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Diary Part 1

burnin-candleburnin-candle Posts: 158
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It's been a long time since I posted here. One of the poems I wrote for an album called "Tales from the East". If it sucks, blame the fact that I'm Japanese. lol Here goes....

The sun didn't greet me today, I hate it when that happens
Especially after the moon made faces at me late in the evening
And I hate it when I have to walk out in the middle of the night, just to stop myself from crying
It feels like every leaf is spying
And the wind on my cheek is only lying...
Today, the waves looked so fucking inviting
Why won't these dark thoughts stop their biting
At least when I'm writing...
I know I can keep fighting if someone opens their mind and reminds me that I'm not just some number on the annual grade paper and I'm just fine
Maybe it takes time....
But time will only make me feel lonelier than I imagined
Only makes me think twice about the belt I've already fastened
For the ride out of this world...
No, I don't think the solution to this is an honest girl
Though I am in need of someone who can believe in these words.
Mr know-it-all is only going to read out the pages
There's no fucking space for a mind with twisted rages
Ah blame the young age, like I'm growing out of this
There's no pure bliss in the middle of this hopelessness
Of schools saying it's the parents' fault and the parents saying it's the schools' fault
But who the fuck's listening to these thoughts?
I'm fucking lost...
And I'm too tired now to find my way out
This pen has done enough screaming of my lousy doubts
Maybe tomorrow they'll notice the pain
But then again, they'll probably think I'm just insane....
"If hope can grow from dirt like me, it can be done"

If you can't get high on purely music and the sounds that you hear, you're missing out on something.
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  • tsopotelbatsopotelba Posts: 80
    This reminds me of the Streets....
  • burnin-candleburnin-candle Posts: 158
    tsopotelba wrote:
    This reminds me of the Streets....

    Am I supposed to take that as a compliment?

    Because when I was writing this I did not have the Streets in mind....
    "If hope can grow from dirt like me, it can be done"

    If you can't get high on purely music and the sounds that you hear, you're missing out on something.
  • tsopotelbatsopotelba Posts: 80
    burnin-candle wrote:
    Am I supposed to take that as a compliment?

    Because when I was writing this I did not have the Streets in mind....

    Just an observation... it seems to be in the same sort of grim narrative vein that's been in the few songs I've heard of theirs. That's just what came to mind when I read this, that they're lyrics.
  • blueinthefaceblueintheface Posts: 153
    i truly enjoyed it. im not sure if these are song lyrics or just a straight out poem, but it would seem to work more as a poem. some really good lines though, like

    "No, I don't think the solution to this is an honest girl
    Though I am in need of someone who can believe in these words.
    Mr know-it-all is only going to read out the pages
    There's no fucking space for a mind with twisted rages"
    "be a philosopher but, amid all your philosophy, be first a man" - david hume

    Mitch Hedberg- RIP 1968-2005. your jokes have laughed me through a lot. I thank you.
  • LeaderOfMenLeaderOfMen Posts: 110
    Do you write with your left hand?
    I will make the world a better place...with my own, two hands.
  • burnin-candleburnin-candle Posts: 158
    tsopotelba wrote:
    Just an observation... it seems to be in the same sort of grim narrative vein that's been in the few songs I've heard of theirs. That's just what came to mind when I read this, that they're lyrics.

    oh, then I agree with ya. I guess it's more a spoken word piece than a poem, and it's pretty personal as well, so it might go better when read out. Thanks for reading though, I really appreciate the comments!
    "If hope can grow from dirt like me, it can be done"

    If you can't get high on purely music and the sounds that you hear, you're missing out on something.
  • burnin-candleburnin-candle Posts: 158
    LeaderOfMen wrote:
    Do you write with your left hand?

    No, I write with my left foot. Why?
    (this one I wrote with my right hand ;))
    "If hope can grow from dirt like me, it can be done"

    If you can't get high on purely music and the sounds that you hear, you're missing out on something.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Posts: 12,223
    I like the idea of spying leaves. I can hear that song "Whispering Grass". Is there a Part Two?
  • LeaderOfMenLeaderOfMen Posts: 110
    burnin-candle wrote:
    No, I write with my left foot. Why?
    (this one I wrote with my right hand ;))

    Just wondering, to you your views seem different from the norm. Not like any other. I ve been told that in some cases Left handed people think a little differently then others. Just wondering if that was the case.

    But nevermind
    I will make the world a better place...with my own, two hands.
  • burnin-candleburnin-candle Posts: 158
    FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:
    I like the idea of spying leaves. I can hear that song "Whispering Grass". Is there a Part Two?

    Thanks. I'll post part two later on.
    And LeaderofMen, I probably do think quite differently, but let me remind you that these poems are based on life over here, so that itself is probably a lot different.
    "If hope can grow from dirt like me, it can be done"

    If you can't get high on purely music and the sounds that you hear, you're missing out on something.
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