Folktale (work in progress....)

FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
edited April 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Part one

As I was walking the market road
by the verge of the growing stone
Carrying a winesack for my load
with my good friends Bill and Tone
I came to a turn that I'd never seen:
a forked path through a wood
and I said "It might lead to the market, men:
By its shape I think it should."

We walked up the path till the gathering trees
blocked out the blue of the day
A hound cried out through the rustling breeze
and darkness led the way
Our feet were raw as we dragged along
and our moans were too weak to be heard
Knowing by now that the road was wrong
But too tired to speak a word.

In the crack of a poplar the sunset bled
and some raingulls flapped away
Our stomachs were growling, for none was fed
in this dismal, wasted day.
But Bill pointed out as I bowed my head,
surveying my blistered toes:
"Look at that cave at the back of the wood
where the rhodedendron grows!"

We hurried along with our sack of wine
to the open mouth of the cave
and huddled inside where it seemed fine:
a sheltered night we'd have.
There were sheep and a fire; we lay down
all three for a night in the warm:
Just then a sound like boulders blown
by godwinds raised in storm.

Inside the mouth of the cave there came
A man of ten feet high
His back was as broad as the deepest dam
and he had a patch on one eye
And he came with a flock of the choicest sheep
and he ushered them in by name:
We hid back in the cavewall deep
out of sight of his fireside flame.

"It's no good hiding, you three fools,"
He growled as he spun right around:
"I've only one eye but the greatest of tools
is my nose, and I soon have you found!"
He snatched up Bill in his broadening hand
and proceeded to swallow him whole
right from the brow to the toenails at end:
right from the skin to the soul.....


To be continued, tomorrow.....
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  • FancyFacadeFancyFacade Posts: 330
    pretty awesome so far... ;)
  • Tone searched his fob for a pointed blade
    As he ran round the Giant’s big frame,
    Skipping like a deer running down a glade
    When a hunter seeks his game.
    He cried, “For what you’ve done with my very best friend,
    Eating him tooth and nail,
    With my dagger I’ll carve you a sorry end
    For my knife-throws never fail.”

    And Tone threw the blade at the Giant’s throat
    But the Giant he ducked and he dodged
    And the knife caught the flank of a nearby goat
    And there it verily lodged.
    The goat gave a bleat and Giant broke down
    With a fat tear from his eye:
    ”My goat is my prize and his life is my own:
    For your vicious act you’ll die.”

    And the Giant made a run with a booming growl:
    The fire threw shapes on the wall,
    And a shadow ate a shadow to the screech of an owl
    And ate it fob and all.
    And I sat still looking eyes to eye
    With the creature who was licking his teeth
    Wondering how I could ever defy
    The big man’s towering wrath.

    Just then like a bolt from the heavens above
    A strategy came to mind:
    I said, “I see those sheep get a lot of love
    For you never leave one behind,
    When you call them in here from a day on the field!
    Your goats get good care too!
    I must confess that I truly yield
    Respect for what you do!”

    The giant he winked and he blinked in a think
    And he set about stroking his chin,
    Then he turned up his face with his cheeks blush-pink
    As he held his breath within;
    Then he nodded and he smiled and sat by my side:
    Beside him I looked like a doll.
    And he laughed, “What you say: well it fills me with pride!
    By the way, my name is Pol.”

    I nodded and cheered, but still all the while
    I thought of a plan of mine,
    And I smiled with a smile of the craftiest guile
    And said, “Would you like some wine?”
    The giant said, “You are a generous soul
    But of wine I don’t partake.
    Still, here, pour a fill in my drinking bowl
    For I’ll drink it for your sake…

    …and when I’ve drunk down, from the cream to the lees,
    Your good aperitif,
    I’ll lift you up with the greatest of ease
    And crush you in my teeth.
    But first I must ask you to pour the wine
    With a good and a spirited aim,
    And I really must ask of this victim of mine:
    What is your title and name?”

    I answered, “A title have I none:
    A market lad am I.
    My name, for sure, it is Noh Wann
    From birth till when I die.”
    The Giant laughed, “Well then, Noh Wann,
    Prepare to meet thy doom!”
    He lifted the bowl and he tipped it down
    To his mouth, as his slurps filled the room.

    With a crash and smash the bowl hit the ground
    And the Giant fell flat on his back,
    And the roof of the cave echoed snoring sound
    As I planned for a swift attack.
    I lifted a log near the blazing fire
    And I pulled out the knife from the goat,
    And I sharpened a point to the width of a wire
    And into the fire’s heat

    I held it until it was white as a swan
    Hissing out at a scavenging dog
    And I drew it out now and at once I began
    To charge fast with my crackling log
    And I plunged the hot point in the unlidded eye
    Of the Giant; I turned the point round
    And his eye popped and bubbled and fizzed by and by
    And the cave filled with clamorous sound….


    To be continued......
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    :D pretty cool there, mr. carrots :D
  • just readin' that...i can't get that bloody voice outta my head you used earlier unkie Fins!!!! "oooh-arrgh"...fascinating, imaginative and funny......... keep it up! :D
    I don't live today.....Maybe tomorrow?-Jimi Hendrix
  • The Giant sprang up with a leap like a trout
    On a river in mid July,
    And roared “Ye Gods!” as he scrambled about
    With the log stuck in his eye.
    In an instant I ran for the door of the cave
    But I found to my dismay
    The boulder he’d jammed in its mouth wouldn’t give
    Though I pushed and pushed away.

    My heart in my throat and a sweat on my brow,
    And my hands in a shake and a quiver,
    I turned to the Giant who neared me now
    And thought to let fate deliver.
    Just then, outside, I heard voices call,
    “Is that you making all that noise?
    Are you sure you’re alright in there, brother Pol?
    Do you need any help from the boys?”


    “Noh Wann has stabbed me,” Pol exclaimed,
    “Noh Wann has thieved my sight!
    Noh Wann has left me blind and maimed
    This godforsaken night!”
    “No one has stabbed you?” came a voice
    outside the cave. “Well, then!
    Don’t be making such a noise
    So late this evening, then!”

    The feet of the Giants’ friends outside
    Petered into still.
    The last of the fire’s embers died
    And blackness swallowed all.
    I could hear the Giant crawl on the ground:
    I thought he was feeling for me.
    But then he moaned, “Sheep, dear, make a sound,
    For though I cannot see,

    I’ll lead you out to the meadow at dawn,
    I’ll push the boulder back,
    And you shall graze on the luscious lawn:
    No kindness shall you lack.
    But when I get you, Noh Wann, slave,
    The gates of hell will shout
    'Pity the man though he be a knave!
    Spare him! Let him out!'"


    With that, all passed into deathly calm
    In the black and the chill of my fears
    As I sat in the cave with a knife in my palm
    And my heart in my pounding ears.
    But after what seemed like an age and more
    Of the dark and the Giants’ groans
    The goats went bleat and sheep went baa
    And the Giant shook his bones

    And whispered, “Wait now, my pretty dears;
    For I’ll now let you out!”
    And he blurted out bloodshod eyeless tears
    And felt his way about
    Till he pushed his brutish paws and shoved
    The boulder from the door
    And past his legs, the flocks that he loved
    Went outward, more and more.

    The light streamed into the stretch of the cave
    Where I had spent the night.
    Outside, the sun and fields did thrive
    With summer morning light.
    I lay wrapped around the underbelly of a sheep
    And I gripped as tight as I could
    On its heavy white fleece, so that I could keep
    A camouflage, out to the wood

    And as the sheep walked to the cave’s big door
    I stayed clung to its greasy wool.
    My back caught the stones on the rugged floor
    And the dust stung the scratches cruel.
    Now I and the sheep were about to go
    Through the door to the light and the trees
    But then to my horror and trembling woe
    The Giant got down on his knees

    And he patted the back of the ram and he said
    “You’re the best of the best of the fold.
    I’ll never eat you. Let that promise be said.
    You’ll be here with me when you’re old.”
    I thought that his nose with its smell would deduce
    That my fingers were under his face
    I could feel that my grip on the sheep with its grease
    Was starting to slip and be loose…

    To be continued….
  • when do i get ur autograph :( ;)
    Rarghstarfarian.
  • But right then, the goat with the wound made a yelp
    And the Giant scrambled up and away:
    With the Giant inside giving aid of good help,
    Tying round a tight torniquay
    On the flank of the goat... My ram moved on
    And moved us out into the light
    And I soon felt bathed in a raging sun
    That blazed with all its might.

    But all was changed of the woodland scene
    I’d seen the day before;
    This wasn’t the place where I’d known I’d been
    When I'd run in the cavemouth door!
    The trees were gone, the path was straight
    And market men walked on
    And standing by a wooden gate
    Were my friends Bill and Tone.

    “My friends, my friends! How did you flee
    that monster’s biting jowls?
    I saw you torn from neck to knee
    To the howling of the owls!”
    Bill and Tone just scratched their heads
    And looked to the growing stone
    On the turn of the path, with its sign “Here leads
    To madness: walk alone.”

    The moral my friends, the moral of my song
    That I sing to you all today
    Is that even the road that is boring and long
    Is safer than ones that will stray
    But the ones that will stray make you live on your wit
    And in testing you, keep you alive:
    So always go walking the way where you’ll meet
    Little dangers that make you survive.



    (Apologies to Homer, etc)
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    that was great finsbury!!
    very witty and imaginative
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • Thanks. Well, the cyclops myth has been around probably since a lot longer than Homer but it's funny how the same ingredients of a tale come up in almost every story we read.. there's an intrepid explorer who gets themselves into a bad situation, uses guile to confront their demon, then ventures back to safety more alive for having risked it all...I thought it'd be fun to jazz it up and even subvert the moral at the end! ;):D

    I wouldn't want to have to memorise this though, for performance or something! Maybe I could put on an aran sweater and head down the local folk club and stick my finger in my ear and sing it with a few hey nonny nonnies and foldyrolls!

    Cheers.
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