Japan. I am firmly convinced that until you've at least temporarily severed the cords to your entire childhood familiarity you can never reach your full potential, because it's impossible to be selfish enough to be happy and successful in the proximity of a network of family and friends that you care about. It's a cynical and lonely journey, but I think there are some of us that can't live with regret.
  • I moved away when I was 18 to live in belgium for a year....

    I was miserable for the firs 5 months or so, but I learned the language and I learned to get around. I barely made ends meet alot. But...

    It was the best thing i've ever done with my life. And I never would have beena ble to do it had my family or friends come with me.
    Pillowed Footsteps Dig my Grave
  • Death Imitating Art

    To say he was a starving artist
    would only be a cliché. He wasn’t
    starving, we have soup kitchens
    in our cities. But dear God how unhappy
    his life had become. He set an easel at
    the happiest corner of the street,
    facing the entrance to the vast
    Metropolitan Museum of Art,
    With one last shot at becoming an
    artist, because he’s almost lost the will
    to die trying.

    The snow falls so slowly outside,
    it could be floating.
    The thought of a brush struck
    hovering in the mind before the brush
    begins its fateful dip into the paint
    And the savage thrash against the canvas
    Writhing like so many lovers
    naked, their erect parts perched,
    ready to spill and melt into one body

    A man leaving the latest exhibit stops on the steps.
    He wonders why he can never walk faster
    than those falling crystals.
    His legs click to a metronome of silence
    his eyes search for some sound,
    already believing his ears deaf.

    If you stop too long in the snow,
    it’s easy to believe yourself dead,
    already your last moment, slashed
    onto the canvas.

    He tries to remember having a conversation
    With any great friend, or either parent,
    while it snowed.
    To break the silence of the snow,
    or move
    without the rhythm of its descent, was like interrupting
    a prayer.

    At just this moment he noticed a lone artist,
    standing at the corner with an easel, but before
    he noticed the gun, he noticed the snow distort,
    fly wildly around the muzzle. He didn’t so much
    feel the gun shot as understand it was there.

    Waiting for his chance to make life imitate art,
    the artist throws his gun in a passing garbage truck.
    So his full attention can focus on the life passing
    before him, stopped dead by the bullet he couldn’t hear
    his senses focused wholly on understanding the snow.

    The dying man, now laying on the ground, stares
    straight up at the snow. Listening to it soak up his life,
    Beneath him, he began to blink his eyes to the same
    rhythm as he walked, and all was quiet again.
    He turned his head to watch the artist, his palette
    Turning white, his brush moving with the snow,
    from the top of the canvas to the bottom. He wanted
    To shout to him, scream the title of the piece,
    as the horse of memory cantered through his
    brightly shining brain. It’s breath steaming,
    turning the world white, turning everything
    to snow.
  • Death Imitating Art

    To say he was a starving artist
    would only be a cliché. He wasn’t
    starving, we have soup kitchens
    in our cities. But dear God how unhappy
    his life had become. He set an easel at
    the happiest corner of the street,
    facing the entrance to the vast
    Metropolitan Museum of Art,
    With one last shot at becoming an
    artist, because he’s almost lost the will
    to die trying.

    The snow falls so slowly outside,
    it could be floating.
    The thought of a brush struck
    hovering in the mind before the brush
    begins its fateful dip into the paint
    And the savage thrash against the canvas
    Writhing like so many lovers
    naked, their erect parts perched,
    ready to spill and melt into one body

    A man leaving the latest exhibit stops on the steps.
    He wonders why he can never walk faster
    than those falling crystals.
    His legs click to a metronome of silence
    his eyes search for some sound,
    already believing his ears deaf.

    If you stop too long in the snow,
    it’s easy to believe yourself dead,
    already your last moment, slashed
    onto the canvas.

    He tries to remember having a conversation
    With any great friend, or either parent,
    while it snowed.
    To break the silence of the snow,
    or move
    without the rhythm of its descent, was like interrupting
    a prayer.

    At just this moment he noticed a lone artist,
    standing at the corner with an easel, but before
    he noticed the gun, he noticed the snow distort,
    fly wildly around the muzzle. He didn’t so much
    feel the gun shot as understand it was there.

    Waiting for his chance to make life imitate art,
    the artist throws his gun in a passing garbage truck.
    So his full attention can focus on the life passing
    before him, stopped dead by the bullet he couldn’t hear
    his senses focused wholly on understanding the snow.

    The dying man, now laying on the ground, stares
    straight up at the snow. Listening to it soak up his life,
    Beneath him, he began to blink his eyes to the same
    rhythm as he walked, and all was quiet again.
    He turned his head to watch the artist, his palette
    Turning white, his brush moving with the snow,
    from the top of the canvas to the bottom. He wanted
    To shout to him, scream the title of the piece,
    as the horse of memory cantered through his
    brightly shining brain. It’s breath steaming,
    turning the world white, turning everything
    to snow.


    this is such a beautiful piece to read,... and very moving,... a well-done thanks is certainly not enough, but tis all i've got behind this computra screen. you do this sort of thing alot eh...?
    i'm a thief... and a liar...

    see Ed's church?--he's breathing fire.....
  • this is such a beautiful piece to read,... and very moving,... a well-done thanks is certainly not enough, but tis all i've got behind this computra screen. you do this sort of thing alot eh...?

    well a thankyou not being enough goes both ways. I don't do this sort of thing as much as I'd like

    this piece still needs a lot of work, but it all came out in one ten minute spurt so I'm pretty happy so far
  • Death Imitating Art

    To call him a starving artist
    would be cliché. We have soup kitchens
    in our cities, but dear God how unhappy
    his life had become. He set an easel at
    the corner of the street, facing the vast
    Metropolitan Museum of Art.
    It was his last shot at becoming an
    artist, because he’s almost lost the will
    to die trying.

    The snow falls so slowly outside,
    it could be floating.
    The flakes likes thoughts of brush strokes
    hovering in the mind, before
    the fateful dip into the paint
    and the savage thrash against the canvas.
    Bristles writhe like so many lovers
    naked, their erect parts perched,
    ready to spill and melt into one body.

    A man leaving the latest exhibit
    stops on the steps. He wonders
    why he can never walk faster
    than those falling crystals.
    His legs click to a metronome of silence,
    his eyes search for some sound,
    already believing his ears deaf.

    If you stop too long in the snow,
    it’s easy to believe yourself dead,
    already your last moment, frozen
    onto the canvas.

    He tries to remember a conversation
    with any great friend, or either parent,
    while it snowed.
    To break the silence of the snow,
    or move
    without the rhythm of its descent,
    was like interrupting a prayer.

    At just this moment he noticed
    a lone artist, standing at the corner
    with an easel. Before he saw the gun,
    he watched snow distort, fly wildly
    around the muzzle. He didn’t feel
    the gun shot as understand it was there.

    Waiting for his chance to make life imitate art,
    the artist throws his gun in a passing garbage truck.
    So his full attention can focus on the life passing
    before him, leveled by a bullet the victim couldn’t hear
    his senses tune wholly on the falling snow.

    The dying man on the ground stares
    up at the snow. He listens to it
    soak up his blood beneath him, he blinks his eyes
    to the same rhythm he walked.
    He turned his head to watch the artist,
    his palette turning white,
    his brush moving with the snow,
    from the top of the canvas to the bottom.
    The man on the ground wanted to shout,
    scream the title of the piece,
    as the horse of memory cantered through his
    brightly shining brain. It’s breath steaming,
    turning the world white, turning everything
    to snow.
  • stuckinline
    stuckinline Posts: 3,407
    Death Imitating Art

    To call him a starving artist
    would be cliché. We have soup kitchens
    in our cities, but dear God how unhappy
    his life had become. He set an easel at
    the corner of the street, facing the vast
    Metropolitan Museum of Art.
    It was his last shot at becoming an
    artist, because he’s almost lost the will
    to die trying.

    The snow falls so slowly outside,
    it could be floating.
    The flakes likes thoughts of brush strokes
    hovering in the mind, before
    the fateful dip into the paint
    and the savage thrash against the canvas.
    Bristles writhe like so many lovers
    naked, their erect parts perched,
    ready to spill and melt into one body.

    A man leaving the latest exhibit
    stops on the steps. He wonders
    why he can never walk faster
    than those falling crystals.
    His legs click to a metronome of silence,
    his eyes search for some sound,
    already believing his ears deaf.

    If you stop too long in the snow,
    it’s easy to believe yourself dead,
    already your last moment, frozen
    onto the canvas.

    He tries to remember a conversation
    with any great friend, or either parent,
    while it snowed.
    To break the silence of the snow,
    or move
    without the rhythm of its descent,
    was like interrupting a prayer.

    At just this moment he noticed
    a lone artist, standing at the corner
    with an easel. Before he saw the gun,
    he watched snow distort, fly wildly
    around the muzzle. He didn’t feel
    the gun shot as understand it was there.

    Waiting for his chance to make life imitate art,
    the artist throws his gun in a passing garbage truck.
    So his full attention can focus on the life passing
    before him, leveled by a bullet the victim couldn’t hear
    his senses tune wholly on the falling snow.

    The dying man on the ground stares
    up at the snow. He listens to it
    soak up his blood beneath him, he blinks his eyes
    to the same rhythm he walked.
    He turned his head to watch the artist,
    his palette turning white,
    his brush moving with the snow,
    from the top of the canvas to the bottom.
    The man on the ground wanted to shout,
    scream the title of the piece,
    as the horse of memory cantered through his
    brightly shining brain. It’s breath steaming,
    turning the world white, turning everything
    to snow.

    very good!
  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    Distant Survivor

    I. September 11, 2001

    II. Severed Elevator


    III. Funeral for a Friend

    AIV. To those who fell from the 84th floor


    V. August, 2004


    VI. Tiny Strings

    quote]


    these made my heart ache. you made me cry and that's good thing. for me it lets me know that i still can feel.
    thank you .
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    happiness is the final harbor of the selfish

    I think this piece is going to hold a special place for me, as I sat in this auditorium staring at this old man playing this violin, realizing how alone we both were in a building full of thousands of people, it came to me that I was doing exactly what I needed to do for my art to escape to Japan. I am firmly convinced that until you've at least temporarily severed the cords to your entire childhood familiarity you can never reach your full potential, because it's impossible to be selfish enough to be happy and successful in the proximity of a network of family and friends that you care about. It's a cynical and lonely journey, but I think there are some of us that can't live with regret.



    Reaching your full potential, artistically or otherwise requires practice, study and critique. That's it. There's no need for cynisysm and lonliness... that'll only bring you your full potential in despair, and who the fuck needs that?

    There's no selfishness in being happy. That's confusing happiness with ignorant, aloof detachment. That's saying, "fuck you and your problems, I'm moving on up. Whee! Look at me!" It's arrogant, and it's bullshit. (And, I only know this cuz i've done it... and i've hurt the people I love... and have much regret because of it ~ ain't no choice... I have to live with it.)

    What's impossible, in my estimation, is to be successful AND happy without that network of family and friends you care about. Sure, there's drama... but there is also much joy and much support when you need it.

    I think that leaving home for a while is good good stuff, and everyone should do it. And, I will be foaming green with jealousy when you do finally go to Japan ~ I do hope you choose to do so with the biggest smile, ever, Evil. I HOPE you have a BLAST! (Buy me some records while you're there, ok? They get all the good stuff)

    Are you Catholic or something? ;) Family giving you shit for wanting to leave? Bagh... they'll get over it, I'm sure. You do your life. It's not selfish... it's all you got. One shot, then it's pure bliss and pearly gates and all that crap... ain't no poetry in that, fo sho.

    :D
    Rachel
  • PastaNazi wrote:
    Reaching your full potential, artistically or otherwise requires practice, study and critique. That's it. There's no need for cynisysm and lonliness... that'll only bring you your full potential in despair, and who the fuck needs that?

    There's no selfishness in being happy. That's confusing happiness with ignorant, aloof detachment. That's saying, "fuck you and your problems, I'm moving on up. Whee! Look at me!" It's arrogant, and it's bullshit. (And, I only know this cuz i've done it... and i've hurt the people I love... and have much regret because of it ~ ain't no choice... I have to live with it.)

    What's impossible, in my estimation, is to be successful AND happy without that network of family and friends you care about. Sure, there's drama... but there is also much joy and much support when you need it.

    I think that leaving home for a while is good good stuff, and everyone should do it. And, I will be foaming green with jealousy when you do finally go to Japan ~ I do hope you choose to do so with the biggest smile, ever, Evil. I HOPE you have a BLAST! (Buy me some records while you're there, ok? They get all the good stuff)

    Are you Catholic or something? ;) Family giving you shit for wanting to leave? Bagh... they'll get over it, I'm sure. You do your life. It's not selfish... it's all you got. One shot, then it's pure bliss and pearly gates and all that crap... ain't no poetry in that, fo sho.

    :D
    Rachel

    On the contrary, my family isn't very religious, nor are they giving me shit for leaving. The very support they offer is the crutch I need to shed. It's independance plain and simple, practice study and critique can only go so far in an environment you don't find conducive to doing whatever it is you want to do. I need some time alone from my family, from my friends and everything else. I need to be able to take a couple of steps completely on my own after Japan, follow any whim I feel will take me closer to this intangible ideal I'm chasing and see it through to the end.

    and the grin will be large
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    awesome....


    :D


    hey... you didn't say anything about my records, dammit ;)
  • I know it's the third version already, but I can't let this go until I'm finished with it.


    Death Imitating Art

    To call him a starving artist
    would be cliché. We have soup kitchens
    in our cities, but dear God how unhappy
    his life has become. He sets an easel at
    the corner of the street, facing the
    small nexus of narrow alleys.
    Tonight, he thinks, is his last shot
    at becoming an artist, because he’s lost
    the will to die trying.

    The snow falls so slowly outside,
    it could be floating.
    The flakes swim like thoughts
    of brush strokes before the dip
    into paint and thrash against canvas.
    Bristles writhe like so many lovers
    naked, their erect parts perched,
    ready to spill and melt into one body.

    A memory floats down the stairs
    across the street, a teenage boy
    rides his horse under the full moon
    it’s pockmarked wastes, reflected
    in the sheen of new snow.

    A man leaves his apartment and
    stops on the steps. He wonders
    why he can never walk faster
    than those falling crystals.
    The avenues become paths along
    his family’s farm, searching for holes
    the horse might catch her feet in,
    under the fresh powder.

    If you stop too long in the snow,
    it’s easy to believe yourself dead,
    already your last moment, frozen
    onto the canvas.

    Stopped under a streetlight
    he tries to remember the name
    of his long dead horse, at just this moment
    he notices a lone artist, stretching
    above an easel. Before he sees the gun,
    he watches snow distort, and fly wildly
    around the muzzle. He doesn’t feel
    the bullet enter his chest
    but somehow understands it’s inside him.

    Waiting for his chance to make life imitate art,
    the artist drops his pistol
    and lifts his brush and palette.
    So his full attention can focus
    on the life passing onto the canvas
    leveled by a bullet the victim couldn’t hear
    his senses tune wholly on the falling snow.

    The dying man on the ground stares
    up at the snow. He listens to it
    soak his blood, he blinks his eyes
    to the same rhythm he walked.
    He turns his head to watch the artist,

    his palette turning white,
    his brush moving with the snow,
    from the top of the canvas to the bottom.
    The man on the ground wants to shout,
    scream the title of the piece,
    as the horse of memory canters
    through his brightly shining brain.
    It’s breath steaming,
    turning the world white,
    turning everything
    to snow.