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AliAli Posts: 2,621
edited February 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
You told me that you loved me
You told me that you cared
Every minute we spent together
Every minute was unspared

You took my hand and asked me
Those four little words
I swear I almost died that day
The sweetest the I've ever heard

I'm thinking I still love you
I'm thinking I still care
I really want to move on
But the spark is still there

Someday you'll actually read this
Someday you'll actually think
What we did while we were apart
Will have you tickled pink

I still dont know if I can marry you
I still dont know if Its right
Just give me a day or two to wonder
Why I ever spent the night.
A whisper and a thrill
A whisper and a chill
adv2005

"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"

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  • coleencoleen Posts: 938
    just stopped in to let you know that i've read your beautiful poem. :)
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    Ali wrote:
    Someday you'll actually read this
    Someday you'll actually think
    What we did while we were apart
    Will have you tickled pink

    Why I ever spent the night.
    The first part of this quote implies that you two are better off alone, correct? The second part implies a need to reconcile your actions and thoughts. Now, is this what you needed help on? The poem itself flows with the rhymes and can be understood.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Thanks coleen..you are too sweet :)
    allison
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I just dont know what to do about the guy!I've been spending too much time with him lately and were getting way too close!I'm not his type I guess?
    Thanks Bibliobella...I think I figured it out over the past few nights!
    PeAce!
    Thanks for the comments!
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
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