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Climbing

AliAli Posts: 2,621
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
As I climbed,
I couldn't get
much higher.
I lowered
myself down
finding
this wasn't
the place
I wanted to be.
I hit the ground ,
the ropes loosened,
and my shoes
felt the cement.
The air relieved me,
I drank some water,
and my climb was over.
Next weekend,
I'll try
middle ground.
A whisper and a thrill
A whisper and a chill
adv2005

"Why do I bother?"
The 11th Commandment.
"Whatever"

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Comments

  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    Very nice. I liked it! Middle ground can be good.
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    :) That made me smile, Ali!
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    it's a nice poem, ali, but I hate middle ground. I like extremes; they're more real.
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  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    I liked this as well.
  • Smashed againSmashed again Posts: 6
    Ali wrote:
    As I climbed,
    I couldn't get
    much higher.
    I lowered
    myself down
    finding
    this wasn't
    the place
    I wanted to be.
    I hit the ground ,
    the ropes loosened,
    and my shoes
    felt the cement.
    The air relieved me,
    I drank some water,
    and my climb was over.
    Next weekend,
    I'll try
    middle ground.


    just to be, is enough, most of the time you can't expect anymore
  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    Best poem I've read in awhile. Absolutely loved it ALi!!!!!!
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    yes, you aren't neccessarily to make it to the summit on the first crack...lovely
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    depopulationINC wrote:
    yes, you aren't neccessarily to make it to the summit on the first crack...lovely
    Yea,...well.....


    PS...Thanx poet.LOve tou you.

    Thanks guys and chickees...for the read....;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
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