Senseless

EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
edited January 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Near the window, the sun crowns her
brown hair with dust. She sings now,
when his brush seems unsteady.

Why can’t you take a picture,
and paint that? She was terribly bored
of sitting. Because it’s not the same,

a response, he thought indomitable.
The blondes never complained,
but they were easily flattered.

Some of his women didn’t even stay
for him to finish the painting. Those faces
emerged like sparks, the kindling of memory.

His spare room and bedroom filled
with painted women, against the walls
and under the bed, piled like tombstones.

It was usually their idea to take off their clothes,
and he never objected. Easier to mix flesh
than figure out fabrics. Only one picture

hangs on the wall. It was his favorite.
He painted her in mid-wink.
She knew something the others didn’t.

She hung above the window where others sat,
under sunlight or stars. He played
indie rock and jazz while he painted.

He despised classical music. One day
his world of colors faded to white noise,
when he saw a new portrait of his favorite girl.

Black and white, under the bold, large font
of a headline: Slain girl found in park.
He never read the article. He kept the picture,

people look frail in black and white,
Slowly, he stopped painting during the day.
His girls became serious, wore dark make-up

and black clothes. They looked like ghosts
under the artificial moonlight on the canvas.
He wanted to paint a corpse. Maybe

it’s like painting the eyes of the blind.
He found a blind girl and took off her glasses.
Windows to the soul, he thought,

does that make the blind monsters?
He asked what she heard when he painted.
A record player, an eternal needle scratching

the surface, moments before the music.
This was painting to her, hints of static
trembling before the percussion section.

His filled his life and his easel with the blind,
For the blind, eyes are mirrors, and they
hasten to cover them, before we see ourselves

reflected. After a while, it was the smile
that captured his attention most. A blind
smile, unassuming, lips forming in a vacuum

sequestered by the imagination. The last
blind girl was painted only from the chin
to the lips. He wondered where to get her

eyes. He thought nature was geometry,
so he found a deaf girl. Her eyes beamed.
He sewed together these two girls. One

without vision, one without sound.
The Rembrandt Frankenstein, a puzzle
of flesh. After it was done, so was he.

He painted himself in the old style.
He lived through a mirror for a week
before he finished capturing himself

in glass and fabric – color and light
He took his old, dead goddess off the wall,
and placed his collage in its place,

it was the only piece with a name,

Senseless.

He only hoped if the girls ever saw it,
or touched it in some distant future place,
a synapse within them would fire,

as they realize we’d all been painted
in sinister, savage strokes, filling the void
of a womb with light, and while a blind woman

listens for footsteps a deaf girl watches
for a creeping shadow under the front door,
a man hangs his self portrait next to a woman

he can never love, and saunters outside
with a hammer, a hundred nails,
and a hundred women, ripped from their frames.

He spent the day in the city’s largest park,
nailing his women to the trees. Nobody
asks questions. Concern is the measure

of the size of a city. They must have thought
it some obscure artistic endeavor.
His women watched the sunset, unmolested

by the stir of insects. Sun streaks
scythe into their open eyes on a Saturday,
the joggers take notice of their company.

News Anchors arrive to document
the dozens of anonymous art pieces,
followed swiftly by reporters, and revelers.

Beautiful faces flooded the news stands,
the papers wanted to know the mystery
artist. Rewards were offered, velvet ropes

erected. A great many boys fell in love.
While a lonely man sat in a dark room,
thinking, when the skies opened,
and poured their turpentine, his girls
would make the most colorful puddles.
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  • enjoyed reading... i read a lot of it from bottom to middle.
    Salut baloo
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    Great read, you get lost in the character and his story so that is def a very good thing.
    I will look at it more carefully when I am not at work!
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    Near the window, the sun crowns her
    brown hair with dust. She sings now,
    when his brush seems unsteady.

    Why can’t you take a picture,
    and paint that? She was terribly bored
    of sitting. Because it’s not the same,

    a response, he thought indomitable.
    The blondes never complained,
    but they were easily flattered.

    Some of his women didn’t even stay
    for him to finish the painting. Those faces
    emerged like sparks, the kindling of memory.

    His spare room and bedroom filled
    with painted women, against the walls
    and under the bed, piled like tombstones.

    It was usually their idea to take off their clothes,
    and he never objected. Easier to mix flesh
    than figure out fabrics. Only one picture

    hangs on the wall. It was his favorite.
    He painted her in mid-wink.
    She knew something the others didn’t.

    She hung above the window where others sat,
    under sunlight or stars. He played
    indie rock and jazz while he painted.

    He despised classical music. One day
    his world of colors faded to white noise,
    when he saw a new portrait of his favorite girl.

    Black and white, under the bold, large font
    of a headline: Slain girl found in park.
    He never read the article. He kept the picture,

    people look frail in black and white,
    Slowly, he stopped painting during the day.
    His girls became serious, wore dark make-up

    and black clothes. They looked like ghosts
    under the artificial moonlight on the canvas.
    He wanted to paint a corpse. Maybe

    it’s like painting the eyes of the blind.
    He found a blind girl and took off her glasses.
    Windows to the soul, he thought,

    does that make the blind monsters?
    He asked what she heard when he painted.
    A record player, an eternal needle scratching

    the surface, moments before the music.
    This was painting to her, hints of static
    trembling before the percussion section.

    His filled his life and his easel with the blind,
    For the blind, eyes are mirrors, and they
    hasten to cover them, before we see ourselves

    reflected. After a while, it was the smile
    that captured his attention most. A blind
    smile, unassuming, lips forming in a vacuum

    sequestered by the imagination. The last
    blind girl was painted only from the chin
    to the lips. He wondered where to get her

    eyes. He thought nature was geometry,
    so he found a deaf girl. Her eyes beamed.
    He sewed together these two girls. One

    without vision, one without sound.
    The Rembrandt Frankenstein, a puzzle
    of flesh. After it was done, so was he.

    He painted himself in the old style.
    He lived through a mirror for a week
    before he finished capturing himself

    in glass and fabric – color and light
    He took his old, dead goddess off the wall,
    and placed his collage in its place,

    it was the only piece with a name,

    Senseless.

    He only hoped if the girls ever saw it,
    or touched it in some distant future place,
    a synapse within them would fire,

    as they realize we’d all been painted
    in sinister, savage strokes, filling the void
    of a womb with light, and while a blind woman

    listens for footsteps a deaf girl watches
    for a creeping shadow under the front door,
    a man hangs his self portrait next to a woman

    he can never love, and saunters outside
    with a hammer, a hundred nails,
    and a hundred women, ripped from their frames.

    He spent the day in the city’s largest park,
    nailing his women to the trees. Nobody
    asks questions. Concern is the measure

    of the size of a city. They must have thought
    it some obscure artistic endeavor.
    His women watched the sunset, unmolested

    by the stir of insects. Sun streaks
    scythe into their open eyes on a Saturday,
    the joggers take notice of their company.

    News Anchors arrive to document
    the dozens of anonymous art pieces,
    followed swiftly by reporters, and revelers.

    Beautiful faces flooded the news stands,
    the papers wanted to know the mystery
    artist. Rewards were offered, velvet ropes

    erected. A great many boys fell in love.
    While a lonely man sat in a dark room,
    thinking, when the skies opened,
    and poured their turpentine, his girls
    would make the most colorful puddles.

    There are some fantastic stanzas/verses in this poem. The ending is brilliant.
    What I sense from the painter is a growing detachment from his former love, this starts upon hearing about the death of his favourite girl. I enjoyed the change in mood in the poem and then his almost surgical approach to painting, his fascination/fixation with blind girls, his senseless collage, his self portrait, and then him just being spent, over and done with it.

    Only lines I'm not too keen on are:

    "For the blind, eyes are mirrors, and they
    hasten to cover them, before we see ourselves reflected"

    "Windows to the soul, he thought,
    does that make the blind monsters?"

    And some favourite parts:

    and while a blind woman

    listens for footsteps a deaf girl watches
    for a creeping shadow under the front door,
    a man hangs his self portrait next to a woman

    he can never love, and saunters outside
    with a hammer, a hundred nails,
    and a hundred women, ripped from their frames.

    oh and I would love to know what she knew (the special one) that the others didn't ;)

    Great poem.
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • Ah thanks for the in depth response Buru - the eyes are mirrors line, is supposed to be indicative of the fact that the blind always wear sunglasses, and it's very rare that you even see their eyes.

    but I'll take a look again and see how I feel about them, thanks for the food for thought.

    ETE
  • Ian MIan M Posts: 123
    Really enjoyed reading this.
    True story?
    The record player thing is weird. On my deck you can hear a ghost of the coming sound just before the track begins, if it's loud enough. Maybe there's something wrong with my needle...
    Interesting comparison across disciplines, though.
    Do you get an entire "percussion section" outside of classical music?
  • wonderful!!

    you have outdone yourself!
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • Ian M wrote:
    Really enjoyed reading this.
    True story?
    The record player thing is weird. On my deck you can hear a ghost of the coming sound just before the track begins, if it's loud enough. Maybe there's something wrong with my needle...
    Interesting comparison across disciplines, though.
    Do you get an entire "percussion section" outside of classical music?


    Thanks for the comment, no it's pretty far from a true story, I've never painted a picture, nor do I know any blind or deaf women.

    I'm pretty sure in most music percussion tends to lead the tracks, I could be wrong.

    Depop thanks for the kudos sir, I look forward to reading your next one as well.
  • Ian MIan M Posts: 123
    oh, ok
    I thought you might've read about it in the paper or something.
    There's a tribute to how well you tell the story!
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