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i hear a pulse

deadnothingbetterdeadnothingbetter Posts: 2,202
edited August 2008 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
slip. pull. breath. feed. learn. crawl. play. walk. talk. school. friends. bullies. period. puberty. peers. pressure. trouble. drugs. sex. alcohol. highschool. girlfriends. boyfriends. love. college. future. ambition. denial. regret. preserverance. soul. mate. lover. no. yes. maybe. heat. passion. embrace. conceive. children. home. denial. regret. failure. divorce. redemption. grandchildren. love. embrace. shock. panic. stroke. pace. rot. pace. rot. pace. rot. end.
This isn't the land of opportunity, it's the land of competition.
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  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    that's pretty flippin cool, quite the story.
    i like it.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • dunkmandunkman Posts: 19,646
    no capital letters?
    oh scary... 40000 morbidly obese christians wearing fanny packs invading europe is probably the least scariest thing since I watched an edited version of The Care Bears movie in an extremely brightly lit cinema.
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    dunkman wrote:
    no capital letters?

    no need.

    that was cool dnb. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • deadnothingbetterdeadnothingbetter Posts: 2,202
    dunkman wrote:
    no capital letters?
    i'm too cool for caps... :cool: ;)
    This isn't the land of opportunity, it's the land of competition.
  • deadnothingbetterdeadnothingbetter Posts: 2,202
    catefrances wrote:
    no need.

    that was cool dnb. :)
    thanks... i wasn't expecting any reaction from this little poetry form i came up one night when i couldn't sleep. i tried to keep it as i had it originally... i think it sounded better then. i might change it a little.
    This isn't the land of opportunity, it's the land of competition.
  • dunkmandunkman Posts: 19,646
    deadnothingbetter wrote:
    i'm too cool for caps... :cool: ;)


    tell that to LL COOL J

    ;)
    oh scary... 40000 morbidly obese christians wearing fanny packs invading europe is probably the least scariest thing since I watched an edited version of The Care Bears movie in an extremely brightly lit cinema.
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    dunkman wrote:
    tell that to LL COOL J

    ;)

    yeah but cool james only listens to the ladies. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • deadnothingbetterdeadnothingbetter Posts: 2,202
    dunkman wrote:
    tell that to LL COOL J

    ;)
    what catefrances said.
    This isn't the land of opportunity, it's the land of competition.
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