Oceanroad

FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
edited February 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Paddling finger clouds caress the spine
of Claggan Mountain's rippling green quilt skin.
Bellacragher waters flicker thin
whitetrout streaks, shine-stirring in the fine
rainbow furzey glaze of noon.
Here, my Erris road bends, deep and round,
vermillioning: Mingled rushes swoon
beneath a roadside windweight. Corncrake sound
wheels, whirls on ocean shimmerings of blue
and eighting looping shadows know each fast
fractal instance of a seapulse. Here, my true
saltvoice begins its journeysong, beneath the cast
of ocean mountain shadows, green; my road
is shadow kissing-close and lovecloud-broad.
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  • Paddling finger clouds caress the spine
    of Claggan Mountain's rippling green quilt skin.
    Bellacragher waters flicker thin
    whitetrout streaks, shine-stirring in the fine
    rainbow furzey glaze of sunning noon.
    Here, my Erris road bends, deep and round,
    vermillioning: Mingled rushes swoon
    beneath a roadside windweight. Corncrake sound
    wheels, whirls on ocean shimmerings of blue
    and eighting looping shadows know each fast
    fractal seapulse instant. Here, my true
    saltvoice begins its journeysong, beneath the cast
    of ocean mountain shadows, green; my road
    is shadow kissing-close, is lovecloud-broad.
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Like the poems Finns,,,,and stop popping into my dreams at night,..I dont even know you!You're poetry is rubbing off on me...:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Thanks Ali! I'm still tweaking this poem. It came out in about five minutes, an hour or so ago and now I'm fiddling with things. :)
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    It/they sound good Finns...I've got to read them again.They sink in better on the second read,..the first time gets you with the hook.Good job as usual.
    My turn to write a masterpiece, right!:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Ali wrote:
    My turn to write a masterpiece, right!:)

    Okay! Gor for it! :D
  • That is to say, go for it. My typo. :)
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    Gor Ferrit...had a deadly enemy
    it wasn't a gopher it was a go for....it
    Gor Ferrit was a gopher.....and his enemy was
    go for it....sometimes when he was half-asleep
    he'd hear his enemy breathing....
    and he'd awake suddenly to see that Go For.....
    had gone for it.....:)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
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