7th Hole

EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
edited August 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It was the fifth shot on a par five
that followed the last three into the trees
These empty wednesday evenings allow
plenty of time for a stroll to recover lost shots
After I find a the first ball I notice a small building
tucked between saplings. Not more than two
stone pillars holding the remnants of a roof
above colored blocks
Identical structures straddle it on either side,
each in its own state of disrepair.
The farthest building guards a rusted Catholic cadelabra
three rows of black troughs,
tiered with moldy candles
These religious relics fade in the woods
with waterlogged Top Flites and Pinnacles,
whose three iron prayers for birdies
and a good lie were never answered
The processions of nuns from a nearby convent
dim like the flowers and weeds pressed flat
by the grass of the seventh fairway
The crunches of their footsteps
became the hum of passing golf carts
Though the hail mary's remained
uttered silently on the backswing in the tee box
If I had hit my drive 50 yards farther
my search would take me to a clearing
filled with moss and tall grass
but in that overgrowth stands a rotting podium
two feet above the plants, where the litany's and
incantations of mass would begin
conducted to those who sit in outdoor pews,
covered in weeds, remembering that religion
consisted of more than words in book and ceremony
And I sit among the phantoms of prayers, many for every
dimple of the shot that I had found, and I offer up my own
in the hope that to stoke the embers of memory
will steer me through the back nine.

Cheers to Fins and Anomis,

ETE
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  • Wonderfully written.

    Golf is a religion, too.
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • anOmisanOmis Posts: 223
    Originally posted by EvilToasterElf
    It was the fifth shot on a par five
    that followed the last three into the trees
    These empty wednesday evenings allow
    plenty of time for a stroll to recover lost shots
    After I find a the first ball I notice a small building
    tucked between saplings. Not more than two
    stone pillars holding the remnants of a roof
    above colored blocks
    Identical structures straddle it on either side,
    each in its own state of disrepair.
    The farthest building guards a rusted Catholic cadelabra
    three rows of black troughs,
    tiered with moldy candles
    These religious relics fade in the woods
    with waterlogged Top Flites and Pinnacles,
    whose three iron prayers for birdies
    and a good lie were never answered
    The processions of nuns from a nearby convent
    dim like the flowers and weeds pressed flat
    by the grass of the seventh fairway
    The crunches of their footsteps
    became the hum of passing golf carts
    Though the hail mary's remained
    uttered silently on the backswing in the tee box
    If I had hit my drive 50 yards farther
    my search would take me to a clearing
    filled with moss and tall grass
    but in that overgrowth stands a rotting podium
    two feet above the plants, where the litany's and
    incantations of mass would begin
    conducted to those who sit in outdoor pews,
    covered in weeds, remembering that religion
    consisted of more than words in book and ceremony
    And I sit among the phantoms of prayers, many for every
    dimple of the shot that I had found, and I offer up my own
    in the hope that to stoke the embers of memory
    will steer me through the back nine.

    Cheers to Fins and Anomis,

    ETE


    im not a gold fan..but am sure a fan of ETE's poetry!
    ~~dont mind yer make up, just make up yer mind~~

    ~~its better to be hated for who you are than be loved for who you are not~~

    F.ZAPPA
  • BooBooBooBoo Posts: 25
    i like it :D
    after a while i dont actually read it, it starts to beat inside my chest and thats best
    thats understanding maximum
    even more
    thats feeling
    but their heart turned cold and they dropt their wings - sappho
  • A fine piece of work.
  • Originally posted by Traver DiDiminico
    Wonderfully written.

    Golf is a religion, too.

    I'm still not done trying to convey all the symbolism that this little place in the forest stuck in me, it is the religion of suburbia usurping that crude mixture of fear and wonder that were the old religions, but this entire process is so poignant in a crumbling facade of an old prayer station and chapel not 100 yeards from the golf course.

    Thanks for the feedback guys and girls
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    Originally posted by EvilToasterElf
    I'm still not done trying to convey all the symbolism that this little place in the forest stuck in me, it is the religion of suburbia usurping that crude mixture of fear and wonder that were the old religions, but this entire process is so poignant in a crumbling facade of an old prayer station and chapel not 100 yeards from the golf course.

    Thanks for the feedback guys and girls

    it's a great poem ETE
    you can tell this place in the forest definetely stirred many things in you, and very vivid images come to mind
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
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