I Met Evil
Ali
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i.
I met evil the other day,
and lived.
His face looked like mine.
He offered me an apple,
and I bit into it.
I choked immediatly.He said,
"You don't like my gift for you?"
I said,
"No-Never return to me again."
He screamed, and cursed, and hollared-
took out a knife and held it to my throat.
He said,
"You will kill,
you will cheat,
you will lie."
And I just walked away.
ii.
I MET EVIL
FACE EXECUTING DEATH,
MURDER.
SUFFOCATING OVERTONES.
GLUTTONY,OBESITY,WANTONNESS.
HATRED SCORNING THROUGH THE YEARS
OF AGE WRITTEN ALL OVER
THE FACE OF THE BEAST.
AN EXECUTION IN AMERICA-
A RAPE IN A BACKSEAT-
A FAMINE IN THE COUNTRY.
I met evil the other day,
and lived.
His face looked like mine.
He offered me an apple,
and I bit into it.
I choked immediatly.He said,
"You don't like my gift for you?"
I said,
"No-Never return to me again."
He screamed, and cursed, and hollared-
took out a knife and held it to my throat.
He said,
"You will kill,
you will cheat,
you will lie."
And I just walked away.
ii.
I MET EVIL
FACE EXECUTING DEATH,
MURDER.
SUFFOCATING OVERTONES.
GLUTTONY,OBESITY,WANTONNESS.
HATRED SCORNING THROUGH THE YEARS
OF AGE WRITTEN ALL OVER
THE FACE OF THE BEAST.
AN EXECUTION IN AMERICA-
A RAPE IN A BACKSEAT-
A FAMINE IN THE COUNTRY.
A whisper and a thrill
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
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I could talk about drunk encounters with mafia hit men, but that would be boring.....
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
i would like to go surfing agin though...got to practice on my boogie board and save up some money for a good board!
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
and they should show you some pictures.Theyre relatively cheap.
And y6ou SHOULD write ME a poem about a wave!...I would love to hear it!
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
as in toasterelf
ah well
you make a perfect
angel
in the snow
I write down good reasons to freeze to death in my spiral ring notebook. But in the long tresses of your hair--I am a babbling brook.
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
I thought to myself, how crazy would it be if someone met me and knew my Pearl Jam message board alter ego and didn't even tell me...
and Ali,
for a poem like this to work, for a poem that prepares the reader to face an abstraction, it has to be grounded in the most concrete of images, the most relatable of metaphors. Starting the poem, indeed making the title an abstraction already puts the reader in a single degree of seperation, but when you continue to describe abstractions with more abstraction and biblical references the point becomes more obscure and much less human, show us the face of evil, the actions the affect the people and objects we see and feel, a tsunami is bad, we know this, like war is bad, what does a tsunami victim look and feel like, what if the victim was a vacationing uncle. I know because I spent years being rebuffed for concentrating on abstraction because I thought the big picture was the only picture worth painting, but you have to strike a balance to be truly effective.
I hope this helps, and it wouldn't be too bad if the next I met evil thread did actually describe our first encounter.
ETE
The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
My take on the devil is so cliche.
Best described and depicted in a National Geographic Magazine sitting around in an unsacred ceremony by a fire.Its all fire with that Devil.Fire and forbidden fruit.(Maybe I life a boring life!)
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
He stood in the corner of my room as I slept,
Cracking my eyelids from unrest,
I couldn't see him,
but I could see the juice box
from lunch the prior day and hadn't drank...
floating in mid air across my room.
He set it on the counter,
And asked me if I knew who he was.
I replied with a silent scream,
as I sat up in my bed.
And just as he hadn't appeared,
he left.
I don't know what it meant.
I saw evil in a murder's hand.
Blood splilling from beneath him.
His eyes were like fire.
His breath was a flame.
I swear, I didn't know his name.
A whisper and a chill
adv2005
"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"
PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?