Nightfire

EvilToasterElf
EvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Sparks erupted in thunder within a hundred yards of us
sporadic at first, two or three at a time, but once
they’d gotten a lock on, fields of flame white
flowers coated the midnight landscape
It’s inextricable beauty, the spell it cast on the evening
was broken only by the screams of torment, and short
gurgling gasps of death which accompanied the
explosive bloom
We heard the muffled shells leaving the broken smile
of artillery pieces, a deadly semi-circle around our base
and then the loud hissing sound, of metal twirling through
the air, like high notes through an opera’s crescendo
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  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    I do like this poetic hellfire.
    It's almost playful and romantic!

    nice :)
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    Wow. That was a powerful poem.
  • EvilToasterElf
    EvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    Ah, thankyou both, I'm not quite sure if I want to do something to this or just leave it alone, it's been sitting around untouched for a couple years
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    EvilToasterElf wrote:
    Ah, thankyou both, I'm not quite sure if I want to do something to this or just leave it alone, it's been sitting around untouched for a couple years

    Well, it's just my opinion, but I think you should leave it just how it is.

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