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SoundSound Posts: 579
edited March 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Shoots out
of my mind the idea
wich is going to make
my life filled with meaning
and be granted with
things that never had
crossed my brain before
and make it the goal
to happen again
so i will understand that
when i speak
others will listen
and count on that
the next time
shoots out
of my mind the idea
wich is going to make
my life filled with meaning...
It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

Jim Carrol
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  • August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
    this is a great poem i really love it, i wish my poems could be more like this one mine just rhyme alot:) peace and love sound:)
    whats good for the goose is good for the gander
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    everybody has a different style

    i can't rhyme, don't know how.

    i wish i could write like you
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    Sound your poem filled me up like whipped cream in the middle! Pretty Christmas words.
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    i love when things come out of the blue.


    thak you my dear
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    Originally posted by Sound
    i love when things come out of the blue.



    So do I!
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    such as your apearence in the pit as a prize to sudden inspiration of a force wishing that i keep going
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • August stormAugust storm Posts: 186
    Originally posted by Sound
    everybody has a different style

    i can't rhyme, don't know how.

    i wish i could write like you
    thank you so much sound often i feel like my poems are too much like i childs book only with some adult content and of course from an adults mind:)
    whats good for the goose is good for the gander
  • bambi girlbambi girl Posts: 406
    that is beautiful sound, really beautiful. you amaze me with your english...its so good. :)
  • BhagavadGitaBhagavadGita Posts: 1,748
    Originally posted by Sound
    such as your apearence in the pit as a prize to sudden inspiration of a force wishing that i keep going




    "One of these days I'm going to chop you up into little pieces!"


  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    chop me into little pieces



    i'm curious
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    Things are going great






    beautiful
    night
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    "One of these days I'm going to chop you into little pieces"

    PINK FLOYD

























    wich song?
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • seekitseekit Posts: 73
    thank you Sound, i write the same what shoots out............
    i love it.
    Seek It
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    it was the case with this poem
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    what did you mean by it Gita?
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    "shoots out
    of my mind the idea
    wich is going to make
    my life filled with meaning
    and be granted with
    things that never had
    crossed my brain before
    and make it the goal
    to happen again
    so i will understand that
    when i speak
    others will listen
    and count on that
    the next time
    shoots out
    of my mind the idea
    wich is going to make
    my life filled with meaning"


    the planet kryton fell
    and all was lost but one child and a glowing green crystal...
    and ice shot out of glacial snow
    all around
    and built a fortress
    and one man's life
    was filled with meaning












    (i checked several times for the word ice in your poem, and couldn't find it... but i just felt that it was there)


    nice obscure imaging there, sound, thank you :)
    ~all is full of love~
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    thank you T
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    no no no, thank you :)
    ~all is full of love~
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    you don't have a signature?
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
    you know, i guess i don't...







    lemme find one...


    :)
    ~all is full of love~
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    i'm so happy
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
  • Ok2GoOk2Go Posts: 102



    ....happy.....awwww......out of the blue.

    "and then, one Thursday, nearly two thousand years after one man had been nailed to a tree for saying how great it would be to be nice to people for a change, a girl sitting on her own in a small cafe in Rickmansworth suddenly realized what it was that had been going wrong in the world all this time, and she finally knew how the world could be made a good and happy place. This time it was right and no one had to get nailed to anything. Sadly, before she could get to a phone to tell anyone about it, a terrible stupid catastrophe occurred, and the idea was lost forever."

    Hitchhikers Guide to the Galaxy
  • SoundSound Posts: 579
    happy i knew you would answer back
    It was a dream, not a nightmare. A beautiful dream I could never imagined in a thousand nods. I saw this girl next to me, she wasn't beautiful until she smiled. And I felt that smile come at me in heat waves following. Soaking through my body and out my finger tips in shafts of color. And I knew somewhere in the world, somewhere, that there was love for me.

    Jim Carrol
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