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Ali

He is the tree
As i am His sapling.
He is the ocean
As i am His tide.
He is the sun,
As i am His moon.
He is the Father,
As i am his child.


(Okay.Now that exhausted some brain power.What do you think I'm writing about?*i'll check back later after I pig out....:))

EvilToasterElf

I will respond with a poem if it's ok with the author

Are we?

I am an army fixed on the line
Awaiting the call to charge
I am a runner on the third mile
With only twenty three to go
I am a tanker dead in the water
Awaiting the aid of a barge
I am the soul of a dying child
Awaiting the last breath to blow
I am the conscience of a drunken driver
Three down and still at large
I am the whispers of the storm
Treating discomfort with a rainbow
I am the shades of a hermit window
Covering pride from the angry stares
I am the glades growing in rows
Tickling the feet of running children
I am the church bell on funeral mornings
And the silence after nervous laughter
We are the dewy skin of the rising sun
And the smoky echoes of distant guns

twin1

I think it is God or a higher power. Am I right?

Ali

twin1 wrote:

I think it is God or a higher power. Am I right?

Maybe twin 1

Hope you had a great Thanksgiving...:)

allison

Ali

EvilToasterElf wrote:

I will respond with a poem if it's ok with the author

Are we?

I am an army fixed on the line
Awaiting the call to charge
I am a runner on the third mile
With only twenty three to go
I am a tanker dead in the water
Awaiting the aid of a barge
I am the soul of a dying child
Awaiting the last breath to blow
I am the conscience of a drunken driver
Three down and still at large
I am the whispers of the storm
Treating discomfort with a rainbow
I am the shades of a hermit window
Covering pride from the angry stares
I am the glades growing in rows
Tickling the feet of running children
I am the church bell on funeral mornings
And the silence after nervous laughter
We are the dewy skin of the rising sun
And the smoky echoes of distant guns

I like that ete.Mine was more of an obvious look at my personal beliefs
while yours seems to be at an issue of "being".at least thats what it looks like to me.

I am a child lost.
You are the map.
I am a child forsaken.
You are the priest.
I am a child beaten.
You are the justice.
I am a child bleeding.
You are my nurse.

That's what yours translates to me.The original that I wrote takes on a more plain version of a belief system,while yours feels as though "the humble follower".Does that make sense?
allison

pacifier

I thought it was about God when I read it, but then when you asked us to guess what it was about I thought it must have been a trick question si I didn't answer

twin1

Ali wrote:

Maybe twin 1

Hope you had a great Thanksgiving...:)

allison

O.k. do tell? What is it about?

Yes Thanksgiving was nice, I hope you had a good one too )

grooveamatic

I think it's about me.

depopulationINC

i think either a teacher or god...perhaps the father, but that would be too easy.

Ali

Its about God...of course.Or should I say yOUR PERSONAL version of "God".
This poem being about Grooveamtic would be too easy.
All I know is our economy is our economy,and I'm not coming back to this shit.

Being Enlightened

Ali wrote:

Its about God...of course.Or should I say yOUR PERSONAL version of "God".

MY VERY OWN PERSONAL JESUS??? Cool!

I want the Jesus 2000 for Christmas, pleeeeeeeease mommy???


I thought your poem was very sweet, Ali. You know, you could turn that line of thinking into a children's story book or something, really. I really liked that you used a small "i" just to show humility.

Ali

Being Enlightened wrote:

MY VERY OWN PERSONAL JESUS??? Cool!

I want the Jesus 2000 for Christmas, pleeeeeeeease mommy???


I thought your poem was very sweet, Ali. You know, you could turn that line of thinking into a children's story book or something, really. I really liked that you used a small "i" just to show humility.

You can have your Jesus...if they can have their buddah,or their sacred cow,
or their nightmares,BE...As long as I get to buy the wise men a present.:)

EvilToasterElf

Ali wrote:

I like that ete.Mine was more of an obvious look at my personal beliefs
while yours seems to be at an issue of "being".at least thats what it looks like to me.

I am a child lost.
You are the map.
I am a child forsaken.
You are the priest.
I am a child beaten.
You are the justice.
I am a child bleeding.
You are my nurse.

That's what yours translates to me.The original that I wrote takes on a more plain version of a belief system,while yours feels as though "the humble follower".Does that make sense?
allison

Yes all of your lines seem to follow the pattern of bigger to smaller, inconsequential to important, so it follows pretty logically that a higher power would come in. I'm not sure I even have more than a vague feeling about mine, just a sort of scattershot of human emotions - we can be bigger or smaller than ourselves.

Ali

EvilToasterElf wrote:

Yes all of your lines seem to follow the pattern of bigger to smaller, inconsequential to important, so it follows pretty logically that a higher power would come in. I'm not sure I even have more than a vague feeling about mine, just a sort of scattershot of human emotions - we can be bigger or smaller than ourselves.

ete....

I don't know where I fall in...just compelled to write it.We'll see what comes up next though!!!:)