Lady Luck
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Lady Luck
I saw him stretched out
under the white sheets
The final blank page
of his unwritten biography
A novel of 12 hour days
blasted by furnaces
sealed into his family
by soot and bourbon
His body the final smelter
of blood and cancer
Gambling debts mixed
with his children’s tuitions
He stares through all of us
an old gambler
shuffling through
his crusty trumps of memory
His full house
of ex-wives and children
emptied his pockets
and filled his eyes
Those eyes that bluff
about late, sweaty nights
The off suit hands
and the affairs of chance
that rule a man’s freedom
The pale king of diamond
pawn shops,
still has his poker eyes,
and one look is enough
to know a man who can
bluff through scripture
and sin and take his
place at the final table
I saw him stretched out
under the white sheets
The final blank page
of his unwritten biography
A novel of 12 hour days
blasted by furnaces
sealed into his family
by soot and bourbon
His body the final smelter
of blood and cancer
Gambling debts mixed
with his children’s tuitions
He stares through all of us
an old gambler
shuffling through
his crusty trumps of memory
His full house
of ex-wives and children
emptied his pockets
and filled his eyes
Those eyes that bluff
about late, sweaty nights
The off suit hands
and the affairs of chance
that rule a man’s freedom
The pale king of diamond
pawn shops,
still has his poker eyes,
and one look is enough
to know a man who can
bluff through scripture
and sin and take his
place at the final table
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of blood and cancer
Gambling debts mixed
with his children’s tuitions
I think structurally "blood" is equivalent to "children's tuitions" and "cancer" is equivalent to "Gambling debts", so you should invert the noun order in the second two lines.
hmm, I wasn't even thinking of the parelell structure there, thanks fins