Love Sonnet I

DriftingInThinAir

Hey fellow jammers! I'm a new member to the pit, and came across this and thought it was incredibly cool that everyone is sharing their thoughts through poetry. I'm a huge fan of Shakespeare, and write a lot of sonnets when inspired. I thought i would share some with you all. I know some people think sonnets are not meant for today's age, but i think it is a brilliant form of poetry that is meaningful in any time. Anyhow, this is the first one i'd like to share, and hopefully i can continue to post more over time.

Beloved

Love hath rendered many virtues within,
Yet in my life fear engagement throughout.
Commitment, so tempting, yet is it sin
To build a bond that is so filled with doubt?
My love, so far, denies her loving kiss.
While others become my sight I forget
This love I hope forever I won’t miss;
Or else be drowned in a sea of regret.
An angel of tempt may pursueth me,
Yet I’ll hold firm, like a brick in a wall.
And in my new sight, actually see,
What lies in her that is lackèd in all.
Wait, I will, for my dear love that is true.
All others, I smile, and bid thee adieu.



I wrote this about a girl I thought I was in love with who moved away and we swore we would be together after college. Well, life happened, I met someone else I've fallen more in love with, and we've been together for over a year now.

Let me know what you all think. Thanks!

Peace,
Eric

Edveddmfc

That's amazing.
really nice.
I am not much of a formalist, but i do appreciate the work.
I prefer free verse, but this is rockin'!

FancyFacade

that's good. thanks for sharing.