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deadnothingbetter

I want to scream and say all about her

She is so clean… just like my heart

I want to race and take her from your arms

She used to be mine and it’s hard

She likes sweet snow late at nights

Just thought I’d tell you why

She is so sad when you leave

Without saying good-bye

Night falls to shade my sadness

Clouds roll out like her dress

And all becomes one with my thoughts

I want to scream and say why I miss her

If you don’t believe me, smell her… please

Or I won’t leave until we can both agree

She’ll always be mine… I can’t release

The cuddling dolls make her safe

And her feet are sore and warm

Sliding in your hands they become one

When all is completely calm

Night falls to shade my sadness

Clouds roll out like her dress

All becomes one with my thoughts

We’re all here, we’re home now

And nothing can undo what we have become

twin2

Nice poem. It's heartfelt.

deadnothingbetter

twin2 wrote:

Nice poem. It's heartfelt.

thanks. i wrote it after a broke up with a girl.

twin1

Wow, that was really sweet and beautiful. You can feel the longing in it. very nice...I liked your descriptions.

Being Enlightened

deadnothingbetter wrote:

thanks. i wrote it after a broke up with a girl.

Yeah, you can feel the longing and the sadness. It's very beautiful.

twin2

codedbrandedlabelled wrote:

don't worry one day you will inflict this pain on another man (not that you want to), but the shoe will soon be on the other foot, unless you have already.

That works both ways. Men and women hurt each other.

deadnothingbetter

to be honest, at first I thought this poem was horrible. I didn't even try writing it. I just wrote it. But now i'm looking at the feedback and i'm quite surprised a few people enjoyed the poem. i have other writings that i consider much more mature, but you might think otherwise. i will include it in here sometime, and see what you peepz might think.

Ali

very sincere poem...and sad in a way....