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why?

Obi OnceObi Once Posts: 918
edited August 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
why
do you hunt my dreams
linger in my conscience
distract me from daily things

why
were you my first wonderwall
turning my world upside down
leaving a gap in me

why
is this chapter still open
and still winding on
not leaving me in peace
your light's reflected now
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  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    I like the subtle questions as they flow through this piece. Lust or love?
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • Obi OnceObi Once Posts: 918
    Originally posted by even flow?
    I like the subtle questions as they flow through this piece. Lust or love?
    funny i didnt even feel like i put it in there (lust or love?) or are u asking me this?
    your light's reflected now
  • even flow?even flow? Posts: 8,066
    Originally posted by Obi Once
    funny i didnt even feel like i put it in there (lust or love?) or are u asking me this?

    The read (to me) seems to be a love/lust struggle over another person? Of course that is just my interpretation of it.
    You've changed your place in this world!
  • Obi OnceObi Once Posts: 918
    Originally posted by even flow?
    The read (to me) seems to be a love/lust struggle over another person? Of course that is just my interpretation of it.
    u hit the nail on the head! i didnt even really think while i wrote it
    your light's reflected now
  • Obi OnceObi Once Posts: 918
    Originally posted by Obi Once
    u hit the nail on the head! i didnt even really think while i wrote it
    i actually didnt think about the lust thing when i wrote it and i dont think thats actually an issue... i guess my problem is i dont fall in love easily and now it seems it takes quite a while to wear of.. never thought it be diffucult like this..
    and perhaps worst of all i keep a distance (or dont call) from potential new loved ones..
    your light's reflected now
  • Mr PyjamaMr Pyjama Posts: 253
    Originally posted by Obi Once
    i actually didnt think about the lust thing when i wrote it and i dont think thats actually an issue... i guess my problem is i dont fall in love easily and now it seems it takes quite a while to wear of.. never thought it be diffucult like this..
    and perhaps worst of all i keep a distance (or dont call) from potential new loved ones..

    Aye, loves tough. Especially when its hard to find, then when you have it, its hard to let it go. I liked your piece a lot too, very nice.
    Situations get fucked up and turned around sooner or later...
  • Obi OnceObi Once Posts: 918
    Originally posted by Mr Pyjama
    Aye, loves tough. Especially when its hard to find, then when you have it, its hard to let it go. I liked your piece a lot too, very nice.
    i was just about to compliment ur Framed Remains! and yes love's hard to let go of.. time i see things in my RVM again
    your light's reflected now
  • Mr PyjamaMr Pyjama Posts: 253
    Originally posted by Obi Once
    i was just about to compliment ur Framed Remains! and yes love's hard to let go of.. time i see things in my RVM again

    Haha, yeah- allow yourself to see things so much clearer.. :D
    Situations get fucked up and turned around sooner or later...
  • bossman3188bossman3188 Posts: 263
    great way of writing a poem...wonderfull
    there'll be time for laughin'
    there's no time to cry
    soon i will be leavin'
    look me in the eye
    no matter what's in front of me
    it's your face that i'll see
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