Stock

Traver DiDiminicoTraver DiDiminico Posts: 185
It will happen
It better
Hours like this
Are unreal
It has to stop
IT HAS TO STOP
Please...
If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
Post edited by Unknown User on

Comments

  • It will happen
    It better
    Hours like this
    Are unreal
    It has to stop
    IT HAS TO STOP
    Please...


    It will happen,
    It must
    An hour like this,
    Unreal
    It has to stop
    It has to stop
    Please, I beg
    It must

    What thinks you?

    If you don't mind me asking, what did you feel when you wrote this, and I hope you're ok. I think the original is effective and I like it. It's clear you write with a flow, and from real emotion.
    "Provided there are no pre-conditions"

    Originally posted by MrBrian -

    "one day a country may just liberate america, what will you say then?"
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Go Traver...tell off who you must...just write on!

    allison
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?

  • If you don't mind me asking, what did you feel when you wrote this, and I hope you're ok. I think the original is effective and I like it. It's clear you write with a flow, and from real emotion.

    It's called "Stock" as in taking stock of my life. It's about so much beauty that I cry. It's about my inability to reconcile my life with the majesty of my spirit. It's a cry for help when I know that no one can--I am a result of me. It's the verbalization of a belly flop into an empty pool with a rocky bottom. It's giving up the ghost only to find out it's not mine to give. It's a crude attempt at expressing 37 cuisinarted emotions that I didn't even understand before the blading. AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH! AAH! It's about stepping back, looking around and thinking, "You've got to be kidding me." I don't know. I may never. Ain't life grand?
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    It will happen
    It better
    Hours like this
    Are unreal
    It has to stop
    IT HAS TO STOP
    Please...
    And the pain becomes more intense
    as the contractions increase.
    1 2 3. . . 1 2 3 . . . 1 2 3
    she says over and over to herself.

    Her mother wears a sweater.
    Her sister wears a sweater,
    and she sees icicles hanging near the porch.
    She wears nothing, but sweat.

    She's not willing to go under
    for an epiduraled scheduled.
    1 2 3 . . . 1 2 3 . . . 1 2 3
    She's willing to endure
    just to hear a howl.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    It's about so much beauty that I cry. It's about my inability to reconcile my life with the majesty of my spirit. It's a cry for help when I know that no one can--I am a result of me.

    and then what.....you don't reconcile yourself to oblivious temperance and routine, or to life's vagaries.....you reconcile yourself to your honesty.....to being honest with yourself, even if it makes you sad, and your unhappiness urges you to conform, to pretend.....you don't conform......you recognise that beauty in everything, which in itself is painful, and like Icarus you reach for the sun.....I'm only trying to persuade myself.....as I write this for you.....that there is a pinnacle of perfection that the soul strives for.....like a kind of alchemy of tests and refinement.....and it's only when we make choices which have integrity, and when we are true to ourselves, even if we are scoffed, that we can reach this pinnacle......there's nothing pointless about life.....even your majestic spirit knows that
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    and then what.....you don't reconcile yourself to oblivious temperance and routine, or to life's vagaries.....you reconcile yourself to your honesty.....to being honest with yourself, even if it makes you sad, and your unhappiness urges you to conform, to pretend.....you don't conform......you recognise that beauty in everything, which in itself is painful, and like Icarus you reach for the sun.....I'm only trying to persuade myself.....as I write this for you.....that there is a pinnacle of perfection that the soul strives for.....like a kind of alchemy of tests and refinement.....and it's only when we make choices which have integrity, and when we are true to ourselves, even if we are scoffed, that we can reach this pinnacle......there's nothing pointless about life.....even your majestic spirit knows that

    bullseye. I have a front row spot on the bench in your choir. Often times I find that my writing is completely at odds with my conclusions. Kind of like the poem is my cathartic vehicle, my written thought process that got me to where I am. However, the end result is with me and not conveyed in the poem. I think this is how it should be. I don't want to put morals/definite statements/proclaimations/lectures,etc., at the end of my poems. The reason I mention this is that from time to time I sense that some people's responses to my postings address me rather than my work. As well-intentioned and natural as this may be, I post material here to share that cathartic process, the art itself, not because I need affirmation, guidance, or worry (again, I understand the intention and it is most noble and appreciated, but damn it if I don't try to call 'em as I see 'em). I'm afraid that I am cataclismically failing to properly express myself, but I have complete faith that you guys will understnd anyway.

    Cheers.

    P.S. - ISN, my first two sentences are in responce to you, the rest is sans direction. Let me just say that your post plucked all my right strings.
    If there was a chair in which I could comprehend, I would stand always and embrace the path
Sign In or Register to comment.