Singing Bridge

FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
edited December 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Some say the bridge whistles by design,
while others say it weeps at its locale.
Smell the North Sea when you're on it. Hear
the whistling, feel the turbulence, get a hold
upon the flaking rail, greygreen, and look, down
where skinny gulls unfed screech out in flocks
making meagre bluish patterns on
the greenbrown sludging Wear, the steely tract
blowing metal frost into your face.
The bridge screams. Well I know, deep in the sense
of heart. Straddled across two nothingnesses
it curses all its weight. I will get out,
I will quit this bridge view, turn my back
on North Sea starving cull cry and head south.
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  • North Sea starving cull cry


    it is these bursts of amazing language that force me to read every post you make.
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Well, this one's pure therapy. Me goldfish died this evening, aged ten.

    You were a real old ballerina
    sometimes swimming on your side
    gills puffing, eyes reacting to light
    and you kept your gold glistening
    ten good years, ten years of rolling
    around in a series of bowls
    some with aquatic parthenons
    and even when you looked poorly
    we gave you the oxygen tablets
    and you rallied sparkling water ballet

    Tonight you died quietly in your bowl
    while I was out answering the phone
    Dear Goldie, I'm sorry
    ten long years of applauding rehearsals
    and I missed the grand finale

    But I'll face grown men in the pub
    and face their scorn as penance
    by crying my eyes out in my beer
    for a little fish, my real old ballerina
  • SquirrelSquirrel Posts: 337
    aww..beautiful tribute!


    once again...your use of language is simply amazing!!!
    how's the music goin?
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I was just making up a chord sequence now. It's going okay! :) New ideas! Thanks.
  • SquirrelSquirrel Posts: 337
    awesome! would loved to hear some more music by you!

    btw..did you get my pm?
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I did! Thanks! Looking forward to reading more of your work! :) Yes, I'll work out the mp3 technology at this end to share music. I have demos in .wma to convert to mp3 then host somewhere. :)
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    That is so sweet..for your goldfish...We take on the pains of the world through lyrics,finns.
    PS Love the first poem...I can actually see and feel it.
    Who knows maybe I'm psychic,right finns?:)I like your style of writing.
    Its crisp to me.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Finsbury...you and grooveamatic have kept me avidly reading for quite some time. I'm happy to have finally gotten the gumption to tell you guys! You're both very talented writers. Keep it up!
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    It's just a bit of fun for me, but yes, Grooveamatic's very good in my opinion. I mean that.

    Thanks.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,275
    I really like the first one. I sensed an understanding of your surroundings similar to what I sense when I read Mary Oliver. I understood it more than your other poems *blush*. Also, I'm sorry to hear about your goldfish. Mine never lasted that long, but when I was eight I had a goldfish named Kim. She jumped out of the bowl. . . .
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Yes ...I do wish to express my condolances as well...the poem is touching.:(
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Yes, poor little fishie. Thanks. :)
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Horatio Geronimo Fandango Ringo Domino
    wore sticking plaster gerbils on his knees
    and fumblestumblerumbling, and bumblegrumblethundering
    he flew from hills to dales to lakes to trees
    singing "Pretty solar flares pushing pretty roller chairs,
    send me gerbil dinners for me socks,
    and add a smudge of rabbit sauce and smidgeons of a cat of course
    and I will give a world of beardy locks."
  • Horatio Geronimo Fandango Ringo Domino
    wore sticking plaster gerbils on his knees
    and fumblestumblerumbling, and bumblegrumblethundering
    he flew from hills to dales to lakes to trees
    singing "Pretty solar flares pushing pretty roller chairs,
    send me gerbil dinners for me socks,
    and add a smudge of rabbit sauce and smidgeons of a cat of course
    and I will give a world of beardy locks."


    Quite entertaining! Best first line ever.

    ps...thanks for the kind words in post #10 in this thread!
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