Experience Inspired

PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
Silent Death Grip

Why are you looking at me like that?
Your eyes are like a Lions before the hunt.
You know I didnt lie, you know I didnt hurt you.
Still, you look at me with that silent death grip.

Why are your hands clenched?
I hear the sound of your teeth grinding.
I am not you, I dont turn into the monster you are.
Yet, you still look at me with that silent death grip.

How could I let it get this bad?
I hear my heart trying to talk instead of my head.
Am I this horrible person you say I am?
I will never look at anyone with that silent death grip.
If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
(Angelina Jolie)
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i know this...

    good writing, there pjmaine...
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    why thank you sweetness! I know you know this. Been there done that hun! Take care
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    I Saw You Today

    I saw you today
    you drove by my house.
    I wanted to say, hey!
    But I clammed up like a mouse.

    If you only knew, How much I miss you
    You wouldnt be so cruel.
    But what am I supposed to do?
    Your as stubborn as a mule.

    How can you pretend, theres nothing there?
    I know you feel the same,
    But my heart has such a big tear,
    I feel nothing but shame.

    If you see me someday, please dont speak
    Dont even dare ask why,
    My desire for you has reached its peak
    My heart grew wings, and is now going to fly.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Climbing Mountains

    Remember, we climbed the mountain
    We were so young, barely seventeen
    I loved the way the sun shone on your red hair.
    I loved how when you smiled, your eyes sparkled that baby blue.
    I am such a free spirit,
    I took my clothes off on the way up
    hung them on tree branches one by one.
    Oh, and the greates moment
    when we reached the top
    How we Christened that mountain
    It was so beautiful
    Daring but innocent.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by PJfaninmaine
    Climbing Mountains

    Remember, we climbed the mountain
    We were so young, barely seventeen
    I loved the way the sun shone on your red hair.
    I loved how when you smiled, your eyes sparkled that baby blue.
    I am such a free spirit,
    I took my clothes off on the way up
    hung them on tree branches one by one.
    Oh, and the greatest moment
    when we reached the top
    How we Christened that mountain
    It was so beautiful
    Daring but innocent.

    Great stuff. :)
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    Originally posted by PJfaninmaine
    I Saw You Today

    I saw you today
    you drove by my house.
    I wanted to say, hey!
    But I clammed up like a mouse.

    If you only knew, How much I miss you
    You wouldnt be so cruel.
    But what am I supposed to do?
    Your as stubborn as a mule.

    How can you pretend, theres nothing there?
    I know you feel the same,
    But my heart has such a big tear,
    I feel nothing but shame.

    If you see me someday, please dont speak
    Dont even dare ask why,
    My desire for you has reached its peak
    My heart grew wings, and is now going to fly.

    :D
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Thank yas Fins and Pasta!
    Yes climbing mountains is a true story, How lucky I am to have a big beautiful mountain as my back yard! Very Inspirational!

    ((((((((((((hugs))))))))))))))))))
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    landscapes can be quite inspiring, no doubt
    inspiring us all to be mountain climbers :)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Naked Mountain Climbers prefferably!
    haha
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • Originally posted by PJfaninmaine
    Naked Mountain Climbers prefferably!
    haha
    Damn!

    I'll never look at Katahdin the same way. I need to take a cold shower now thank you.
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    Not to be overly critical but just a small question about the first poem, Do you know what lions look like before the hunt? and can that really register in an eye? just asking because the image really didn't do anything for me but maybe it's something common I just don't know, some good work here though

    ETE
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    me too!!!!

    all I kept thinking about was the Lion in Singapore....Singa means Lion as far as I remember.....and the Lions have pebbles stuck in their mouths.......they're statues......if it was the Lions of Haile Sallasie......who were tame.....then I'd understand.....but this image is nothing......it's like that picture I saw in a homewear shop that one of the owners must have painted......with a nubian woman.....tall and graceful.....balancing a slice of watermelon on her head......so wrong......so wrong
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    I never claimed to be a great poet, I just write what I feel and what comes to my head, No, I really dont know what lions look like before the hunt, and hopefully never will. But the look in an abusers eyes before he beats you, I do know.
    I guess the Lion thing was all I could come up with, maybe someday, when I grow up, I can think of something better to put in its place.
    Thank you for your opinions, weather good or bad, I appriciate it.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • Originally posted by PJfaninmaine
    Climbing Mountains

    Remember, we climbed the mountain
    We were so young, barely seventeen
    I loved the way the sun shone on your red hair.
    I loved how when you smiled, your eyes sparkled that baby blue.
    I am such a free spirit,
    I took my clothes off on the way up
    hung them on tree branches one by one.
    Oh, and the greates moment
    when we reached the top
    How we Christened that mountain
    It was so beautiful
    Daring but innocent.

    That's awesome.

    Somehow the climbing of the mountain+the nudity makes that "free spirit" aspect of the poem very apparent.
    Liberal Douchebags that Blame Bush for Everything are Useless Pieces of Trash. I Shit on You.
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Thank you hero. Yes that is exactly what I was trying to put across. A free spirit indeed. But also the innocence of the whole situation. Nothing is greater then being in a place that God made so beautiful, and clothed in nothing but what God has given us.
    Take care Barroom hero and btw your poems are wonderful.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    sorry I was so harsh.....

    I've been in a lion's cage.....before.....and the image just struck a wrong chord.....

    but I like your poetry.....somewhat
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    No problem ISN
    Everyone is entitled to their opinion.
    I like your poetry somewhat as well.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    let's hope you like it somewhat more.....when I improve.....heheheheh :D
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    when you improve? Or when you grow up? haha
    Well maybe you will like mine somewhat more when I improve and grow up.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Your poetry is very grown up, PJfaninmaine. :)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Pompous Ass

    The pompous ass sat all alone
    Waiting to pounce like a dog on a bone

    He spat, cursed, and sputtered
    But not an inteligent word did he mutter

    He tried, and tried to do his best
    To put down those who put him to the test

    He didnt succeed of course
    Can a pompous ass really become a horse?
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • Oh girl!!!!!!!! I'm so, so, so... glad you're sharing more of your stuff!!! Oh yeah! Rock on, little Momma of Maine! :):):):)

    An ass is an ass, of course, of course! :p
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by PJfaninmaine
    Pompous Ass

    The pompous ass sat all alone
    Waiting to pounce like a dog on a bone

    He spat, cursed, and sputtered
    But not an inteligent word did he mutter

    He tried, and tried to do his best
    To put down those who put him to the test

    He didnt succeed of course
    Can a pompous ass really become a horse?

    Heehee. I like this one! ;):D
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    heehee
    had to lighten up a bit. Cant be serious all the time now can we?
    That would just be wrong. Gets too depressing writing about real shit doesnt it?
    ((((((((((hugs dear friends)))))))))))))
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Sorry about the earlier post dear friend, But after arranging the words a bit I just had to add this to my thread!

    We met clearly by chance,
    The word Maine in my name caught your glance.
    "Hey Maine" was what your subject said
    I was only too happy to open it and read the words I read.
    I wondered, who could this fellow be?
    And i wonder what made him write to me?
    Aha! then I found out, but not too late,
    Turns out we were both from the same beautiful state.
    And then to emails my fingers did fly.
    I had to find out more about this "Maine Guy"
    How interesting we bothe have Irish and Indian decent.
    I know you were turning out to be quite a Gent.
    And how odd, and how strange, Hot Dam!
    We were both faithful fans of Pearl Jam.
    Now, we talk almost every day,
    sometimes for a long chat, or to just say hey!
    I know that someday soon we will meet
    I'm sure our friendship couldnt possibly be beat.
    I look forward to meeting you face to face
    And once we do, may the moment never be erased!


    There, hope thats better, You dont have to reply and give your identity away!
    Love ya!!!
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Alright , this is a little corny, but, had to write one!


    Ed

    I could sit and listen to his voice all day,
    A little gruff, but smooth in a different sort of way.
    Whether he sings, or whether he talks, doesnt matter.
    He makes my heart go pitter patter.
    Although I have never met him face to face,
    I can still dream about the man on the cd case.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Lonely again
    What the hell?
    Even when I'm with you, I still feel oh so alone.
    You dont open up
    You cant even see into my eyes.
    If you did,
    You'd know what was there.
    It's only love
    No big deal
    Right?
    Wrong
    You have no idea what love means
    Although, you do try, sometimes
    I wish you would just look into these green pools
    and look to the bottom, cause there my friend
    you would find the meaning of Love
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Her hair was white
    Her bosoms were round and robust
    How I loved to sit on her lap and rest my head on them
    When she smiled, her eyes would twinkle
    like sun shining on an ocean of blue.
    She loved to sit and talk for hours
    lighting one cigarette after another
    Unfortunately that was her doom.
    She left this world at the age of 75.
    Oh how i miss her,
    but she is now in a much better place
    She tells me so when I dream of her at night.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • Miss me? Miss me?
    Part your lips and kiss me! :p

    Thank-you, sweetie! :)

    I like Lonely Again! And your little "corny" Ed poem brought :D's to my cheeks! LOL! Too cute! :D

    Love to you! Take care and keep on writing! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    I do miss you, open up girlfriend muahhhh! haha.
    Well thank you sweetness! I have been on a little writing frenzy, hopefully I can continue.
    Lets have some of your stuff on here again as well ok?
    Take care and lots of love to ya!
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
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