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catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
edited January 2008 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
look at her
stupid girl
inside a cage
of her own making
desire the lock
the key lost
never to be found
pacing wild but confined
a longing tight around her chest
look at her
stupid girl
inside insane
feeding on grief
hear my name
take a good look
this could be the day
hold my hand
lie beside me
i just need to say
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  • JeanieJeanie Posts: 9,446
    ah cate, the things you say. I'm always amazed and humbled. thank you.
    NOPE!!!

    *~You're IT Bert!~*

    Hold on to the thread
    The currents will shift
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    i just calls 'em as i sees 'em. :(
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • JeanieJeanie Posts: 9,446
    yeah, I just sees em but can't speak em. :o
    NOPE!!!

    *~You're IT Bert!~*

    Hold on to the thread
    The currents will shift
  • TrixieCatTrixieCat Posts: 5,756
    Jeanie wrote:
    yeah, I just sees em but can't speak em. :o
    aw...that was so cute Jeanie! Hope you are hanging in there.
    Cause I'm broken when I'm lonesome
    And I don't feel right when you're gone away
  • biffy clyrobiffy clyro Posts: 148
    Absolute garbage.did a 14 year old write this?

    nothing more thatn cliched' soundbytes.Vile.
  • Steve DunneSteve Dunne Posts: 4,965
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

    wow...looks like we have a poetic critic here!

    feel free to contribute your own original work
    I love to turn you on
  • JeanieJeanie Posts: 9,446
    Steve Dunne wrote:
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

    wow...looks like we have a poetic critic here!

    feel free to contribute your own original work


    Yeah, don't encourage him thanks. :p Aside from a total lack of grace, clearly there are issues with spelling, reading and writing english and comprehension. I don't want to be tortured by the mediocrity of any poetry that might be presented. :)
    NOPE!!!

    *~You're IT Bert!~*

    Hold on to the thread
    The currents will shift
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    biffy clyro wrote:
    Absolute garbage.did a 14 year old write this?

    nothing more thatn cliched' soundbytes.Vile.


    good to have you back biffy. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
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