knowing

catefrances

tired eyes
morning disguise
sun creeping in through
the open window
stretch and yawn
and find my feet
every morning i see her
her face in the window
as i pass by
sometimes i'd wonder
what was going on
in that head of hers
other times i just
wouldn't care
couldn't get up the nerve to bother
i saw enough to know
that no one worked out
what was going on inside her mind
her body carried a weight around
followed her around
that dragged her down
waiting for her to fall
to pull her under
she never smiled
black eyes empty
i wiped the steam
from the bathroom mirror
when i looked
i saw her
she was me
and
i was her.

Being Enlightened

I like this, catefrances, it's sad and I could easily see this girl going through the motions.

In all honesty, I think you could end it after this:

"i wiped the steam
from the bathroom mirror"

I understood that it was the same person after that, and it hit me hard. I think in adding the lines after that part, it detracts from the overall feeling--it's too spelled out for us and I just dont' think it's necessary. Just my opinion, of course.