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catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
edited December 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
fuck you all
it's time to go
i hope never to return
the compromises that you made
made my insides burn
the lies that form upon your lips
the silence that you kept
the way you turned your back on me
were never things i could accept
i'd sit alone inside my room
and think of ways to leave
as all the dreams i thought i had
were crushed beneath your feet
your face became my nightmare
your presence froze my soul
but just one thing you couldn't take
it remained under my control
i chose the time
i chose the place
i even chose the how
so fuck you all
you had your chance
my leaving time is now.
hear my name
take a good look
this could be the day
hold my hand
lie beside me
i just need to say
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  • trinityelizatrinityeliza Posts: 426
    you sound suicidal.... i've been there man/woman... plz pm me????
    Put me in coach...I'm ready to
    Fuck up...the USA...
    Look at me...I can rig...
    The presidency!!!!
  • FedericoFederico Posts: 7,916
    yes...if it feels as real as it sounds, you might be in need of some friendly support...if you are willing to, we are all here to help each others, ok?

    be well,
  • imspinninimspinnin Posts: 933
    Ooooooo....I know a few people I could send this too!! :D
    If I could be anything in the world I would be your teardrop...I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheeks, and die on your lips.
  • FedericoFederico Posts: 7,916
    imspinnin wrote:
    Ooooooo....I know a few people I could send this too!! :D


    mmm..what do you mean?
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,265
    It's been a good 24 years since I've been suicidal (yeah!). Are suicidal people that coherent? In fact, aren't suicidal people "content" right before they go - they have a plan, and are ready.

    I think the poem is clear, without being too dramatic. Well done.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • imspinninimspinnin Posts: 933
    Federico wrote:
    mmm..what do you mean?
    some old "friends" who rubbed me the wrong way...I will probably never see again...live and learn!!
    When reading this I didn't think of it as suicide...it was more as like getting F*cked by someone you trusted...
    If I could be anything in the world I would be your teardrop...I would be born in your eyes, live on your cheeks, and die on your lips.
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    imspinnin wrote:
    When reading this I didn't think of it as suicide...it was more as like getting F*cked by someone you trusted...


    no it's about suicide.

    but i'm okay. thanks for the concern. but you know if i was gonna do it i would, i wouldn't write about it.
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • trinityelizatrinityeliza Posts: 426
    imspinnin wrote:
    some old "friends" who rubbed me the wrong way...I will probably never see again...live and learn!!
    When reading this I didn't think of it as suicide...it was more as like getting F*cked by someone you trusted...


    yeh- i like that fresh point of view... it's an exhilarating piece, dear... truly.
    Put me in coach...I'm ready to
    Fuck up...the USA...
    Look at me...I can rig...
    The presidency!!!!
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