By the Callous You Hide (Mighty River)

deadnothingbetter

(I hope you guys like my song)


Mighty, mighty river comes to carry us into a land of a thousand dreams
And you wonder why you had to leave
Mighty, mighty river comes to wash our wounds and hide these scars
But you never wanted to tear apart

The second I met you, your smile reminded me
Of bitter years that surrendered wisdom to your hands
And the callous you hide by the beauty in your laughter
It's a wonder why you choose to stay
But your hands are to kiss and care for
And why you refuse, is a wonder far away

Mighty, mighty river comes to bring life into these lands
And you wonder if there's life in foreign lands
Mighty, mighty river is flowing with living waters
But your still drawing from the well

And the last time I saw you my world was drained
The words ran out like submarine in space (feeling out of place)
And the callous you hid very well, was shone in my speech
Why I chose to stay - I cannot say
But I still long to kiss you and care for you
And why you refuse, is a wonder far away

Mighty, mighty river came too quickly and washed us away
Mighty, mighty river had much to give but none to say
And why we stayed is a wonder far, far away
And by the callous you hide you choose to stay
You choose to stay
You choose to stay

trappedinmyradio

deadnothingbetter wrote:

(I hope you guys like my song)

i do like it - the only thing i don't like is the back to back use of lands...any chance that we might get to hear it?

deadnothingbetter

trappedinmyradio wrote:

i do like it - the only thing i don't like is the back to back use of lands...any chance that we might get to hear it?

I know what you mean... I guess for some reason I felt that using lands twice made it sound "childlike" and i wondered maybe it will give a sense of simplicity... I don't know (i think i'm weird)

come to austin, tx and hear me play it...... @ my friends house. hehe

trappedinmyradio

deadnothingbetter wrote:

I know what you mean... I guess for some reason I felt that using lands twice made it sound "childlike" and i wondered maybe it will give a sense of simplicity... I don't know (i think i'm weird)

come to austin, tx and hear me play it...... @ my friends house. hehe

i'll be sure to make that ~1500 mile one-way trip...it's not a bad thing - but, reading it, those two lines, i don't like it...no biggie.

deadnothingbetter

trappedinmyradio wrote:

i'll be sure to make that ~1500 mile one-way trip...it's not a bad thing - but, reading it, those two lines, i don't like it...no biggie.

you're right... i did have a hard time putting something that would fall under the "foreign" concept and would rhyme with land.... i wrote it late @ night.... but I did consider changing it, even when i was writing it here, i thought of changing it, but i couldn't think of anything...go figure.

trappedinmyradio

deadnothingbetter wrote:

you're right... i did have a hard time putting something that would fall under the "foreign" concept and would rhyme with land.... i wrote it late @ night.... but I did consider changing it, even when i was writing it here, i thought of changing it, but i couldn't think of anything...go figure.

considering you use the river...i thought of sands...with mesopotamia of old...the nile in egypt...