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bottled violence

catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
edited March 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
he drinks to numb
the pain he inflicts
on her when she
steps out of line.
she ignores his words
and pays the price.
a bruise blossoms under her eye.
she cries alone
cause no one cares
she doesn't tell a soul
she says she tripped
and fell and they believe.
he drinks his bottle
and aims the empty
squarely at her head.
the pills she swallows
don't do a thing
and she wishes she was dead.
one late night he
came home angry,
a storm washing through the door.
she braced herself
and stood her ground
and yelled at him, NO MORE!!!
inside she prayed
he'd heed her plea.
he looked at her
with a grotesque smile
and brought her to her knees.
she had the nous
to lay down dead
and still now he drinks
to numb the pain
but she won't step
out of line again.
hear my name
take a good look
this could be the day
hold my hand
lie beside me
i just need to say
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  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    lose control of your body
    beat the shit out of somebody
    Half-shut eyes don't see who you hit
    You don't take any shit
    Go out and fight, fight
    Go out and fight, fight
    Go out and fight, fight
    Bottled Violence

    ;)
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    i dont like this guy in your poem..i do like your poem..emotional hitting a
    nerve..thank you for sharing..
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."
    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    Intense. The best word to describe this writing.
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  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    Jeremy1012 wrote:
    lose control of your body
    beat the shit out of somebody
    Half-shut eyes don't see who you hit
    You don't take any shit
    Go out and fight, fight
    Go out and fight, fight
    Go out and fight, fight
    Bottled Violence

    ;)

    i got the title for this one from a book i'm reading at the moment. the book is called dance of days and it's about the punk scene in DC. i can't remember who sang the song and needless to say i haven't heard it. i just thought the title spoke to me. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    catefrances wrote:
    i got the title for this one from a book i'm reading at the moment. the book is called dance of days and it's about the punk scene in DC. i can't remember who sang the song and needless to say i haven't heard it. i just thought the title spoke to me. :)
    It's Bottled Violence by Minor Threat. its a really good song. you should check it out if you are interested in DC punk. Ian MacKaye from Minor Threat was also in Embrace, the band that had a song that your book took its title from.
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    for a while yesterday i was thinking maybe it was fugazi. so i googled and discovered that lo and behold it was minor threat, so i was pretty darn close. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • Jeremy1012Jeremy1012 Posts: 7,170
    catefrances wrote:
    thanks jeremy

    for a while yesterday i was thinking maybe it was fugazi. so i googled and discovered that lo and behold it was minor threat, so i was pretty darn close. :)
    you're welcome, and thank you. this thread reminded me to listen to Minor Threat's first EP again and I've been in a pretty energetic mood ever since :D

    anyway, I thought your poem was very good.
    "I remember one night at Muzdalifa with nothing but the sky overhead, I lay awake amid sleeping Muslim brothers and I learned that pilgrims from every land — every colour, and class, and rank; high officials and the beggar alike — all snored in the same language"
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