Eddie makes me write--you should too

Traver DiDiminicoTraver DiDiminico Posts: 185
Merlot

To be here is insane
You make sense
Your existence is validated
I am trying
Perhaps I can achieve such a thing
It's too late to tell tonight
I'll let you know tomorrow
Right now I'll just let it burn
Inside, on top, I let the warmth creep
I'll fade quitely, let the dream sleep.
A smile leans across my face
Telling me there's still time

Untitled

I am filled with Joy.
But I am overcome with Sorrow.
For that which is my essence,
my purpose, belongs not to me.
Suppose that I could be
that which I adore?
Perhaps I would not recede from the world.
Oh, but to listen and curl up in a ball,
lost in the expanse.
That is where I am found.
Among the ranks of the unnecessary,
twisting and thrashing to be named.
But it is not my name I wish to be called.
I long only for the chance to affect her.

It's Snowing Tuesday Night

Tingle, Tingle, Tingle-my brain with my soul begins to mingle. Inside the movie begins to play,
but outside I wait-it's here I want to stay.
Perhaps I'll just peek inside and listen, though,
or catch a glimpse-a preview of what's in stowe.
And it is that which I desperately try to reveal:
the very thing that most try to conceal.
But my failures-each more grandiose than the last-
commit me further and further into their grasp.
Until soon I will be no more than a whisper:
a sad, old, delusional mister.
But always I remember the glimpses I am given
and the glorious revelation that wells up from within.
I shiver a shiver not made of cold,
but from a touch so many centuries old.
And I felt as though I would explode!
And I felt as though I would explode!

Where Are You Going?

Onward and Upward
Across town and down
the highways and byways
of the great state of change
Away from Oz
with no land in sight
though I row with both arms
My muscles ache
as the wind screams
The water becoming clearer
as the silt settles
The calm grows
along side my anticipation
I go now to ride the breakers
into the new found shore

Let It Begin

I feel that the world is so large I want to scream.
Not a scream of anger or pain or agony or despair,
but a joyful
"I am here!"
that begins in my groin and resonates
up through my chest, gaining strength
before it bursts from my mouth
like a faucet on full--Damn the water is hot.
And so I find myself alive.
To wander certainly is not to wander
and therefore I am uncertain in life.
If there was I chair in which I could comprehend,
I would stand always and embrace the path.
Meaning is not given but earned.
I have little but require much.
If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
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Comments

  • It's a pleasure to read words that suggest such a life force.

    Thank you, Traver. :)
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    I could find repose
    in prose
    I could find in peals
    some meals
    I could strew your path
    with petals
    and mow your lawn
    on wheels

    / it was and always will be a pleasure to read your peoms
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • SoLATisASoLATisA Posts: 215
    very lovely writings....

    and eddie makes me write too.....

    he ties me to a chair and pistol whips me until i write him something... he can be so cruel sometimes!
  • exhaleexhale Posts: 185
    amazing
    Write. Wind each new thought upon the stream;
    and in its contradiction of response,
    Or seeming stagnance, see that rippled gleam
    That might suggest true movement. If you sense
    a hidden wave in what seems blanket still,
    Write more, wind each desire, and you'll see
    The willows nod and rustle, and you will
    hear the rushing babble of the free
    gush of water, brimming, charged with light
    That is your reader's understanding heart.
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    For some reason I read the Merlot with last exit in my head and it seemed to fit somehow, it's good to use music as inspiration.
  • Originally posted by EvilToasterElf
    For some reason I read the Merlot with last exit in my head and it seemed to fit somehow, it's good to use music as inspiration.

    Do you mean you heard last exit musically or you felt that the content was simlilar to that wonderful lead off track?
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • BuruBuru Posts: 8,473
    good poems!!
    I specially liked Merlot and Untitled, but there's force in all of them.

    Welcome new poet :)
    y la banda de Guille... cuando toca?
  • Here you are and here I am
    Here we meet and now we stand
    to turn and face the world
    I am running out of time
    You are leaving me behind
    Cause you won't dance with the girl...

    You won't remember me
    I'm just a fading dream
    But I know your name is mine
    So I'll see you again...one more time

    Bring it up now one more time
    Take a look--the other side
    Maybe I will see myself
    Everyday I live my life
    Every step I pay the price
    Maybe I won't need your help

    You won't remember me
    I'm just a fantasy
    But I know your name is mine
    So I'll see you again...one more time

    As the days turn into years
    As your skin soaks up my tears
    A new seed will grow
    As the roots take hold of your heart
    Toward your soul the branches part
    You will learn to sing again

    And you will remember me
    I'll be where ever you sing
    And I know your name is mine
    So I'll see you again...one more time


    I'm interested to hear what people think this song is about. It's not always clear to me how translucent/opaque my writing is.

    Appreciate it.

    Peace Out
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • BinFrogBinFrog Posts: 7,309
    Eddie influenced a poem I wrote which is actually on the Synergy site.

    It's the bottom one (from my old email address SlingFrog@aol.com)

    http://www.sonymusic.com/artists/PearlJam/fanscene/poet4.html
    Bright eyed kid: "Wow Typo Man, you're the best!"
    Typo Man: "Thanks kidz, but remembir, stay in skool!"
  • anOmisanOmis Posts: 223
    Originally posted by BinFrog
    Eddie influenced a poem I wrote which is actually on the Synergy site.

    It's the bottom one (from my old email address SlingFrog@aol.com)

    http://www.sonymusic.com/artists/PearlJam/fanscene/poet4.html


    really nice writting BinFrog! i think it deserves its own thread in here!

    TRAVEL DIDI..i enjoyed reaDIng all yer poems..but yer last one captured my breath!
    ~~dont mind yer make up, just make up yer mind~~

    ~~its better to be hated for who you are than be loved for who you are not~~

    F.ZAPPA
  • Originally posted by BinFrog
    Eddie influenced a poem I wrote which is actually on the Synergy site.

    It's the bottom one (from my old email address SlingFrog@aol.com)

    http://www.sonymusic.com/artists/PearlJam/fanscene/poet4.html


    very nice work...thought provoking (at least for me)
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • just wanted to bring these up agian for some more critque. My ego could use the abuse.
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • PJfaninmainePJfaninmaine Posts: 216
    Very nice writing Traver! I just sit here baffled at all the wonderful poetry on this site. So much talent! Yes Eddie does inspire me to write also. Also I love Nickelback, they inspire me also. But for the most part expereinces in my life whether good or bad inspire me also. Thank you so much Traver for sharing your talent.
    If being sane is thinking there's something wrong with being different....I'd rather be completely fucking mental.
    (Angelina Jolie)
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    okay....for some serious reading.....
    Perhaps I would not recede from the world.
    Oh, but to listen and curl up in a ball,
    lost in the expanse.
    That is where I am found.
    Among the ranks of the unnecessary,
    twisting and thrashing to be named.
    But it is not my name I wish to be called.
    I long only for the chance to affect her.
    As the days turn into years
    As your skin soaks up my tears
    A new seed will grow
    As the roots take hold of your heart
    Toward your soul the branches part
    You will learn to sing again

    And you will remember me
    I'll be where ever you sing
    And I know your name is mine
    So I'll see you again...one more time
    The water becoming clearer
    as the silt settles
    The calm grows
    along side my anticipation
    I go now to ride the breakers
    into the new found shore
    I feel that the world is so large I want to scream.
    Not a scream of anger or pain or agony or despair,
    but a joyful
    "I am here!"
    that begins in my groin and resonates
    up through my chest, gaining strength
    before it bursts from my mouth
    like a faucet on full--Damn the water is hot.

    I found these lines to be especially poignant....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
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