The Runner

EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
The Runner

I do not run for fun.
I run to live, and because man was not born to fly,
I do not run until I get tired, I do not run until I cramp,
I run to know I love the world, when the stars run out
of blue blood, and stare down at those lakes with their
blank eyes, I run.
I run through sweat until it dries and cakes
all over my arms and head, my skin becomes
the salt of sweat

I trace the next fifty footfalls through my mind
as I weave across the fractured sidewalk
the pavement tells me the stories of it’s birth
one square is a darker gray, it dried one winter
day in the cold rain
T.J. was here, screams one square, the day
before I dried in 1997, the geese had already
migrated south that year
Rose forgot some of the blood from her knee, when
she fell here five years ago, the mark withers
with rubber traffic and stormy nights, but the
walkway remembers, for the tired runners
looking down, these stories pass us like
fossilized flip books of suburban lives

I read rosetta stones in the cracks,
and shed sweat from my forehead
like witch doctors casting raven’s bones

Approaching the turn my body bends and twists
my torso leans, a branch in the sunlight
until I reach the next straightaway, and my body
returns to it’s stalking height of perpetual motion

The mind can go to great lengths to avoid thinking
of pain, to ignore the lactic acid building in the
muscles of the legs, deprived of oxygen
The sweat covers the length of my skin, coats my
feet and soaks through my socks, my ultra-light
running kayaks slosh water away from my feet

My feet begin overwriting the history of the pavement
revising the history of the concrete, my souls beat the
rhythm of my life’s story into the ground behind me
the story of my life is painted in sweat in my wake
my first kiss falls across a turn, my first homerun
soaks through a pile of dog shit and bleeds itself
into a crack
by the sixth mile, thousands of striding chapters
past my birth, my first fuck pours itself out of
the cotton sheets of memory and flows in ribbons
to the rhythm of my feet, bursting into the ground.

I run until I turn the world backwards, I can see
the town shrink around me, it’s foundations
break and fill with dirt, and breeding deer
I see pizza returning to the oven, cars returning to the lot
grandparents born, native Indians conquered, roads become
paths, paths become trails plowed by curious steps

I see Hitler running past Napoleon, his back to Russia,
where the Corsican bounds in a Sprint. The two nod and return
their eyes to the ground, the red grass and burnt trees, the battlefields
were places to linger, and they would never risk being lapped.

Napoleon’s ears are covered by his hands, as Charlemagne’s troops canter
past in formation, a great steal soaked sponge dead set on Jerusalem,
but they raise their visors to spy the giant human turtles,
running past in sandals, bearing the banner of Rome.
I circle Europe defying history’s greatest runners,
their feet are now my feet, their life’s work
bound in my miles.

When I run death can’t catch me, God can’t even train his eyes
on me until I stop. I run far enough to see the moon twice in one day.
My shadow pants from exhaustion and sits down on a bench,
my shadow watches me run laps, it watches as a run into my wife,
and through my children’s graduation, it watches as my hairline
runs to the back of my scalp, as my stride is stopped by a seizure.

But my shadow returns to me under the bright hospital lights of
last year. It gloats as the doctor tells me, I ran too much, I pushed
too hard, I wrote too many memoirs along the towns flagstones.
The doctor told me I had three weeks to live, and I would likely
live them in bed, on my back. When he left the room, I did the
only thing a runner knows how to do. I laced up my sneakers,
and wrote my obituary.
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Comments

  • It'd make a good stream of consciousness piece in a work of sustained prose, in the mould of Woolf's "The Waves". I'd edit the number of times you say run though, and the part

    Approaching the turn my body bends and twists
    my torso leans, a branch in the sunlight
    until I reach the next straightaway, and my body
    returns to it’s stalking height of perpetual motion

    The mind can go to great lengths to avoid thinking
    of pain, to ignore the lactic acid building in the
    muscles of the legs, deprived of oxygen
    The sweat covers the length of my skin, coats my
    feet and soaks through my socks, my ultra-light
    running kayaks slosh water away from my feet

    My feet begin overwriting the history of the pavement
    revising the history of the concrete, my souls beat the
    rhythm of my life’s story into the ground behind me
    the story of my life is painted in sweat in my wake
    my first kiss falls across a turn, my first homerun
    soaks through a pile of dog shit and bleeds itself
    into a crack

    could do with a little editing. The syntax itself displays the mind/body dissociation you're after (because "my body bends and twists" and "My feet begin overwriting..." are so different from "I run") and the distinction needn't be overstated.

    Overall it works though, though given its title and (literal and metaphorical) theme it needs some tweaking to manage its pace.
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    Thanks Fins,

    It started as an idea I got at a poetry slam, but it ran out of juice quick and it's creation has been plodding along since. It needs some serious editing, thanks for the pointers, I'll repost it when I think I'm getting somewhere with it.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    The beginning and end of this poem are signs of hefty work. I'd take Fins' advice...with a little editing this poem could be one of the best things I've ever read. The first stanza is, to my mind, nearly perfect.

    Damn, there's a lot of great work on this board right now!!!!
    .........................................................................
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    i shared this with a friend and she is a runner and she said it is very good.. the imagery is very familiar..

    it is good.. thanks :)
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    tell me if this works better for you guys

    The Runner

    I do not run for fun.
    I run to live,
    because man was not born to fly,
    I do not run until I get tired,
    I do not run until I cramp,
    I run to know I love the world,
    when the stars bleed blue,
    and stare down at those lakes
    with their blank eyes,
    I run.

    I run through sweat
    until it dries and cakes
    my skin becomes salt

    I trace the next fifty footfalls through my mind
    as I weave across the fractured sidewalk
    the pavement tells me stories
    of those who ran before.
    T.J. was here, screams one square,
    the day before I dried in 1997, the geese had already
    migrated south that year
    Rose forgot some of the blood from her knee, when
    she fell here five years ago, the mark withers
    with rubber traffic and stormy nights, but the
    walkway remembers, for the tired runners
    looking down, these stories pass us like
    fossilized flip books of suburban lives

    I read rosetta stones in the cracks,
    and shed sweat from my forehead
    like witch doctors casting raven’s bones

    My feet overwrite the history of the pavement
    my souls paint a canvas of concrete with sweat
    my first kiss falls across a turn, my first homerun
    bleeds itself into a crack
    by the sixth mile, thousands of striding chapters
    past my birth, my first fuck pours itself out of
    the cotton sheets of memory
    and flows in ribbons to the rhythm of my feet.

    I run until I turn the world backwards, I can see
    the town shrink around me,
    foundations break and fill with dirt
    pizza returns to the oven, cars return to the lot
    grandparents are born, native Indians conquered,
    roads become paths,
    paths become trails plowed by curious steps

    I see Hitler running past Napoleon,
    his back to Russia,
    where the Corsican bounds in a sprint.
    The two nod and return their eyes to the ground,
    the red grass and burnt trees, the battlefields
    were places to linger, and they never risk being lapped.

    Napoleon’s hands cover his ears,
    as Charlemagne’s troops
    canter past in formation,
    a great steal sponge dead set on Jerusalem,
    but they raise their visors to spy the giant human turtles,
    running past in sandals,
    bearing the banner of Rome.
    I circle Europe defying history’s greatest runners,
    their feet are now my feet, their life’s work
    bound in my miles.

    When I run death can’t catch me,
    God can’t train his eyes
    until I stop.

    I run enough to see the moon twice in one day.
    My shadow pants from exhaustion
    and sits down on a bench,
    watches me run laps, as I run into my wife,
    and through my children’s graduation,
    it watches as my hairline shrinks
    and my stride is stopped by a seizure.

    But my shadow returns to me
    under the bright hospital lights
    It gloats as the doctor tells me,
    I ran too much,
    I pushed too hard,
    I wrote too many memoirs along the towns flagstones.
    The doctor told me I had three weeks to live,
    and I would likely live them in bed, on my back.

    When he left the room,
    I did the only thing a runner knows to do.
    I laced up my sneakers, and wrote my obituary.
  • pearlmuttpearlmutt Posts: 392
    "when the stars bleed blue,"

    cross-curricular activity:

    I like that a lot it reminds me of Ryan Adams' line "when the stars go blue," yours is better. It's more poetic.
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    pearlmutt wrote:
    "when the stars bleed blue,"

    cross-curricular activity:

    I like that a lot it reminds me of Ryan Adams' line "when the stars go blue," yours is better. It's more poetic.

    EvilToasterElf - 1
    Ryan Adams - 0

    hehe, thanks pearlmutt
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