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I think I've written my best song, today

FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
edited August 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I've the music and the lyrics formed in minutes. Here are the words. I'm not sure where they came from. They just appeared.


I look forward to recording this with guitar, to share:

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Purify the last book with fire: the heretics have twisted the Word.
There’ll be no last war, nor a final score that’ll tally the chosen and damned.
Show the pious and proud man, a liar: show the lawmaker, breaking his code.
Follow them no more, find your deep heart core as the store of all judgements planned.

Turn away from false prophets, fearmongering for profits.
Turn away from the marketplace preachers of a Last Day of blood.
Hear your heart call the wisdom deep inside all:
That the Great Day must dawn, from our good.

There’s a raven star over me, and I swear it’s a man made omen, mere prey in the sky.
It’s an angel who’ll sound the last day, not a raven star priest with our death in his eye.

Close down the temples that deal with the warlords who pray as they steal.
Close down the places when men with red faces cry “freedom” before they cry “kill”.
Know that The Light is real, in your heart as the blood you can feel.
The last book tells lies: men seek to disguise their methods of hate as God’s will.

Find The Way in acceptance, Find The Truth in forgiveness,
Find The Light in a heart that won’t hate, that refuses to fear.
But don’t pander to the devil-as-commander:
The chief of the nation, the father of tears.

There’s a raven star over me, and I swear it’s a man made omen, mere prey in the sky.
It’s an angel who’ll sound the last day, not a raven star priest with our death in his eye.
There’s a raven star over me, and I swear it’s a man made omen, mere prey in the sky.
It’s an angel who’ll sound the last day, not a raven star priest with our death in his eye.
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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,412
    I like it! :)
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  • Bu2Bu2 Posts: 1,693
    that the end, as you say,
    is full of wisdom-seekers such as you and I
    who know how to laugh and live
    as well as we cry

    Religion seems to be a very nice thing
    to the countries of old and the kings who were king
    but today belongs to another type entirely
    who feel the same way that you,
    though we walk on somewhat tiredly

    It's a new day, and a new war
    and why others can't see that yet
    that what's gone on before
    is something we should forget

    I don't know

    But I love this poem.....my god, I love it so.

    Thanks, Fins.
    Feels Good Inc.
  • Bu2Bu2 Posts: 1,693
    I meant to say "the same was AS you"

    Oh well. We all know I can't edit it.

    But your words, I will not forget.
    Feels Good Inc.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I'm going to have to memorise 'em, if I sing 'em. :)

    Thanks, Bu2!
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    you know fins, you are fast becoming one of my favourite people to read.
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Oh good, I need someone to read my latest paper. :D
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    wouldn't be the first paper i've read this week. what's it on? :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Well, if I type what it is, some academic might pinch my idea. We're talking post-grad stuff. ;)
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    you can't even tell me the subject? :(
    i won't tell. ;)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Okay, I'll PM ya. :)
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    WOW! Diggin' these lyrics very much! Kick out the jams!!!!!!!! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,279
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    Well, if I type what it is, some academic might pinch my idea. We're talking post-grad stuff. ;)
    Aren't you done with school, yet. Geez, Fins, get a move on.

    Anyway, I love the lyrics! They stand alone without music. I can definitely feel your poetic training. That's pretty obvious actually. Great words!
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Ms. Haiku wrote:
    Aren't you done with school, yet. Geez, Fins, get a move on.

    One is always learning. After the doc, bring on the post-doc, and another one after that, and then .... :)
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i betcha it's a lovely tune :)


    good job!
  • Astral StarAstral Star Posts: 129
    Stunning! Can't wait to hear it.
    "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to eachother." Mother Theresa
  • writersuwritersu Posts: 1,867
    Very awesome.............
    Baby, You Wouldn't Last a Minute on The Creek......


    Together we will float like angels.........

    In the moment that you left the room, the album started skipping, goodbye to beauty shared with the ones that you love.........
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    Well done indeed Mr. Carrots, you've kept your head far above the turgid waters of cliche while writing about political discourse -
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Yep, that's the difference betweem Phil Ochs and Barry McGuire (no relation to me), I guess.
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