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FinsburyParkCarrots
FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
edited May 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Black dust mist, clatter like spearsplit armour
where we lie, bloodfroth proclaiming,
"We fight to gain the ground a caged bird fled;
watch its shadows on our dying breasts",
Rise in song in whitebeat ranging wings.
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  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    I like the way this sounds, but I'm not yet sure what it's saying. :)
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  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    If it's any good, we'll never be sure.
  • justam
    justam Posts: 21,415
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    If it's any good, we'll never be sure.

    :D
    Well then, here's to uncertainy!
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  • steppenwolf
    steppenwolf Posts: 164
    Dylanesque, with a helping of some old-fashioned poet guy whose name i can't think of.
  • burtschips
    burtschips Posts: 734
    i like that. Did you do a Haiku version earlier? The language paints a vivid picture.
    Salut baloo
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    No, that was another example of an automatic typing experiment. ;)
  • Nast
    Nast Posts: 127
    Hello was walking down the road,
    was with them,
    from a few lines within.

    From time there was a story,
    and said "I saw really a whole."
    To know who is really...

    and every truth will play.

    I have so much.
    On his face.
    A true.
    His voice in my only happens imagery in the jury is so.
    The shoe crazy file as though her later his hands of the game of the the the a very good guy I say, who is ready made his goal.
    The king of run on sentences...
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Nast wrote:
    Hello was walking down the road,
    was with them,
    from a few lines within.

    From time there was a story,
    and said "I saw really a whole."
    To know who is really...

    and every truth will play.

    I have so much.
    On his face.
    A true.
    His voice in my only happens imagery in the jury is so.
    The shoe crazy file as though her later his hands of the game of the the the a very good guy I say, who is ready made his goal.


    That sounds like something Syd Barrett wrote the other day.
  • Nast
    Nast Posts: 127
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    That sounds like something Syd Barrett wrote the other day.

    Who's that?
    The king of run on sentences...

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