Out of Port

EvilToasterElf · February 2004

Out of Port

A red Ford Explorer
drives through a shallow puddle
at 65 miles an hour
the sun steadies its aim
and shifting rainbows
grasp the black bumper
like a colored leviathan
stalking a fishing trawler
the Empire State license plate
veers onto an exit
the prism sinks
back into the oil
of the salted highway

sultryevening · February 2004

from the title
i thought you meant your bottle was empty!

either way- I like!

CranMalReign · February 2004

I'm not sure I understand the "the sun steadies its aim" part... And I don't think the title fits...

But otherwise, I definitely dig. One of those things that no one usually notices or remembers...

Noticed... and remembered.

Yellow · February 2004

i like it...

i think it captures those rainbows wonderfully

cassia · February 2004

this one super accelerates/
good flow and pull

colorful images
very
vivid

i so get the sun steadies its aim
and
cabammm

all lit up across the salted highway/
ok
wow

(more of these).....

CranMalReign · February 2004

Originally posted by cassia
i so get the sun steadies its aim
and
cabammm

all lit up across the salted highway/
ok
wow

Now that I read it again, I understand the "steadies its aim" part. My brain was thinking it like "The sun steadies something else's aim" and not its own.

Now I understand, and it is grand, and I like it even more.

Still don't think the title fits though. I'm probably misunderstanding that, too.

Yellow · February 2004

port authority????

cassia · February 2004

Route 66

cassia · February 2004

route 666

out
of hell~port

Yellow · February 2004

hell port wine cheese

EvilToasterElf · February 2004

I tried to convey a slightly more subtle metaphor of the highway to a sea, like "sinking back into the salted seas" and the image with the fishing boat, but I think the poem is a little too short to get the connection between the title, I need to think of another longwinded image I think and throw a few more hints in the wind it all up - So that this jaunt down the highway resonates as much as a ship leaving port - in my opinion a munch grander event

justam · February 2004

Well, it is nice that it could also mean "out of the car-port" or that an SUV is like a big 'ol boat on the highway.

Yellow · February 2004

Originally posted by EvilToasterElf
in my opinion a munch grander event

all things can be defined grand with the right words

i like this the way it is
but by all means, expound

EvilToasterElf · March 2004

A red Ford Explorer
drives through a shallow puddle
65 miles an hour
the sun steadies its aim
and shifting rainbows
grasp the black bumper
like a colored leviathan
stalking a fishing trawler
the Empire State license plate
veers onto an exit
the prism sinks
back into the oil
of the salted highway

which runs through
the crooked mouth
of Delaware county
blasted by mountain men
who ate through the rocks
with dynamite teeth
until gaps in its smile
swung wide enough
for four lanes of traffic

EvilToasterElf · March 2004

A red Ford Explorer
drives through a shallow puddle
65 miles an hour
the sun steadies its aim
and shifting rainbows
grasp the black bumper
like a colored leviathan
stalking a fishing trawler
the Empire State license plate
veers onto an exit
the prism sinks
back into the oil
of the salted highway

hazard lights
squint at cloud cover
over that F-150 pickup
marooned in the dirt
guard rails rise
like a steel fin
circling dead diesels
straddle the curves of
cliff walls
ice tusks slide down walls
like chicken meat
boiled off the bone

the crooked mouth
of Delaware county
blasted by mountain men
who ate through the rocks
with dynamite teeth
until gaps
swung wide enough
as four lanes of traffic
shimmy like wet crumbs
into its gullet

Out of Port

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