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Dysfunction/Injunction

AliAli Posts: 2,621
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
You destroyed me.
You shot her car full of Machine gun holes,
how brave.
I find you weak.

You beat me.
You picked on me and tormented me,
how powerful.
I find you disgusting.

You killed mine.
You rape and take unjusticefully,
how strong.
I find you repulsive.

You insult me.
You don't respect my feelings,
how kind.
I find you horrid.

Of all the things in all the world,
I thought that people were loving....
I was so wrong.
I thought that people understood me
but
they only seem to care about themselves
and power...



God is touching the flame.
Love is feeding the fire.
Hatred is putting it out.


allison vigh
A whisper and a thrill
A whisper and a chill
adv2005

"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"

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  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    This is very sad and passionate. I'm sorry you are so hurt.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    :( Not everyone is loving, unfortunately, but that doesn't mean hate is winning-it only will if we let it.

    I agree with twin2--very sad and passionate, Ali.

    "God is touching the flame.
    Love is feeding the fire."
    Hate is just an obstacle to be overcome. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    :( Not everyone is loving, unfortunately, but that doesn't mean hate is winning-it only will if we let it.

    I agree with twin2--very sad and passionate, Ali.

    "God is touching the flame.
    Love is feeding the fire."
    Hate is just an obstacle to be overcome. :)

    You really went into overdrive at the end there, sounds like a great song chorus.
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    EvilToasterElf wrote:
    You really went into overdrive at the end there, sounds like a great song chorus.

    :D *plays air guitar and belts it out*
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Thanks guys...not hurt from this...just scared of crazy people and also
    feel that some people just dont care...
    DANKS!!!!:):):):):)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Ali wrote:
    Thanks guys...not hurt from this...just scared of crazy people and also
    feel that some people just dont care...
    DANKS!!!!:):):):):)

    That's sad but true. I know just how you feel.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    Ooops, I think I overstepped my boundaries a bit - I was giving critique where it was not requested. Anyway, I'm looking forward to viewing more of your work.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Bibliobella wrote:
    Ooops, I think I overstepped my boundaries a bit - I was giving critique where it was not requested. Anyway, I'm looking forward to viewing more of your work.
    Bib...
    I always love critiques..but to be honest...theyre useless.
    Any creative work expressing feeling is good.I feel theres no right or wrong about them.Theyre just "There"..."Being".theyre therapeutic...this piece is just
    "there"....as most pieces are.If I were to critique poetry..I would say rhyming is wrong and way out of date..my creative writing teacher and i have learned it...but then again...I really like it sometimes...so why should it be wrong?

    But you didnt critique me anyway?

    :)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
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