Country Real Estate
EvilToasterElf
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Country Real Estate
After pacing his house for 60 years,
his body became those hardwood floors,
that groan under the pressure of footsteps.
He strode silently for fifteen of those years
before bending into the slope of his cane,
slowly falling into the black fabric
of his steel wheelchair.
The months between visits whittle his bones
like the oak crossbeams,
blessed by the appetite of termites.
until his joints hollowed into
an instrument of complaint.
The lives within his dusty rolodex
continued to gather speed
when the symphony of liver pills and calcium drinks,
was silenced by a lapse of the wind
over the floorboards.
A couple from Connecticut came two weeks later
to buy his house, and pace their own path
into the dark, warped wood.
After pacing his house for 60 years,
his body became those hardwood floors,
that groan under the pressure of footsteps.
He strode silently for fifteen of those years
before bending into the slope of his cane,
slowly falling into the black fabric
of his steel wheelchair.
The months between visits whittle his bones
like the oak crossbeams,
blessed by the appetite of termites.
until his joints hollowed into
an instrument of complaint.
The lives within his dusty rolodex
continued to gather speed
when the symphony of liver pills and calcium drinks,
was silenced by a lapse of the wind
over the floorboards.
A couple from Connecticut came two weeks later
to buy his house, and pace their own path
into the dark, warped wood.
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been wondering where you've been...
nice read, very nice
an instrument of complaint"
The whole thing was detailed and felt significant, somehow, but this line was my favorite.
One that had a chance to win
I wish I was a Republican
But would I be a human being?
--from 'Wishlist,' 7/6/03, Philadelphia
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very descriptive of the ageing process of this man, I could feel him growing old and bent and whittled
I like the break towards the ending, but something about those last 3 lines is not working for me. The last one I really like (dark warped wood) rolls of the tongue very nicely. Maybe it's just unexpected - if I could better explain myself I would, this is of course just me