Sun Butterfly

FinsburyParkCarrots
FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
edited July 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
There will be re-openings of chance.
Sun butterfly, lift up your noonwhite wings
and flee unwinded leaves, to fight a dance
across a road of dazzling moving things,
blurs of cars and rocking trucks. Make risk
what makes you live. Fly, skate the weighted air
that stylus-thick beats on this broken disk
of earth. Groove songs of danger's freeing flair
upon the leaden surface of this day,
mark out a song of rapture and of death
and move world winds, when flashing winging way
across dank city dust where no good breath
is ever drawn. Risk end, that in your fall
new air might stir and thunder save us all.
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  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    "I have free will, I cannot be controlled.
    Some choose the narrow path, I choose the broad."
    Come, see your scroll of destiny unrolled.
    Whichever path you walk, we own the road.
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Leave those rooms of cold and come
    to garden golden day.
    Come sing the songs of old that home
    on prayering magic play.
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    There will be re-openings of chance.
    Sun butterfly, lift up your noonwhite wings
    and flee unwinded leaves, to fight a dance
    across a road of dazzling moving things,
    blurs of cars and rocking trucks. Make risk
    what makes you live. Fly, skate the weighted air
    that stylus-thick beats on this broken disk
    of earth. Groove songs of danger's freeing flair
    upon the leaden surface of this day,
    mark out a song of rapture and of death
    and move world winds, when flashing winging way
    across dank city dust where no good breath
    is ever drawn. Risk end, that in your fall
    new air might stir and thunder save us all.
    This is my favorite poem of yours. I can picture what you are writing about clearly and I follow the butterfly through it's chances. I'll reread it over and over because there's so much activity in it. Good job, Mr. Carrots!
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • kdpjam
    kdpjam Posts: 2,303
    Bibliobella wrote:
    This is my favorite poem of yours. I can picture what you are writing about clearly and I follow the butterfly through it's chances. I'll reread it over and over because there's so much activity in it. Good job, Mr. Carrots!

    yes i love this too. it also reminds me that you have to take chances to be totally free. excellent.
    lay down all thoughts; surrender to the void
    ~it is shining it is shining~
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Thanks, Bella. I was looking out of my window today while being distracted from my reading and I followed a butterfly fluttering across a busy road, and then came the poem in about five minutes, after which I just put it up here. Thoughts arrive like butterflies and I wasn't going to chase that one away. :)
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    kdpjam wrote:
    yes i love this too. it also reminds me that you have to take chances to be totally free. excellent.

    Thank you for that, k-. :)
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Thanks, Bella. I was looking out of my window today while being distracted from my reading and I followed a butterfly fluttering across a busy road, and then came the poem in about five minutes, after which I just put it up here. Thoughts arrive like butterflies and I wasn't going to chase that one away. :)
    How long do you usually spend on a poem that you post here? I usually go through 5 to 10 drafts for about 70-80% of them. I've always been impressed with your ability to just throw a nice one out there. How many hours do you spend in a day reading poetry? It's what you're studying, isn't it?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    That poem took under ten minutes, first draft-ish.

    I read for about six hours on average, and often more. :)
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    Finns...nice job...
    Evenflow.Makes me want to sing.
    You should read some LIPo.
    Amazing how it brings you back to simplicity.

    Excellent poem.:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Kwyjibo
    Kwyjibo Posts: 662
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    noonwhite wings


    whoa, that rules.


    say that outloud!

    *noonwhite wings*
    The most remarkable thing about you standing in the doorway, is that its you, and that you're standing in the doorway.

    I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I might knock off another couple of quickies later. Thanks.

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