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Beautiful

AliAli Posts: 2,621
edited March 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
u luk beutiful.
u luk gud.
u r my frend.
dont ware a hud.

no hats fur men,
heds covered fur girls,
i luv my man,
fur my hare he curls.


alisun vi....c2006
A whisper and a thrill
A whisper and a chill
adv2005

"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"

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  • tellerteller Posts: 16
    Ali wrote:
    u luk beutiful.
    u luk gud.
    u r my frend.
    dont ware a hud.

    no hats fur men,
    heds covered fur girls,
    i luv my man,
    fur my hare he curls.


    alisun vi....c2006


    don't need a gun,

    dont' need a tool,

    finished with the fool!
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    teller wrote:
    don't need a gun,

    dont' need a tool,

    finished with the fool!
    Yea,well,
    I personally think it's quite original.

    ya mean ,you don't like it?


    "A":(
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    I like the fact you reached outside the box with the spelling and all. It really gives the poem a bit more power. More focus.
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Nothingbetter wrote:
    I like the fact you reached outside the box with the spelling and all. It really gives the poem a bit more power. More focus.
    Thank you.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
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