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sORRY GUYS..BUT....I GOT THIS ONE POEM....

AliAli Posts: 2,621
edited August 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I leave my heart empty
So you can fill it up.
I leave my cup full,
So you can drink from it.
I leave my soul open,
So you can close it.
I leave my body dirty,
So you can wash it away.


adv
A whisper and a thrill
A whisper and a chill
adv2005

"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"

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  • JobbeJobbe Posts: 20
    There're good coherences in your poem, Ali...
    Inspiring, if you're planning to tell someone you're in love with what you feel about her/him :)
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Jobbe wrote:
    There're good coherences in your poem, Ali...
    Inspiring, if you're planning to tell someone you're in love with what you feel about her/him :)
    Yea...well...se would never understand me.No one does or really...
    this world has taken an incredible decrease in moral fiber.I actually thought i was a stronger person.Were all bound to hell I suppose.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Soft and sleek
    meek and sheek
    i've ben raped and left without a soul.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Take another happy pill,ali
    or else we'll throw you back to get mentally examined.
    Why talk about it?
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    America
    L'america
    The land of rape and sorrow
    Where dreams die
    as young as our children
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • Childrens HourChildrens Hour Posts: 93
    Ali wrote:
    America
    L'america
    The land of rape and sorrow
    Where dreams die
    as young as our children

    I wish it wasn't beautiful,
    I don't understand your whole story and I guess I don't need to, but I hope you get happy again.
    ۞Je houdt niet van haar omdat ze bijzonder is, ze is bijzonder omdat ze van je houdt,
    ۞Liefde is niet dat waarop het uitloopt, maar dat waarmee het begint,
    ۞Er is liefde en je begint een relatie om te zien of zij daartegen bestand is.
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Childrens Hour wrote:
    I wish it wasn't beautiful,
    I don't understand your whole story and I guess I don't need to, but I hope you get happy again.
    Nothing to bring you down...just to make you think of others'
    situations....not particularly mine.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    there's as much beauty to be found in pain as their is in happiness, in that solitude of darkness, the key is to use it, to forge it into something others can relate to, and make them think about that pain in a way that reflects their own, in a way that makes them want to change it

    that's my opinion anyway...after some of the worst events in my life, I stumbled around in the dark for quite a while, staring at the night sky, but then the blood of those sunsets becomes the white light of an empty moon, and that flash of light bathes everything in silver, and the sight of your breath becomes a reminder of life, and you can find beauty in the ice on the trees, which are only reflections of the daggers warping through your memory and when you find that power in the pain, nothing can ever stop you again
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Ali wrote:
    I leave my heart empty
    So you can fill it up.
    I leave my cup full,
    So you can drink from it.
    I leave my soul open,
    So you can close it.
    I leave my body dirty,
    So you can wash it away.
    I leave my mind clean,
    So you can read it.


    adv


    I like how it looks and how it reads, Ali! :) Good show! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    you write
    so I have something to love

    great poem Ali...
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Thank you guys....

    I want to be with you night and day:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • AngelofIndifferenceAngelofIndifference Posts: 89
    Interesting. Your use of opposites reminded me of an Emily Dickinson poem:

    WATER is taught by thirst;
    Land, by the oceans passed;
    Transport, by throe;
    Peace, by its battles told;
    Love, by memorial mould;
    Birds, by the snow.

    As well as this one... judging by the way you write I thought you'd like it...

    SUCCESS is counted sweetest
    By those who ne’er succeed.
    To comprehend a nectar
    Requires sorest need.

    Not one of all the purple host
    Who took the flag to-day
    Can tell the definition,
    So clear, of victory,

    As he, defeated, dying,
    On whose forbidden ear
    The distant strains of triumph
    Break, agonized and clear.
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    AngelofIndifference wrote:
    Interesting. Your use of opposites reminded me of an Emily Dickinson poem:

    WATER is taught by thirst;
    Land, by the oceans passed;
    Transport, by throe;
    Peace, by its battles told;
    Love, by memorial mould;
    Birds, by the snow.

    As well as this one... judging by the way you write I thought you'd like it...

    SUCCESS is counted sweetest
    By those who ne’er succeed.
    To comprehend a nectar
    Requires sorest need.

    Not one of all the purple host
    Who took the flag to-day
    Can tell the definition,
    So clear, of victory,

    As he, defeated, dying,
    On whose forbidden ear
    The distant strains of triumph
    Break, agonized and clear.
    Great...thanks!I'll be compared to Emily any day!
    I only own one book of hers,
    her love poems.
    Thank you for the poems...I'll read more of her:)

    allison;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
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