My Big Concussion

FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
edited December 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Second Generation Mayo Man
deconstructs a dam of five stone rocks
out from a Cambridge ditch to free a flow
of shitey water. Rolling up one lump
he loses footing and the rock falls down
bang on his head. A brutal meeting point,
upon the day he found that Sinn Fein kept
a tryst of secrecy with Britain, meant
to share real secrets for Security
while people died on day, on day. Big Bang,
take sides and feel collusion’s death-spark clang
and tell you you were just collateral.
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    rock on, finnisworth...

    l's 2, 10, 11 & 12 are awesome. especially 2, imo... l2's my favorite

    it's surely about some british government stuff...
    infathomable hogwash, politics... politicians
    greedy cocksuckers, the lot of 'em
  • cheerio...goodun fins
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I really did concuss myself falling down a ditch with a five stone (70lb) rock hitting me between the eyes, yesterday. I was taking a makeshift dam apart; it was blocking the stream.

    I've been in bed all day today with the headache from hell.
  • I really did concuss myself falling down a ditch with a five stone (70lb) rock hitting me between the eyes, yesterday. I was taking a makeshift dam apart; it was blocking the stream.

    I've been in bed all day today with the headache from hell.

    I have had several concussions...they suck. The effects of one really stuck around for about 8 months (the doctor actually wanted me to take several months off work). I had to go see him on a regular basis about it, and get scanned for several years. But as I mentioned, they were compounded.

    I hope you went to the doctor. And I really hope you didn't go to bed as soon as you got home. you should avoid sleep right after a concussion even though you are really tired.

    Hope you are okay...
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I didn't go to the doctor but I did keep myself awake for a few hours. When I did sleep I was on a slow boat to paradise. The colours were technicolor vivid: Almost worth the bang on the head.

    I'll be okay. :)
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    My question is why do you guys keep getting banged on the head? Is it for pleasure or what?? j/k :):)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Are you feeling any better now?
    &&&&&&&&&&&&&&
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I'm going down the pub in an hour. I think so. :)
  • Second Generation Mayo Man

    im a second generation mayo woman :p

    but i live in galway not cambridge

    great poem, hope your head's ok

    P@M
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Whereabouts in Galway, Galwaywoman? :)
  • Whereabouts in Galway, Galwaywoman? :)

    the city

    ever been?

    whereabouts from mayo are ya (nearly) from

    P@M
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I really did concuss myself falling down a ditch with a five stone (70lb) rock hitting me between the eyes, yesterday. I was taking a makeshift dam apart; it was blocking the stream.

    I've been in bed all day today with the headache from hell.
    Poor baby.
    Around these parts,
    you gotta make sure you go to the right doctor.
    The wrong one in Anthrax-Hamilton could kill you.

    Hope you feel better finns,:)
    Good read...

    allison:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    the city

    ever been?

    whereabouts from mayo are ya (nearly) from

    P@M


    1) Many times.


    2) Ballycroy.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ali wrote:
    Poor baby.
    Around these parts,
    you gotta make sure you go to the right doctor.
    The wrong one in Anthrax-Hamilton could kill you.

    Hope you feel better finns,:)
    Good read...

    allison:)

    Thank you Ali! :D

    I'm okay.

    Anyway, back to the poetry, eh? :)
  • k, I will give you a test. If you get it right....no doctor.....wrong.....you go...


    ready?






    How many fingures am I holding up?
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Wednesday.


    No, wait.


    What was the question again?


    ;)
  • lucky guess!!!!
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    You guys aren't right...perhaps you should see a doctor... :)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • twin1 wrote:
    You guys aren't right...perhaps you should see a doctor... :)

    I wish we could see a doctor...but we can't evevn see our hands!

    concusions and alcohol.....ahh does life get any better than this?
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
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